Interpretations For Consideration
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "Disengagement"An Ekphrastic Poetry Collection for NaPoWriMo 2022
7 total reviews
Comment from karenina
Love the counting forms...
Better still , love the message.
If we pour yourself all out for others, we parch pur spirit!
Wise words.
It took me most of my life to figure this out!
Karenina
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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Love the counting forms...
Better still , love the message.
If we pour yourself all out for others, we parch pur spirit!
Wise words.
It took me most of my life to figure this out!
Karenina
Comment Written 12-May-2022
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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Hi Karenina :)
It's a hard one, isn't it?
When it's in your nature to nurture and provide for others, it's easy to become taken for granted...
Glad you enjoyed this nonet - not the most light-hearted poem I've ever written, but I had to go with what the artwork made me feel!
Best wishes as always, Debra x
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Yes, The muse sometimes has us face things we'd rather not. I was a carpet for too long--and then moaned about being walked upon. I learned to consider my own needs -- at least some of the time!
Comment from lyenochka
I like the rhymes that you wove into your nonet. I see you had to change the font to force the preferred triangular shape. I feel the lament of a mom who is depended on by everyone and yet not duly appreciated. But it can be anyone who feels this way and sometimes, we do need to break free to take possession of our own time.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2022
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I like the rhymes that you wove into your nonet. I see you had to change the font to force the preferred triangular shape. I feel the lament of a mom who is depended on by everyone and yet not duly appreciated. But it can be anyone who feels this way and sometimes, we do need to break free to take possession of our own time.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2022
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Hi Helen,
Yeah, it was meant to be more of a general taken-for-grantedness that I was trying to get over, although, as a mum, I often feel like the 'invisible glue!'
I did need to fiddle with the font sizes a little to get the right shape for the nonet, but I kinda like the effect that the sizing has on the various line meanings, hope I've explained what I mean properly?!
Thank you for your thoughtful feedback.
Best wishes as always, Debra :)
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Disengagement
by Debra White
Interesting picture and Ekphrastic poem to go with it. A great entry for the Nonet Poetry Contest. I like the presentation and imagery. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2022
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Disengagement
by Debra White
Interesting picture and Ekphrastic poem to go with it. A great entry for the Nonet Poetry Contest. I like the presentation and imagery. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2022
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Thank you so much, Gypsy :)
Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from juliaSjames
You are a true artist, Debra, both in your creative use of words and in the stunning presentations of your poetry. I like this nonet, both the theme and the narrator's unique voice. Best of luck in the contest.
Stay safe and blessed
Hugs, Julia
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2022
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You are a true artist, Debra, both in your creative use of words and in the stunning presentations of your poetry. I like this nonet, both the theme and the narrator's unique voice. Best of luck in the contest.
Stay safe and blessed
Hugs, Julia
Comment Written 09-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2022
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Thank you so much, Julia :) I appreciate your very kind feedback... Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from jessizero
I think I am becoming one of your biggest fans. I love this piece. I have felt this way before. Thank you so much for sharing this here. Keep up the good work, as always.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2022
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I think I am becoming one of your biggest fans. I love this piece. I have felt this way before. Thank you so much for sharing this here. Keep up the good work, as always.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2022
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Thank you so much! I really appreciate your lovely feedback :)
Best wishes, Debra x
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
You have chosen an interesting piece of art for this intruiging ekphrastic poem. What most appealed to me about the poem was your use of different font sizes to change the emphasis / importance of a line. An unusual approach. Kate xx
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2022
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You have chosen an interesting piece of art for this intruiging ekphrastic poem. What most appealed to me about the poem was your use of different font sizes to change the emphasis / importance of a line. An unusual approach. Kate xx
Comment Written 09-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2022
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Thank you so much, Kate, I appreciate your feedback as always :) Best wishes, Debra x
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I did get the feeling that the last word should be "me", but it's your write Debra and I this is one of the best nonets I have ever read as you managed to bring some rhythm to these words with is difficult with the syllable restriction, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2022
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I did get the feeling that the last word should be "me", but it's your write Debra and I this is one of the best nonets I have ever read as you managed to bring some rhythm to these words with is difficult with the syllable restriction, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 09-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2022
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Hello Dolly :)
Thank you for your lovely feedback. I almost made the last word 'me' as it rhymes with the previous two lines, but I decided on 'mine' as the overriding feeling is that of the speaker feeling owned.
Thanks again, love Debra x
