Comment from Faith Williams

Excellent

Another excellent chapter. I like the stories within the story. I like the idea of the existence of power in a name. Well-written.

One suggestion to consider:
"I think it would be (wisest) for me to scout the road ahead and then return." I think 'wise might be the better choice here.

I am captivated by the story and looking forward to the next chapter.

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2023

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reply by the author on 24-Apr-2023

I?m glad the stories within the story make sense. They?re a thing that happens now and then, but I do stress over them. Thank you for the feedback on them!

Comment from Kim Kinakin Tuckey

Excellent

This is a very mysterious story. I was able to remember and recognize some of the characters from reading a previous chapter. This story has a lot of great imagery and imagination.

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2022

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reply by the author on 30-Apr-2022

Thank you very much. It's been a lot of work. I apologize for the delay in reply. I hope you have a great day!

Comment from Shirley McLain

Excellent

Excellent chapter. I enjoyed the read. You kept it active and full of tension. I did not see any mistakes. I look forward to reading more of your story. Have a wonderful day. Shirley

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2022

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reply by the author on 30-Apr-2022

Thank you very much, I really appreciate it! I hope you have a great day!