The Last Throes of Summer
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Comment from jessizero
I was confused at first, but then I realized that we live in different hemispheres. I like that your tree clings to Summer as Autumn marches in. Your words of the dancing leaves were beautiful. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2022
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I was confused at first, but then I realized that we live in different hemispheres. I like that your tree clings to Summer as Autumn marches in. Your words of the dancing leaves were beautiful. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2022
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Thanks for the nice review, glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Pantygynt
Here we have a mono-rhyming kouta - the first one to attempt the mono-rhyming form. It creates the picture the poet desires although strictly speaking it is in alternate rhyme unless you count assonance as a form of rhyme which I do.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2022
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Here we have a mono-rhyming kouta - the first one to attempt the mono-rhyming form. It creates the picture the poet desires although strictly speaking it is in alternate rhyme unless you count assonance as a form of rhyme which I do.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2022
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Thanks for the review. I did try interweaves and grieves, but no matter how I formulated it, it didn't (for me) have the same impact: too obviously trying to make it rhyme, as it were.