Time Flies
75 words5 total reviews
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
One day an old man and his grandson were walking together. They walked a very long distance on a village road. All of a sudden, the little boy saw a turtle. He grabbed the turtle and wanted the turtle's head to come out so that he could watch it and play ...is that how you play with turtles?
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One day an old man and his grandson were walking together. They walked a very long distance on a village road. All of a sudden, the little boy saw a turtle. He grabbed the turtle and wanted the turtle's head to come out so that he could watch it and play ...is that how you play with turtles?
Comment Written 07-Apr-2022
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the 75 Word Flash writing prompt contest. The word count looks good. You have a beginning, a middle, and an end as required.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
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Excellent entry for the 75 Word Flash writing prompt contest. The word count looks good. You have a beginning, a middle, and an end as required.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
Comment Written 07-Apr-2022
Comment from lancellot
Oh, I get it. Time flies because this is being told from the prospective of a turtle. I didn't see that until the very last line and he spoke of Mamma Turtle. Yes, it all makes sense now. Good idea and nice execution.
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Oh, I get it. Time flies because this is being told from the prospective of a turtle. I didn't see that until the very last line and he spoke of Mamma Turtle. Yes, it all makes sense now. Good idea and nice execution.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2022
Comment from Leann DS
Ha! This was cute. Didn't expect it to be a turtle talking, that's for sure. Your story was concise and well written and the surprise ending was a bonus. Thank you for sharing this. I hope you have a great week.
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Ha! This was cute. Didn't expect it to be a turtle talking, that's for sure. Your story was concise and well written and the surprise ending was a bonus. Thank you for sharing this. I hope you have a great week.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2022
Comment from oliver818
Nice story, I enjoyed reading it. I like how you rewrite a classic story here- it works really well. Thanks for sharing this and have yourself a really great day
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Nice story, I enjoyed reading it. I like how you rewrite a classic story here- it works really well. Thanks for sharing this and have yourself a really great day
Comment Written 06-Apr-2022
