The Reunion
Estranged Mother Meets the Prodigal Daughter20 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
This would have been perfect for that Surprise flash fiction contest they had earlier. I like how you described the location, and then had the narrator redirected to a new place and then gave the dramatic information of meeting with her mother.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2022
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This would have been perfect for that Surprise flash fiction contest they had earlier. I like how you described the location, and then had the narrator redirected to a new place and then gave the dramatic information of meeting with her mother.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2022
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Thank you, Iyenochka. I appreciate your insight and thoughtful review. Thanks for reading, reviewing and rating this work.
Comment from zanya
A story well told, with a sense of anticipation in the air as to what is likely to happen - not a word wasted here - great use made of the 50 words -thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022
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A story well told, with a sense of anticipation in the air as to what is likely to happen - not a word wasted here - great use made of the 50 words -thanks for sharing
Comment Written 09-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022
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Thank you, zanya! I appreciate your thoughtful review and kind comments.
Comment from Debra White
Hello Seville,
I enjoyed reading your post :)
Your description of the property is vivid and the suspense created by your words as we wait for the door to be opened is tangible.
Heartwarming author's note - I'm glad that your friend's reunion with her mother was a happy one.
Best wishes, Debra :)
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022
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Hello Seville,
I enjoyed reading your post :)
Your description of the property is vivid and the suspense created by your words as we wait for the door to be opened is tangible.
Heartwarming author's note - I'm glad that your friend's reunion with her mother was a happy one.
Best wishes, Debra :)
Comment Written 09-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022
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Thank you, Debra. I appreciate your thoughtful comments and insight. Thanks for reading, reviewing and rating this work.
Comment from Shirley McLain
I liked the story, and it certainly held my interest. You were descriptive and let me visualize the scene. I'm glad your friend was able to get back together with her mother. Great job. Have a wonderful day. Shirley
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022
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I liked the story, and it certainly held my interest. You were descriptive and let me visualize the scene. I'm glad your friend was able to get back together with her mother. Great job. Have a wonderful day. Shirley
Comment Written 09-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022
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Thank you, Shirley. I appreciate your thoughtful comments and encouraging remarks. Thanks for reading, reviewing and rating my story.
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Would you consider following me? I will reciprocate. Shirley
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Done!
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Well told story. Well written.
So, here I now stood, - This should start a new paragraph. Where it is allows readers to think that Laverne might have gone ahead and knocked on the Mexican's battered door.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022
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Well told story. Well written.
So, here I now stood, - This should start a new paragraph. Where it is allows readers to think that Laverne might have gone ahead and knocked on the Mexican's battered door.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022
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Thank you, Wayne. I really appreciate your suggestions. Thanks for reading, reviewing and rating my work.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
What a well written, very descripted story, and the author's notes finished it on a happy note. I'm so glad mother and daughter found each other again and they it was a happy event. I really enjoyed reading it. Well done. :)) Sandra
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022
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What a well written, very descripted story, and the author's notes finished it on a happy note. I'm so glad mother and daughter found each other again and they it was a happy event. I really enjoyed reading it. Well done. :)) Sandra
Comment Written 09-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022
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Thank you, Sandra. I really appreciate your thoughtful comments and insight. Thanks for reading, reviewing and rating this work.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
I am unsure. Was this a limited word challenge entered? There was so much more I waited for to come forth as I found the story interesting and vivid in description.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022
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I am unsure. Was this a limited word challenge entered? There was so much more I waited for to come forth as I found the story interesting and vivid in description.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022
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Thank you, Tom. I appreciate your thoughtful remarks. Yes, I hope to write a continuance that picks up on where I left off. Thanks again for all your reviews and ratings.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You told the story well. Your words are descriptive of the first old house. I could see everything you mentioned. I could feel the nervousness and unknowing feeling of the woman as she went from the old house to other one pointed out by the man on the porch. I believe I wouldn't have used the word Mexican, but that is your choice. You left readers wondering what happened--good for another chapter or two of this story.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2022
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You told the story well. Your words are descriptive of the first old house. I could see everything you mentioned. I could feel the nervousness and unknowing feeling of the woman as she went from the old house to other one pointed out by the man on the porch. I believe I wouldn't have used the word Mexican, but that is your choice. You left readers wondering what happened--good for another chapter or two of this story.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 08-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2022
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Thank you, Jan. Thanks for reading, reviewing and rating my work.
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello Seville a good day to you. I hope this finds you well. I enjoyed reading your story, has someone who ran away from home at a young age I can relate to this story somewhat. My mother and I have a relationship now but I haven't seen my father for 30 years, there will be no reunion. Good job and have a great day!
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2022
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Hello Seville a good day to you. I hope this finds you well. I enjoyed reading your story, has someone who ran away from home at a young age I can relate to this story somewhat. My mother and I have a relationship now but I haven't seen my father for 30 years, there will be no reunion. Good job and have a great day!
Comment Written 08-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2022
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Thank you, the13poet. I appreciate you sharing your story and giving your perspective. Your thoughtful reviews are always appreciated.
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
I love this endearing story. Your descriptive writing helped me fall into the story, a sign of a talented writer. You told a complete story using only 200 words also a sign of a good writer. Well done.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2022
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I love this endearing story. Your descriptive writing helped me fall into the story, a sign of a talented writer. You told a complete story using only 200 words also a sign of a good writer. Well done.
Comment Written 06-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2022
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Thank you, K.L. Thanks for reading, reviewing and rating this work. I appreciate your words of encouragement.
