Summer's Coming
The insects know when summer is on the way.5 total reviews
Comment from LisaMay
Lovely photo. I'll be voting for this one... I enjoyed your use of internal rhyme in the first line, alliteration in the second, and the double meaning in the third. I'd like it even more if I'd written it myself, haha!
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2022
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Lovely photo. I'll be voting for this one... I enjoyed your use of internal rhyme in the first line, alliteration in the second, and the double meaning in the third. I'd like it even more if I'd written it myself, haha!
Comment Written 27-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2022
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Thank you for the read and wonderful compliment. I often think I wish I could write like you.
Comment from F. William Lester
You gave this a very visual feeling. I had a visceral feeling of the coming of summer. Very well done. Thanks for sharing it and good luck in the contest. Stay well.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2022
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You gave this a very visual feeling. I had a visceral feeling of the coming of summer. Very well done. Thanks for sharing it and good luck in the contest. Stay well.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2022
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Thank you for the read and the encouraging review.
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You're welcome.
Comment from L. Kalere
Very clever entry. Nice metaphor with beautiful imagery. The final line is a wonderful turn of words, and you topped it off with a perfect photo.
Excellent.
Linda
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2022
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Very clever entry. Nice metaphor with beautiful imagery. The final line is a wonderful turn of words, and you topped it off with a perfect photo.
Excellent.
Linda
Comment Written 24-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2022
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Thank you for the read and the encouraging review. Much appreciated.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I like the idea of this piece but I think that opening line is a little off. brights just doesn't feel right. Keep it simpler and use lights.
It's a shame as the rest is great. good use of alliteration and the duality of the final line is pretty cool
GMG
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2022
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Hi there,
I like the idea of this piece but I think that opening line is a little off. brights just doesn't feel right. Keep it simpler and use lights.
It's a shame as the rest is great. good use of alliteration and the duality of the final line is pretty cool
GMG
Comment Written 24-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2022
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Thanks for the read, I thought brights would be more unique than lights. But, I may reconsider.
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5, Summer's Coming, has the proper formatting and makes a good use of some pun here with the inference we form from the mention of "wings". Neat.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2022
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This 5-7-5, Summer's Coming, has the proper formatting and makes a good use of some pun here with the inference we form from the mention of "wings". Neat.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2022
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Thank you for the read and the encouraging review. Much appreciated.
