Courtney Is Missing
A short story of a family's 3 kids & their dog.35 total reviews
Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko
Thanks for sharing this self restitution story that with wisdom put the blame of what Tony did on Leo, a worthy friend of the victim, Grace.
The work highlights a closely knit family of five and a dog; with some of them exhibiting queer idiosyncrasies that obliquely earned someone like Tony the tag of a social misfit.
The work earns its texture through its effective use of anecdotes reminiscent of tolerance enforced rehabilitation.
Excellent work. Bravo.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2022
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Thanks for sharing this self restitution story that with wisdom put the blame of what Tony did on Leo, a worthy friend of the victim, Grace.
The work highlights a closely knit family of five and a dog; with some of them exhibiting queer idiosyncrasies that obliquely earned someone like Tony the tag of a social misfit.
The work earns its texture through its effective use of anecdotes reminiscent of tolerance enforced rehabilitation.
Excellent work. Bravo.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2022
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Thank you very much. I appreciate your wonderful comments.
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Remain Blessed
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello Nom1338 a good day to you sir. I hope this finds you well. That was a good story you came up with, sounds like that was a pretty decent family unit, understanding parents and loving and forgiving siblings, what more could one ask for. Good job!
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2022
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Hello Nom1338 a good day to you sir. I hope this finds you well. That was a good story you came up with, sounds like that was a pretty decent family unit, understanding parents and loving and forgiving siblings, what more could one ask for. Good job!
Comment Written 14-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2022
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Thank you. I appreciate your great assessment of my work.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I'm not entirely sure what the point of the story is. I have a 10 year old girl and she plays with whatever she wants - as any child should be able to do. She also likes to climb trees, play xbox and wear sports clothes... and dresses. She is adamantly a girl despite liking some boy things.
I think the stereotypes of what girls and boys should be or have need to be completely abolished. We made a conscious effort when she was little to put her in neutral colours but she picked pinks & purples later on - now she's into blues.
In the context of the story, it says the mum had no experience of raising a boy, but neither did the dad. Neither of them had any experience of raising girls either so I'm not sure the point of the this.
I know it states in the author notes that we're not to read anything into this but it does raise the question of what the story says. It is completely non-committal which given the nature of the story being told is somewhat surprising, leaving the reader to draw conclusions and wonder what the point is trying to be made.
I think maybe you tried too hard to be non-judgemental in the depiction that it becomes sort of 'meh' and a viewpoint would be of great benefit. it didn't have to be yours or it could have been, but it feels a bit directionless come the end.
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reply by the author on 14-Apr-2022
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Hi there,
I'm not entirely sure what the point of the story is. I have a 10 year old girl and she plays with whatever she wants - as any child should be able to do. She also likes to climb trees, play xbox and wear sports clothes... and dresses. She is adamantly a girl despite liking some boy things.
I think the stereotypes of what girls and boys should be or have need to be completely abolished. We made a conscious effort when she was little to put her in neutral colours but she picked pinks & purples later on - now she's into blues.
In the context of the story, it says the mum had no experience of raising a boy, but neither did the dad. Neither of them had any experience of raising girls either so I'm not sure the point of the this.
I know it states in the author notes that we're not to read anything into this but it does raise the question of what the story says. It is completely non-committal which given the nature of the story being told is somewhat surprising, leaving the reader to draw conclusions and wonder what the point is trying to be made.
I think maybe you tried too hard to be non-judgemental in the depiction that it becomes sort of 'meh' and a viewpoint would be of great benefit. it didn't have to be yours or it could have been, but it feels a bit directionless come the end.
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Comment Written 14-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2022
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The point is, my friend. that here is a brief picture of a family going through some family things, you the reader can draw your own conclusions about what the family is going through, or not. It is entirely up to you. No one is making any judgments.
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That's the issue with this as a story. There's no pov, perspective and no real conclusion.
Comment from Sanku
This is a well written story .The children are characterised realistically .It was very sweet of Grace to protect Toni. She did it cleverly. I enjoyed reading this story
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2022
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This is a well written story .The children are characterised realistically .It was very sweet of Grace to protect Toni. She did it cleverly. I enjoyed reading this story
Comment Written 14-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2022
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Thank you. No judgements, no finger pointing, just a family going through normal growing pains. Grace is a firecracker though. Watch out for her.
Comment from Bridge
A very interesting story. A very different theme, makes one think. I could easily relate to Mary . I'm an only child and wanted a daughter. I have a 13yr old boy , an only child. Very well written.
With regards
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reply by the author on 14-Apr-2022
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A very interesting story. A very different theme, makes one think. I could easily relate to Mary . I'm an only child and wanted a daughter. I have a 13yr old boy , an only child. Very well written.
With regards
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Comment Written 14-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2022
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Thank you. Some do not understand that only children, and children that grow up with only one parent can have their parenting skills affected by that.
