Wouldn't it be funny if...?
encouraging imagination8 total reviews
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
You wrote this poem with a great imagination. It would be hilarious if some of these ideas you mention, would actually happen. I wonder if the dog would give up his shoes for the boy?
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2022
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You wrote this poem with a great imagination. It would be hilarious if some of these ideas you mention, would actually happen. I wonder if the dog would give up his shoes for the boy?
Comment Written 24-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2022
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Thank you, Rosemary!
The dog give the boy back his shoes? I doubt it since he's acting like he doesn't know they were his in the first place. I think the dog's just showing off his English. :)
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Complete and utter nonsense. I mean how can any of these things speak. I got confused at how the dog got the boy's shoes to fit. tee-hee. This was a joy to read, and I wish I could be a boy on your knee when it is being read. Thank you.
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2022
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Complete and utter nonsense. I mean how can any of these things speak. I got confused at how the dog got the boy's shoes to fit. tee-hee. This was a joy to read, and I wish I could be a boy on your knee when it is being read. Thank you.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2022
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shoes don't fit the dog, but since he snitched them from the boy and acts like he doesn't know whose they were, I think he's just showing off his English. And I am tickled to death over your last comment.
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Was the dog? an English Setter? 👀😇
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well, that would have been his native language. No, he was more than likely a German Shepherd who'd just graduated. :)
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🙈👀👌
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the For A Child writing prompt contest. I love the presentation and imagery. Great expresive word choices. The rhymes don't seem forced.
Wow, talking dogs would be such fun.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2022
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Excellent entry for the For A Child writing prompt contest. I love the presentation and imagery. Great expresive word choices. The rhymes don't seem forced.
Wow, talking dogs would be such fun.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2022
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thank you for your comments and for your good wishes.
Comment from lancellot
This is nice and I am sure it will do well in the contest.
I would suggest trying to make sure this stanza four lines instead of five, as it appears. Some of the other lines too. Perhaps reduce the font size or change the view.
Wouldn't it be funny if, along the way you met
A greyhound wearing Nike tennis shoes.
But the boy with the leash had no shoes upon his feet;
You said, "Dog, you're wearing his!" The dog said, "Whose?"
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2022
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This is nice and I am sure it will do well in the contest.
I would suggest trying to make sure this stanza four lines instead of five, as it appears. Some of the other lines too. Perhaps reduce the font size or change the view.
Wouldn't it be funny if, along the way you met
A greyhound wearing Nike tennis shoes.
But the boy with the leash had no shoes upon his feet;
You said, "Dog, you're wearing his!" The dog said, "Whose?"
Comment Written 23-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2022
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I did.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
The stanza featuring the hippo and the monkey - it takes real imagination to come up with that one, lol! This is a terrific poem for kids, with lots of rhyming and "silly" imaginings. I like that you gave the reader a chance to join in the game. Very well done.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2022
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The stanza featuring the hippo and the monkey - it takes real imagination to come up with that one, lol! This is a terrific poem for kids, with lots of rhyming and "silly" imaginings. I like that you gave the reader a chance to join in the game. Very well done.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2022
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thanks, Miss Blue Bird! I appreciate your comments very much!
Comment from Karen Alexandra
This is a clever poem with great imagery that leads into the poem. The poem invites us to think imaginatively of some unusual scenarios that we can easily relate to which keeps the interest in the poem and and the invitation at the end works well to draw you in further. Well done and thank you for submitting this for review. Karen
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2022
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This is a clever poem with great imagery that leads into the poem. The poem invites us to think imaginatively of some unusual scenarios that we can easily relate to which keeps the interest in the poem and and the invitation at the end works well to draw you in further. Well done and thank you for submitting this for review. Karen
Comment Written 23-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2022
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And thank you, Karen for your very nice comments.
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
Thank you for sharing this poem and the story line is great. Also, reading your story gave me an idea on what to write next. Have a great day and stay safe.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2022
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Thank you for sharing this poem and the story line is great. Also, reading your story gave me an idea on what to write next. Have a great day and stay safe.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2022
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Thank you, Carolyn, and I'm glad to be of help! :)
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Thank you.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I love all these suggestions and a child would think them all funny and their choices would surprise us as their personalities are all different, a fun post, I enjoyed the ride here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2022
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I love all these suggestions and a child would think them all funny and their choices would surprise us as their personalities are all different, a fun post, I enjoyed the ride here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 23-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2022
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thanks, Dolly. Being a child at heart, It was fun to write.