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The Gospel of Gladys

Baptism of the Messiah

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Comment from tempeste
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Ciao!

One of the rules was no profanity:

Moja s spirit descends as a dove , his words and pooping / baptising for lots would be considered as such , but I personally thought it was hilarious.

You penned a great story partly fact , partly fiction. The killing of Harambe was tragic. Gorillas are highly intelligent, after examining the kid , he knew he was not a threat. His strength and because he was dragging the kid .. had he decided to dragged the kid out of the water , he could have knocked his head on the hard lim of the water enclosure , or on the ground.

Some people should not be parents , they were not at home but visiting a zoo they should have keep their kid in check.

Their negligence cost Harsmbe's life..

Going back to your entry, I found it creative, witty and even outrageous at times but your unique style works for me .

I enjoyed all the links including the one about UFO destroying Russian tanks and God being on Ukraine s side etc.

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2022


reply by the author on 06-Apr-2022
    Thanks so much Tempeste! I am sure my entry seriously offended some people for being sacrilegious, even though "poop" or "crap" isn't considered profanity in American English. "Shit" is considered mild profanity though.

    Yeah the mother took a lot of... crap... for letting her kid escape and get into the exhibit. That kid will have quite a story to tell when he gets older.
reply by tempeste on 06-Apr-2022
    Ciao ,

    I'm confused

    after reading your reply ,I went to check if you had posted something new ...What's with the yellow red star and the censor crap..has the committee stopped you from posting your work.???
reply by tempeste on 06-Apr-2022
    I think your input has been a blessing to this site...you injected a well needed dose of creativity and originality in regards to the contest page.

    The committee says: creative approaches are welcomed and then it slams and makes a fuss over someone that has brought life and colour to this often boring and monotonous site.

    Please DON'T SAY you are leaving ????
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2022
    It is pretty bad anytime I even talk about it, my posts are deleted. That's how much of a threat a dead gorilla is to them, apparently. I am, at least, going to be taking a temporary hiatus from posting and contests to publicly draw attention to the repression. I need to channel some of my energy into other areas. But, I may be doing a bit more reviewing, provided I don?t get kicked off here for being me. At least I have backed up all my work. No one has to buy the eternal flame package to do that, lol. I will tell you more details in a bit!
reply by tempeste on 07-Apr-2022
    Ciao,

    Just to see if I got it right , the committee has been complaining about what you have been writing and you out of protest have decided to make it public that your work is subject to censorship here on fanstory.

    Have I got the issue straight??

    I just hope you do not leave ..

    Keep safe in the meantime !



reply by the author on 07-Apr-2022
    That is correct although I don't know for certain who complained about my contests... though it is pretty easy for anyone to guess. Naming that person here will likely get this conversation deleted or get me banned even though it is public knowledge.
reply by tempeste on 07-Apr-2022
    Please say no more , I don?t want you to be banned ..

    I hope you return soon to post and not just review.

    I find your work stimulating.. and I love all the bread crumbs you leave behind .. ( wink)

    Keep safe !

    Ciao!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Excellent
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I've been missing your writing. I was wondering if you were all right. I hope just busy and serious stuff. Thank you for sharing this writing prompt with us.

I looked up from the delicious banana I was munching. (delicious banana I munched. from passive to active.)

 Comment Written 30-Mar-2022


reply by the author on 23-Apr-2022
    Hey thanks Barbara! I'm alright, just very annoyed at the censorship on here, and have been dialing down my presence and focusing on other things. Your passive to active change might be the technically correct version, but I think colloquially the reader might read it as past tense! "Munching" sounds a bit more natural to me. "Was being munched" would be passive. Do you agree? -H
Comment from Frank Malley
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Hello Harambe. What a distressing thing to shoot that gorilla, albeit the perhaps necessary protection of a human life. Anyway, with regards to your excellent story: I feel it must be part of some larger account in which gorillas are further established as exemplars of functional and probably high-minded being. Is it in the more direct mode of their decision making that gorillas are more admirable than humans? I suspect that traits which are more fully elaborated in us are nonetheless present in "lesser" species; I've seen ambivalence and uncertainty in our wonderful dog, and have even suspected its presence in our two cats. Anyway, I think that a rewrite could've made more memorable the characters of the two sisters in the story; however, I still enjoyed it, and I was awed by the fantastic silverback who was so sadly slain.

 Comment Written 30-Mar-2022


reply by the author on 31-Mar-2022
    Thank you Frank for this thoughtful and excellent review. Yeah I think you are right. While limited by the confines of the contest rules, I may expand this narrative coming into Easter, and revise it commensurate with your suggestion after I've given it a little space to breathe.
Comment from robyn corum
Excellent
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HFP,

Nicely done! These contests are pretty hard to follow at times. *smile* The rules are only SLIGHTLY restrictive and demanding. haha

I was mortified about Harambe killing shot - still don't know what the right call was. Glad YOU'RE okay. And, no. My profile page still looks the same. --sigh-- Thanks!

 Comment Written 30-Mar-2022