Comment from Susan Newell

Excellent

Estory,

I like this staccato series of thought stilettos. I recently wrote a poem that is in a similar vein. There is so much seen and unseen and we really don't have a clue as to what "the reality is" (a newly popular phrase I detest) or is not. I think we can be certain that there is balance, but beyond that, there is far more to discover than is currently known and understood.

Sue

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 Comment Written 30-Mar-2022

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2022

Thanks so much for the excellent review and I am glad it got people thinking about the nature of reality and the world in which we find ourselves. I like to make people think. estory

reply by Susan Newell on 31-Mar-2022

You are very welcome.

Comment from Jesse James Doty

Excellent

I really liked the ambiguity of the quarks and the quarts and all the time and space metaphors you used but I wasn't too thrilled by the ending where you say, "or not." We already get the picture of the twists and turns of reality and the space-time continuum so we don't need to end with another end that in truth is not an ending but an extension of the questions that you pose for us to consider.
By the way, welcome back to FS!
Have a wonderful day,
Jesse


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 Comment Written 30-Mar-2022

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2022

Thanks for the excellent review and your perspective on the poem. Someone else liked the ending. So I guess everyone has their own ideas of what works and what doesn't. But getting people to think is what I am all about estory