Comment from karenina

Excellent

Cats! Nosy would offend! They are sophisticated and curious, don't you know!
We ought got be flattered if they pay any attention at all!

Giggling...

Karenina

 Comment Written 12-May-2022

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reply by the author on 12-May-2022

That's very true! Every cat I ever knew, affection had to be strictly on their terms LOL :) x

Comment from Father Flaps

Excellent

Hi Debra,
Nosy is right. We have 3 cats left... Chico, Ray-Ray, and Angel. Our wonderful Maine Coon, Roger, passed away a couple of years ago. Angel is pretty laid back, loves my wife. Chico and Ray-Ray are bad boys, into everything. All of a sudden, they'll race through the house! Crazy nuts.
I enjoyed your cinquain poem. You've got the syllable count right. I especially like the alliteration of,
"Nosy Nefertiti"
Good pairing, poem and picture.
I hope you'll try an octogram before the month is through.
Hugs,
Kimbob

 Comment Written 14-Apr-2022

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reply by the author on 14-Apr-2022

Hi Kimbob :) Thanks for your great feedback.
Good to hear about your cats, I'm sure they're part of the family - when I lived at home with my parents, we had two cats, Barney and Treacle - they were absolutely gorgeous and such characters.
Now I need to remind myself what an octogram is and have a go, don't I?!
Best wishes as always, Deb x

reply by Father Flaps on 14-Apr-2022

Dear Deb, I hope this helps...
Here's one of my own octograms, called:
WITCH HAZEL

Witch Hazel failed her flying test.
She crashed her broom.
The worst marks in the wicked west,
they sealed her doom.
Her magic was deniable.
Her spells were unreliable.
Too low, too fast, I would assume.
She crashed her broom.

But Hazel wanted to be best,
the brightest bloom.
With lots of practice, she progressed
and shed her gloom.
She took the test a second time,
but struggled as she tried to climb.
Police blamed alcohol consumed.
She crashed her broom.
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The Octogram was invented by Fanstory member, Sally Yocom.
2 stanzas of 8 lines
The syllable counts should be:
8-4-8-4-888-4; 8-4-8-4-888-4
Each line must be written in iambic meter.
The rhyme scheme for the first stanza:
aBabccbB
for the second stanza:
ababddbB
where the capital B's denote repeated lines, word for word.

reply by the author on 15-Apr-2022

Thank you! That's great! I'll do my best with it :D
Love yours - it's great fun! Debs x

reply by the author on 16-Apr-2022

Challenge met!! x

Comment from Frank Malley

Excellent

"Just Curious" is a clever little poem about a cat with a famous pharaohess's name. (A famous pharaohess wore a brilliant cotton dress; in the stateroom, on the barge, Nefertiti packed a charge...) Ms. White's poem uses sound and rhythm to catch our ears and coax out our smiles. This is an excellent small poem.

 Comment Written 13-Apr-2022

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reply by the author on 13-Apr-2022

Thank you so much, Frank, for your kind feedback :)
Best wishes, Debra

reply by Frank Malley on 13-Apr-2022

you're welcome. Be well Frank

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Just Curious
by Debra White

Lovely Ekphrastic Cinquain. I love cinquain poems...such a beautiful form. I love your presentation too...the cat picture is adorable. It's so much like a cat to do that. Well done.

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2022

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2022

Thank you so much, Gypsy :)
I'm happy you enjoyed this one!
Best wishes, Debra x

Comment from Sally Law

Excellent

A sweet and fun cinquain poem for today. I like the name: Nefertiti. It reminds me of The Ten Commandments. Sending you my best today as always and blessings for your writing endeavors,
Sal XOs

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2022

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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022

Thank you so much, Sal :)
Sending love, Debra x

Comment from nomi338

Excellent

Now really, what did you expect? She is a cat after all, and that is what cats do really. They sit back and observe. I used to get into staring contests with a cat I once claimed as a pet, I think I was more her pet than she was mine. The look of intelligence was so remarkable that I often became uncomfortable and would be forced to look away.

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2022

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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022

LOL! That's cats for you!
Thank you for your feedback, I appreciate it :)
Best wishes, Debra

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

You did a great job on your cinquain, Debra. I enjoyed reading it.
Your third line, the pivot line, works well. So many miss that line.
The picture is precious and your words are well chosen to suit it.
Respectfully, Jan

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2022

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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022

Thank you so much, Jan :) I appreciate your kind feedback.
Best wishes as always, Debra

Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-Nice artwork and presentation, Debra.
-Congratulations on your special recognition, too!
-I have always liked the cinquain. You did a good job with it.
-Good syllable count and topic.
-Effective imagery and rhyme with a lighthearted mood.
-I like the repetition at the end, too.
-Well done.

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2022

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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022

Thank you so much Pam :) It's always lovely to receive your feedback.
Best wishes, Debra

reply by Pam (respa) on 11-Apr-2022

You are very welcome, Debra. I enjoy your work!!

Comment from ~Dovey

Excellent

Hi Debra,

I think the cinquain was the perfect choice for an ekphrastic rendition of this piece of art.

Nefertiti's namesake would be proud.

Great job!

Kim

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2022

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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022

Thank you so much, Kim :) I'm glad you enjoyed this one!
Best wishes, Debra

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

I think you captured the sometimes a little annoying cat that always needs to know what you're doing very well here.

The understated humour still has me smiling.

Excellent addition to your book.

Gloria

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2022

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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022

Thank you so much, Gloria, glad to share a smile with you :)
Best wishes as always, Debra x