Dribbles And Drabbles
Viewing comments for Chapter 21 "Bobcat"A Collection Of Mini Stories
10 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This fifty-word story, Bobcat, has the required word count and seems to be showing us a real bobcat avoiding capture, a woman reacting like a wild animal to escape her assailant, or something more ultra-natural.
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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This fifty-word story, Bobcat, has the required word count and seems to be showing us a real bobcat avoiding capture, a woman reacting like a wild animal to escape her assailant, or something more ultra-natural.
Comment Written 03-May-2022
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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Appreciate your comments and the review.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
The picture is a ruse but the demon in your story was a muse, right? I was confused with my first reading but realized on the second try the picture was deceptive and the villainess in the alley was either a spirit or a well-equipped hooker.
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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The picture is a ruse but the demon in your story was a muse, right? I was confused with my first reading but realized on the second try the picture was deceptive and the villainess in the alley was either a spirit or a well-equipped hooker.
Comment Written 03-May-2022
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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Appreciate the review. Glad you enjoyed this posting.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
These cats are wild and dangerous, although they look so cute. Your irony made me smiles here, few words painting a terrifying scene, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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These cats are wild and dangerous, although they look so cute. Your irony made me smiles here, few words painting a terrifying scene, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 02-May-2022
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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Appreciate the review.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Was someone approaching the bobcat surroundings? Bobcats and feral cats have special spots in their ranges that they use consistently. They have safe, inner sanctums and include well-hidden shelters for secure napping.
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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Was someone approaching the bobcat surroundings? Bobcats and feral cats have special spots in their ranges that they use consistently. They have safe, inner sanctums and include well-hidden shelters for secure napping.
Comment Written 02-May-2022
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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Glad you enjoyed this posting appreciate the review.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the 50 Worder writing prompt contest. You did a good job with the Word count and the story flow. A clear beginning and end.
The story is funny, I liked it.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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Excellent entry for the 50 Worder writing prompt contest. You did a good job with the Word count and the story flow. A clear beginning and end.
The story is funny, I liked it.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-May-2022
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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Appreciate the review.
Comment from Haylee Hemphill
Hello!
This is well written. For being a short read, it was intriguing. I hope you continue to share your work with our community and others.
One Love
Haylee
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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Hello!
This is well written. For being a short read, it was intriguing. I hope you continue to share your work with our community and others.
One Love
Haylee
Comment Written 02-May-2022
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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Glad you enjoyed this posting. Appreciate the review.
Comment from irishauthorme
Hmm, reads like the tables were turned on unsuspecting Carlton.
She is a senorita wandering aimlessly(No doubt as a ruse?), but she attacks him like a feral bobcat in heat, her claws and teeth ripping his flesh apart.
Made me wonder exactly what she was, not a vampiress, they are after just blood.
A female werewolf?
Hmmm...
irish
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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Hmm, reads like the tables were turned on unsuspecting Carlton.
She is a senorita wandering aimlessly(No doubt as a ruse?), but she attacks him like a feral bobcat in heat, her claws and teeth ripping his flesh apart.
Made me wonder exactly what she was, not a vampiress, they are after just blood.
A female werewolf?
Hmmm...
irish
Comment Written 29-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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Glad you enjoyed this posting. Appreciate the review.
Comment from Malcolm Rothery
I have not attempted anything less than 100 words yet so well done for managing to get an atmosphere into your story.
I do wonder if the opening would be better as; "The senorita wandered aimlessly..."
and I do not think the word 'ferociously' is needed at the end - just the hiss is enough.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2022
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I have not attempted anything less than 100 words yet so well done for managing to get an atmosphere into your story.
I do wonder if the opening would be better as; "The senorita wandered aimlessly..."
and I do not think the word 'ferociously' is needed at the end - just the hiss is enough.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2022
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Eliminating ferociously would make the entry 49 not 50 words. Therefore, no can do.
Comment from jessizero
I loved the twist at the end of your story! You built up the reader's expectations, then pulled that ending! Congratulations on that, and thanks for sharing it here.
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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I loved the twist at the end of your story! You built up the reader's expectations, then pulled that ending! Congratulations on that, and thanks for sharing it here.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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Appreciate the review. Glad you enjoyed this posting.
Comment from JoannaN
I like the fast pace of the story. You managed to tell a whole story in no more than 50 words. I wish you good luck during your contest. Well done. :)
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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I like the fast pace of the story. You managed to tell a whole story in no more than 50 words. I wish you good luck during your contest. Well done. :)
Comment Written 29-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 11-May-2022
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Appreciate the review. Thanks!
