Mismatched Lovers
A short poem about mismatched lovers53 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
These two were definitely mismatched. He wanted a hottie, she wanted more but only got half. No wonder she didn't laugh. Too many so called coupled get together for the wrong reason, as you point out. Celebs are more so. I loved the internal rhyming in your well written poem, Nomi. It was really well done. :)) Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2022
  |
These two were definitely mismatched. He wanted a hottie, she wanted more but only got half. No wonder she didn't laugh. Too many so called coupled get together for the wrong reason, as you point out. Celebs are more so. I loved the internal rhyming in your well written poem, Nomi. It was really well done. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment Written 28-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2022
-
Thank you Sandra, you are the best.
Comment from Sarah Tummey
I liked the line about her looking for fulfilment and only being given half. However, I wasn't sure of the part about failing to claim her heart. To me, the fact she made room inside her head/made time for him/listened to his thoughts indicates he had her heart at first.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2022
 |
I liked the line about her looking for fulfilment and only being given half. However, I wasn't sure of the part about failing to claim her heart. To me, the fact she made room inside her head/made time for him/listened to his thoughts indicates he had her heart at first.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2022
-
The intent was simply meant that she gave him a chance. Obviously, he blew it. Thank you for your comments.
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'Mismatched Lovers', is an extremely well-written and heart wrenching piece. With craft and skill. This talented poet has told it as he sees it. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2022
|
'Mismatched Lovers', is an extremely well-written and heart wrenching piece. With craft and skill. This talented poet has told it as he sees it. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2022
-
Thank you Duchess. As you must be aware, it is always a pleasure to hear from you. You remain one of my all time favorite people.
nomi338, from you this is high praise indeed !! Bless you and take care,
the Duchess
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Nomi338,
You have beautifully depicted the state of mismatched lovers / couples.
The poem has impressive wording; smooth flow throughout from the beginning to the end with lovely rhyming scheme.
The last stanza is particularly noteworthy.
Picture complements the theme.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2022
|
Hello Nomi338,
You have beautifully depicted the state of mismatched lovers / couples.
The poem has impressive wording; smooth flow throughout from the beginning to the end with lovely rhyming scheme.
The last stanza is particularly noteworthy.
Picture complements the theme.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2022
-
Thank you so much. I am so thrilled and encouraged by the many compliments from the female reviewers. I may just have gotten it right.
-
Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from LisaMay
There's nothing wrong with trying to make someone laugh, but when there is a failure of recognition of identity apart from being a 'hottie' and a trophy, that is where the mismatching becomes obvious. Your notes reinforce how common it is to disrespect women.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2022
|
There's nothing wrong with trying to make someone laugh, but when there is a failure of recognition of identity apart from being a 'hottie' and a trophy, that is where the mismatching becomes obvious. Your notes reinforce how common it is to disrespect women.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2022
-
Thank you. Like so many of the women who have reviewed this poem. I feel that I may have spoken a word or two of truth.
Comment from Pantygynt
Apparently there is more to a relationship than just sex as the subject of this poem eventually found to his cost. Celbrities seem to be particularly prone to this level of immaturity - strange that.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2022
|
Apparently there is more to a relationship than just sex as the subject of this poem eventually found to his cost. Celbrities seem to be particularly prone to this level of immaturity - strange that.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2022
-
I will confess something to you that I do not wish to broadcast widely. This poem was inspired by the Will Smith and Jada Pinkett relationship. I wonder how many people will pick up on that. Your mention of Celebrities makes me think that some other might do so.
-
Thanks. I will say no more.
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
It takes two to make a relationship work. Some men want trophies instead of true love. Love connects hearts and souls. The soul is invisible, the blind have no idea what the person looks like. Some people with sight are blind, falling for the person on the outside. Pretty on the outside can become plain ugly if rotten on the inside. Thank you for posting this great awareness.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2022
|
It takes two to make a relationship work. Some men want trophies instead of true love. Love connects hearts and souls. The soul is invisible, the blind have no idea what the person looks like. Some people with sight are blind, falling for the person on the outside. Pretty on the outside can become plain ugly if rotten on the inside. Thank you for posting this great awareness.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2022
-
Thank you for your very wise and intelligent assessment.
-
You are welcome, and thank you for the kindness.
Comment from karenina
Absolutely true. This misalignment of needs and values crosses all socio-economic lines...
All ethnic lines, or religions...
My mom used to tell me "A woman marries a man thinking she's going to change him. A man marries a woman thinking she's going to stay the same."
I see her wisdom, but with age I see the real foundational issue is when expectations are on two different moral planes...
"A little Hottie" has wants and needs, A soul that must be nurtured, A heart that must be cherished...
What she wanted is what we all crave. To be seen, valued, loved.
What he wanted was self fulfillment.
As ever a very wise post!
Karenina
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2022
|
Absolutely true. This misalignment of needs and values crosses all socio-economic lines...
All ethnic lines, or religions...
My mom used to tell me "A woman marries a man thinking she's going to change him. A man marries a woman thinking she's going to stay the same."
I see her wisdom, but with age I see the real foundational issue is when expectations are on two different moral planes...
"A little Hottie" has wants and needs, A soul that must be nurtured, A heart that must be cherished...
What she wanted is what we all crave. To be seen, valued, loved.
What he wanted was self fulfillment.
As ever a very wise post!
Karenina
Comment Written 28-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2022
-
My heart swells with appreciation. Rarely has someone so completely gotten my intentions. It is as if I told you beforehand what I was going to write about. Thank you so much.
-
Your writing always resonates with me!
-
Thank you.
Comment from Wendy G
Yes, this is unfortunately far too common. People assume the body is everything - but there is a living feeling human being within that body. And love has to be more than a physical relationship. Well written, with understanding and insight.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2022
|
Yes, this is unfortunately far too common. People assume the body is everything - but there is a living feeling human being within that body. And love has to be more than a physical relationship. Well written, with understanding and insight.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2022
-
Thank you. The favorable comments from the women reviewers are telling me one clear message. Men have got to do a better job of trying to better understand the women in their lives.
Comment from Dawn Munro
First, my comment on your notes -- I agree! Sad, but true. It's all too prevalent.
And now your wee poem -- short, but bittersweet, and a wonderful, wise message. I am reminded of the song, "Take Time To Know Him/Her-Percy Sledge".
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2022
|
First, my comment on your notes -- I agree! Sad, but true. It's all too prevalent.
And now your wee poem -- short, but bittersweet, and a wonderful, wise message. I am reminded of the song, "Take Time To Know Him/Her-Percy Sledge".
Comment Written 28-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2022
-
Thank you so much.
-
It was a pleasure. :)
