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Show, Don't Tell - part IV

the art of dialogue

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Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
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I appreciate this post focusing on writing dialogue. I definitely have a lot to learn on this subject, so this will be printed and referenced often,(smile).
I have been shying away from using dialogue in my work, I will try the exercises that you have suggested.
If you have the time, I would love to get some feedback from you on my work.
My most recent post is titled, "The Cabin".
It's my fourth attempt at flash fiction.


 Comment Written 22-Apr-2022


reply by the author on 23-Apr-2022
    Dialogue can really help to do a lot for the work but experiment and practice until it feels natural, not mundane. G
Comment from Earl Corp
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I found this to be very helpful. I am striving to put more show than tell into my writing. Thank-you for sharing this with us. Very nice job.

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2022


reply by the author on 23-Apr-2022
    It's well worth the effort, Earl. it can make things much more direct and immersive for the reader. G
Comment from Ric Myworld
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Thanks for more of your outstanding and helpful advice that will improve everyone's writing who listens and applies it. I'll definitely try to keep it in mind. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2022


reply by the author on 23-Apr-2022
    Much appreciated, once again. Ric. G
Comment from Cecilia R
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Your chapter addresses the idea of telling with good examples that are easy to understand and relate to your instructions. The piece is well organized and flows smoothly. I felt it strengthen my knowledge of the subject. The 'show, don't tell' concept is talked about a lot, but you are showing it in your examples. Good luck with your book.
Cecilia

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2022


reply by the author on 23-Apr-2022
    It's a pretty big concept and hopefully by breaking it down it becomes more manageable. GMG
Comment from Tom Horonzy
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For whoever is reading this man, take note and incorporate his tips on making dialogue interesting as if you were there and taking part in what is being said.

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2022


reply by the author on 23-Apr-2022
    Cheers, Tom. G
Comment from Shirley McLain
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Thank you for writing this. I learned a few pointers from it. You did excellent work with this series. Would you consider posting this series on my blog? Please let me know if you want me to stop asking. I don't want to be a pest if you are not interested at all. Shirley

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 Comment Written 22-Apr-2022


reply by the author on 23-Apr-2022
    I have another outlet for these, sorry. G
reply by Shirley McLain on 23-Apr-2022
    Not a problem. I won't mention it again. Shirley
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
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This is perhaps the most informative (to me) in this series to date. Above all I learnt that the length of a vocal spurt should be assessed carefully, and grasped from your examples that using tags to state the type of speech can be invaluable (I had always been encouraged to abolish these). I love being brought to re-examine preconceived ideas. Thans as always, Kate xx

 Comment Written 22-Apr-2022


reply by the author on 22-Apr-2022
    Yep, the tag thing is interesting. With everything, it's best to have a balance. Said and asked are the 'go-to' because the brain registers them, notes them and moves on. Other ones can detract too much from what is said to how it's said. It's always a good idea to use them sparingly, as you would with adverb. you can convey tone with word choice and actions, so use a variety. Over-reliance on anything isn't good. lol Many thanks for the great response. G
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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I'll have a go at that sentence and see what I come up with. These exercises are fun and rewarding. This is another excellent piece in your 'Show don't Tell' series, and, I for one, enjoy them. Well done, Gareth. Another page for my Gareth file! :)) Sandra xxx

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 Comment Written 22-Apr-2022


reply by the author on 22-Apr-2022
    Hi Sandra, that's great. i honestly thought these would be more popular but the folks that are reading them are getting something out of them so that's excellent and sort of the point. lol
reply by Sandra Stoner-Mitchell on 22-Apr-2022
    Anything that helps to improve our writing must be worth making an effort to do try it out. My post tomorrow will be rather revealing, but I think I'll have to be very selective with my wording so people see more with their imaginations than me just
    telling them. Lol. You will have to let me know if I pull it off, or where I could improve it. xxx