The Ballad of Chris
How my sister got too attached to her food34 total reviews
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello Earl a good day to you sir. I hope this finds you well. I liked your story it was a good read. You'd be surprised what memories stick with you over the years. I remember one year I went to North Carolina for the summer and they got a pig and spit roasted it over a pit. Seeing the poor pig split open and just spinning over the fire left me traumatized. There was no way I was eating that. I didn't eat chopped barbeque for at least 1o years. Anyhow good story, good job, and have a good day.
reply by the author on 04-May-2022
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Hello Earl a good day to you sir. I hope this finds you well. I liked your story it was a good read. You'd be surprised what memories stick with you over the years. I remember one year I went to North Carolina for the summer and they got a pig and spit roasted it over a pit. Seeing the poor pig split open and just spinning over the fire left me traumatized. There was no way I was eating that. I didn't eat chopped barbeque for at least 1o years. Anyhow good story, good job, and have a good day.
Comment Written 03-May-2022
reply by the author on 04-May-2022
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Yeah it is funny what sticks with you. I did catch a lot of eat for being a cold-hearted SOB that ate a family pet, I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my story.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your contest entry reads well. It is filled with good imagery
from start to finish. I could see everything as I read. I believe
I would feel the same way as the sister.
Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 03-May-2022
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Your contest entry reads well. It is filled with good imagery
from start to finish. I could see everything as I read. I believe
I would feel the same way as the sister.
Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 02-May-2022
reply by the author on 03-May-2022
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Thank you Jan. I appreciate you taking the time to read this story.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
It is disturbing to eat a pet that's been part of the family and you've had for years. It is very understandable why your sister would not eat the meat. Yesterday and today's scenarios can take a lifetime to overcome sometimes.
reply by the author on 03-May-2022
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It is disturbing to eat a pet that's been part of the family and you've had for years. It is very understandable why your sister would not eat the meat. Yesterday and today's scenarios can take a lifetime to overcome sometimes.
Comment Written 02-May-2022
reply by the author on 03-May-2022
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read this story.
Comment from Bill Schott
This story, The Ballad of Chris, sounds like there might be a sibling evaluation mixed in there. Cecilia was a good person, you were a hard-working guy, and Barb was a useless turd.
reply by the author on 02-May-2022
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This story, The Ballad of Chris, sounds like there might be a sibling evaluation mixed in there. Cecilia was a good person, you were a hard-working guy, and Barb was a useless turd.
Comment Written 02-May-2022
reply by the author on 02-May-2022
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You nailed it right on the head. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review this work.
Comment from Annmuma
This story made me a bit sad. It does meet all of the contest requirements and I wish you luck. a couple of spag issues:
calf which I was to take care. SHOULD BE: calf OF which I was to take care.
ran him out the fence. SHOULD BE: ran him out THROUGH the fence.
I stepped onto the road and yelled his name. It reminded me of a cartoon the way Chris skidded to a stop, turned around, ran in place for a second, and came back to me. GOOD IMAGERY.
ann
reply by the author on 02-May-2022
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This story made me a bit sad. It does meet all of the contest requirements and I wish you luck. a couple of spag issues:
calf which I was to take care. SHOULD BE: calf OF which I was to take care.
ran him out the fence. SHOULD BE: ran him out THROUGH the fence.
I stepped onto the road and yelled his name. It reminded me of a cartoon the way Chris skidded to a stop, turned around, ran in place for a second, and came back to me. GOOD IMAGERY.
ann
Comment Written 02-May-2022
reply by the author on 02-May-2022
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Thank you Ann. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review this work.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Entertaining piece of writing however maybe the thought isn't the problem your sister has but that she is abhorrent to white wrapping paper. Besides, who wraps Christmas steaks in white? Green and red are the colors of Christmas, aren't they? I suggest trying that.
reply by the author on 02-May-2022
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Entertaining piece of writing however maybe the thought isn't the problem your sister has but that she is abhorrent to white wrapping paper. Besides, who wraps Christmas steaks in white? Green and red are the colors of Christmas, aren't they? I suggest trying that.
Comment Written 02-May-2022
reply by the author on 02-May-2022
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Thank you. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review this work.
Comment from Wendy G
I enjoyed very much this story. Written with understanding and insight, but also humour, it was very engaging. Sending good wishes for your success in the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 02-May-2022
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I enjoyed very much this story. Written with understanding and insight, but also humour, it was very engaging. Sending good wishes for your success in the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 02-May-2022
reply by the author on 02-May-2022
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Thank you Wendy. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review this work.
Comment from Haylee Hemphill
Helllo!
This is comical. From the title at first I expected this to possibly be about an eating disorder. That was not the case! I hope you continue to share you work with our community and others.
One Love
Haylee
reply by the author on 02-May-2022
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Helllo!
This is comical. From the title at first I expected this to possibly be about an eating disorder. That was not the case! I hope you continue to share you work with our community and others.
One Love
Haylee
Comment Written 01-May-2022
reply by the author on 02-May-2022
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Thank you Haylee. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review this work.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a well-written story with an amusing problem. Two sentences are more fun than one in this true family story. Only one sentence is a bit awkward. You might write: When we ate our first meal of Chris, Barb, with a . . . Our kids named pigs--Bacon, Ham, and Oscar Meyer, but we should never have allowed a Miss Piggy. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-May-2022
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This is a well-written story with an amusing problem. Two sentences are more fun than one in this true family story. Only one sentence is a bit awkward. You might write: When we ate our first meal of Chris, Barb, with a . . . Our kids named pigs--Bacon, Ham, and Oscar Meyer, but we should never have allowed a Miss Piggy. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-May-2022
reply by the author on 02-May-2022
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Thank you. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review this work.
Comment from karenina
Oh....
OH!
I should have caught on with those first lines ~ Chris being short for Christmas dinner and all.
This is I am sure, something some farm folks are born into and get used to--as for me, I think I was eleven before it dawned on me ground beef did not originate on white styrofoam trays and cello-wrapped.
That put me into full-blown vegetarian mode for all of a week. (Guess you could say I'm a city girl.)
I feel for Cecilia. Still? Gotta admit, your story is funny!
Karenina
reply by the author on 02-May-2022
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Oh....
OH!
I should have caught on with those first lines ~ Chris being short for Christmas dinner and all.
This is I am sure, something some farm folks are born into and get used to--as for me, I think I was eleven before it dawned on me ground beef did not originate on white styrofoam trays and cello-wrapped.
That put me into full-blown vegetarian mode for all of a week. (Guess you could say I'm a city girl.)
I feel for Cecilia. Still? Gotta admit, your story is funny!
Karenina
Comment Written 01-May-2022
reply by the author on 02-May-2022
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Thank you Karenina. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review this work.
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I appreciate your writing!
