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My life in parts.74 total reviews
Comment from A.Lyn
Beautiful and peaceful poem. It reminds you that all the little things/events you might take for granted are exactly what makes your life meaningful.
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Beautiful and peaceful poem. It reminds you that all the little things/events you might take for granted are exactly what makes your life meaningful.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2022
Comment from Paul McFarland
Very nicely done. I liked the ending, but wished you had kept the meter going. That rhythm that you established was just what the doctor ordered.
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Very nicely done. I liked the ending, but wished you had kept the meter going. That rhythm that you established was just what the doctor ordered.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2022
Comment from LisaMay
Thanks for sharing parts of life to show others how satisfying such activities can be - physical adventure, travel, appreciation of animals and nature, allowing time to play, attraction and fidelity... Bless you for the personal nature of your poem and the inspiration it provides to others.
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Thanks for sharing parts of life to show others how satisfying such activities can be - physical adventure, travel, appreciation of animals and nature, allowing time to play, attraction and fidelity... Bless you for the personal nature of your poem and the inspiration it provides to others.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2022
Comment from irishauthorme
Sounds like you have been to many places and seen many things that influenced your life and outlook on life.
Not many will say that they've had a wonderful life because they dwell on the hurdles, pitfalls and that certain bugaboo, the totally unforeseen and unsuspected calamity that left a dent in their armor.
I believe that a cheerful, optimistic outlook leads to better health, and ergo, a longer (Happier!) life.
Enjoyed this!
irish
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Sounds like you have been to many places and seen many things that influenced your life and outlook on life.
Not many will say that they've had a wonderful life because they dwell on the hurdles, pitfalls and that certain bugaboo, the totally unforeseen and unsuspected calamity that left a dent in their armor.
I believe that a cheerful, optimistic outlook leads to better health, and ergo, a longer (Happier!) life.
Enjoyed this!
irish
Comment Written 29-Apr-2022
Comment from Janet Foor
A wonderful poem and a beautiful tribute to you and your wife. I enjoyed reading about the various parts of your life. Excellent message. We are blessed.
Janet
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A wonderful poem and a beautiful tribute to you and your wife. I enjoyed reading about the various parts of your life. Excellent message. We are blessed.
Janet
Comment Written 29-Apr-2022
Comment from GentleWind
What a blessed wife you have!
Loved the flow and especially the rhyme. Keep on rhyming because it is so welcome! You picked an awesome theme! Something that is very much needed...thankfulness! I so enjoyed reading this. Don't stop!
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What a blessed wife you have!
Loved the flow and especially the rhyme. Keep on rhyming because it is so welcome! You picked an awesome theme! Something that is very much needed...thankfulness! I so enjoyed reading this. Don't stop!
Comment Written 29-Apr-2022
Comment from Jennifer Keeley
I enjoyed reading this. I liked each line you stated but also got the sense there was a deeper meaning behind it (like each experience in life and how it may have changed you,etc). Your rhyme scheme also worked well in this poem. Very nice work!
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I enjoyed reading this. I liked each line you stated but also got the sense there was a deeper meaning behind it (like each experience in life and how it may have changed you,etc). Your rhyme scheme also worked well in this poem. Very nice work!
Comment Written 29-Apr-2022
Comment from jessizero
It sounds like you really have had a wonderful, adventurous life. I am impressed by your actions and by the way you wrote about them. You told your tale well, and I enjoyed your rhymes.
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It sounds like you really have had a wonderful, adventurous life. I am impressed by your actions and by the way you wrote about them. You told your tale well, and I enjoyed your rhymes.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2022
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
This is a fun poem to read. You've expressed your autobiography well in poetry. My kids say it isn't poetry unless it rhymes-so yours is. One English teacher notation-It should be "lain" under large shade trees.
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This is a fun poem to read. You've expressed your autobiography well in poetry. My kids say it isn't poetry unless it rhymes-so yours is. One English teacher notation-It should be "lain" under large shade trees.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2022
Comment from lancellot
This is very well made. I like all the different aspects of life that the writer has found joy in, and it seemed he has saved the best for last. For the casual reader it does look like a good life.
Notes:
The alternating rhyme scheme is good. It may be clearer if it were divided into four line stanzas. abcb, efgf ...
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This is very well made. I like all the different aspects of life that the writer has found joy in, and it seemed he has saved the best for last. For the casual reader it does look like a good life.
Notes:
The alternating rhyme scheme is good. It may be clearer if it were divided into four line stanzas. abcb, efgf ...
Comment Written 29-Apr-2022
