Comment from Cindy Decker 2

Excellent

Sandra,
This is such a fantastic poem for children and adult children!
I thoroughly enjoyed it. The rhythm is perfect, and when you read it, it has a wonderful sound and beat.
And, the ending is great and teaches kids a lesson to clean up.
Great work, Sandra.
Blessings,
Cindy

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2022

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reply by the author on 29-Jul-2022

I'm so pleased you liked this one, I enjoyed writing it. :)) I always like to leave a lesson for children, tidying up after them was this poems lesson! Lol. Thank, Cindy. Love Sandra xx

Comment from moongirlwriter

Excellent

Coming from a pre-school teacher. .. well done. A couple of places I had to stop and re-read but for the most part, very cute and flows well. Congrats on the win. :)

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2022

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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2022

Thank you so much for reading my children's story poem. I had a look at your profile and see you are a children's author. I do enjoy writing for kids. Thanks again. :)) Sandra xx

reply by moongirlwriter on 01-Jun-2022

yes, sooo nice to see fellow writers for children's lit. I think you are much further along than me. . .my BA in Journalism didn't quite do it for me. I should have been in Creative writing from the start. But oh well. I taught pre-school for almost 20 years and now I write for kids and will be self-publishing my first book I think in late September. I should maybe change my name to Grandma Moses, it's taken me so long. :)

reply by the author on 01-Jun-2022

My first children's book was published in 2012, but the publisher no longer exists, so I've been self-publishing ever since. I wrote an illustrated poem story last year with seperate pages for children to colour in themselves. That is still selling well. By the way, I'm a UK English writer, not American, hence spelling differences. It would be nice if there were more children's contests on here. It really is nice to meet another children's author, you won't see me write many now, I'm into novels for the older child! Lol. Late September is a good month to get your bood out, that's when parents are looking to buy books for their children's Christmas presents. Good luck! If you need any help, don't hesitate to ask. xx

Comment from Dawn Munro

Exceptional

Sandra, you own the crown when it comes to writing for children. You know, I absolutely ADORE everything you write (I'm just not on FS a lot anymore). Congratulations on a well-deserved win with this wonderful poem. And your presentation? Could NOT be more charming!!!
I have just one (very tiny) suggestion, for meter -- final stanza, third line -- I would switch these words around: "(They) (then) brought in a rubbish bin..."
Much love,
Dawn (and again -- woot, woot!!! YAY YOUR WIN!!!)

 Comment Written 31-May-2022

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reply by the author on 31-May-2022

Aw, Dawn, you know how to make an old dear blush, don't you? 😊 thank you so very much for your lovely comments, you're so nice. And thank you for that great suggestion, I've changed it because you are right in what you said, it does improve it. Thank you, my friend!! And a big hug for the sixth star! Love you lots! Sandra xxx

reply by Dawn Munro on 31-May-2022

Love you lots right back! You are very welcome, my friend. :)

Comment from DeboraDyess

Exceptional

What a WONDERFUL poem - you certainly do deserve the 1st place award. :)
You're such an incredibly gifted writer, and in such varied genres, clever girl.
I enjoyed this a ton. I'm going to PM a favor, which I expect you to feel free to decline if you so desire. :)
Blessings, hugs, and CONGRATULLATIONS!
Deb

 Comment Written 29-May-2022

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reply by the author on 30-May-2022

Thank you, Debs, what a lovely review. I do enjoy writing for children, whether it's poems or stories. I think I know what the favour is, but PM me anyway. Thank you, my friend, for the sixth golden star!! That's so kind of you. Warm hugs, :)) Sandra xxx

Comment from Pam Lonsdale

Exceptional

At least they did the right thing and cleaned up all their mess, lol!

This is such a delightful poem and I understand why you were awarded first place. We'll deserved!

 Comment Written 29-May-2022

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reply by the author on 30-May-2022

Thank you so much, Pam, for your lovely comments and golden star! I'm so pleased you enjoyed the party, It was such fun to write. At the same time, I was over the moon that I'd won, I really hadn't expected to. Thanks, my friend. :)) Sandra xx

Comment from Contests

A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry.

 Comment Written 29-May-2022

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reply by the author on 29-May-2022

Thank you so very much!! I'll be smiling all day. :) Sandra xxx

Comment from Sarah Tummey

Excellent

I enjoyed reading this. The last line made me smile, as I think it was my poor mum who cleaned up after our birthday parties when we were kids! It's funny to imagine animals doing the same as us. Could you have got a verse in about party games? We used to play Sleeping Lions. Maybe the animals could play a game that involved humans?

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2022

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reply by the author on 30-Apr-2022

Sleeping humans sounds good, lol. They would probably have a game having the winner eat the most of us! LOL. Thank so much for reading this one, Sarah. I'm glad you enjoyed it, and welcome to Fanstory. :)) Sandra xx

reply by Sarah Tummey on 30-Apr-2022

Thanks for the welcome, Sandra. It's a great site.

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

I loved your poem! To me it looks like a winner - jaunty, full of fun and energy and happiness. The images suit it perfectly. The rhyme and metre are just right for children. A wonderful entry - best wishes for success!
Wendy

 Comment Written 21-Apr-2022

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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2022

Thank you so much, Wendy, I'm so pleased you enjoyed reading my poem and the party. Thanks also for the best wishes!!! Warm hugs, Sandra xxx

Comment from Cindy Warren

Excellent

What a great party! Unfortunately, my invitation must have been lost in the mail. Food and music and happy animals, it all sounds wonderful. So sad I missed it. LOL Good luck in the contest. I think you may have a winner.

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2022

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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2022

Oh!! I'm so sorry! Your invite must have been eaten by that slithery snake, he wasn't invited so he obviously wasn't going to let you go either!!! Lol!! Thank you so much for reading my poem, and the fun review, I'm glad you enjoyed it. Warm nugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

This is a fun romp through party animals time.

I truly enjoy the ballad metre and rhyme, and the graphics are superb, even though the giraffe is a little kinky.

A most enjoyable story in a poem, and sure to be a hit among all ages. :)

Gloria

 Comment Written 20-Apr-2022

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reply by the author on 21-Apr-2022

Thank you so much, Gloria. I'm glad you enjoyed the party!! I loved the picture of the giraffe, he is a little kindy, I agree, lol, but he's such fun. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx