Mismatched Lovers
A short poem about mismatched lovers53 total reviews
Comment from Miranda Langston
man... this hit me hard. This is an incredibly deep poem and it's the perfect length. So sad, but so often, this is the case. I look forward to reading your future works. Best of luck to you my friend, and keep up the exceptional work
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2022
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man... this hit me hard. This is an incredibly deep poem and it's the perfect length. So sad, but so often, this is the case. I look forward to reading your future works. Best of luck to you my friend, and keep up the exceptional work
Comment Written 27-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2022
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Thank you. I am touched.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
I find slant rhymes difficult to use and read, but once I came to grips with this poem, I enjoyed it very much, especially the second couplet with its internal rhymes as well as the line-end ones. They gave it a good flow. Kate
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2022
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I find slant rhymes difficult to use and read, but once I came to grips with this poem, I enjoyed it very much, especially the second couplet with its internal rhymes as well as the line-end ones. They gave it a good flow. Kate
Comment Written 27-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2022
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Thank you. I appreciate your comments.
Comment from DeboraDyess
What's up with us girls?!
Good for her - she figured it out, where many do not.
I found one thing for your consideration:
~ He failed to give her, what she wanted most. >> no comma is needed here. :)
Thank you for a poem about one who got away. Intact, I hope. Although since this is a fictional situation, I think we'll just decide that she definitely kept her soul. :)
Blessings,
Deb
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reply by the author on 27-Apr-2022
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What's up with us girls?!
Good for her - she figured it out, where many do not.
I found one thing for your consideration:
~ He failed to give her, what she wanted most. >> no comma is needed here. :)
Thank you for a poem about one who got away. Intact, I hope. Although since this is a fictional situation, I think we'll just decide that she definitely kept her soul. :)
Blessings,
Deb
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2022
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Thank you. In case you did not notice I am a long time feminist.
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I didn't. 🙂 I agree -- WAY too many women try to 'fix' a man AFTER getting into a relationship with him instead of biding their time and seeing who he might evolve into. And then they SSSTTTTAAAAAAYYY. *sigh* Such a sad state!
