elephant enjoying spa
5-7-5 (plodding pachyderm)58 total reviews
Comment from Heather Burroughs
I truly enjoyed this 5-7-5 poem. It's short and sweet but packed full of imagery with the perfect picture. Thank you for sharing. Many blessings to you and your loved ones
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2022
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I truly enjoyed this 5-7-5 poem. It's short and sweet but packed full of imagery with the perfect picture. Thank you for sharing. Many blessings to you and your loved ones
Comment Written 18-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 18-Apr-2022
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Thanks Heather for your review and stars. Pleased it brought a smile to you.
Mark
Comment from tempeste
Ciao Marco!
I love elephants , they are so majestic and the baby males are so cute when they mock charge. Elephants love to cover themselves in mud. Hippos do too but they are not so entertaining.
When we were getting on each others nerves, pa would pick up a tourist magazine from the local travel agency in Stresa and book two weeks in a SPA mostly to enjoy some mud treatment ..sometimes thermal.
He also loved to meet and talk to people from all over Europe.
Off late he went to Slovenia where he found a SPA that also did Ayurveda.
While he was away soaking in the mud , I enjoyed the freedom..no cooking to do , just lived on small goods, panini and fresh pizza from the bakery next door. (biggrin)
Just me and the boys.
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2022
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Ciao Marco!
I love elephants , they are so majestic and the baby males are so cute when they mock charge. Elephants love to cover themselves in mud. Hippos do too but they are not so entertaining.
When we were getting on each others nerves, pa would pick up a tourist magazine from the local travel agency in Stresa and book two weeks in a SPA mostly to enjoy some mud treatment ..sometimes thermal.
He also loved to meet and talk to people from all over Europe.
Off late he went to Slovenia where he found a SPA that also did Ayurveda.
While he was away soaking in the mud , I enjoyed the freedom..no cooking to do , just lived on small goods, panini and fresh pizza from the bakery next door. (biggrin)
Just me and the boys.
Comment Written 16-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2022
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Tempeste,
Always pleased with your reviews of my poems and your commentary on your life and family. This particular one was done in back and forth collaboration emails with another member! We started with the artwork. My normal practice is the reverse: verse first, the illustration follows.
Have a happy Easter!
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I remember there was a contest once where participants had to work as a duo .. so some members that were friends signed up.
I love to collect unusual pics from internet .. so most of the time, I do the reverse : found the artwork I then write a wee poem.
Buona Pasqua a te Marco !
Keep safe!
Comment from LisaMay
Your skilfull use of alliteration set the scene well for the elephants' activities, then added the fun element with the idea of a summer spa mud soak.
(Those African summer spas are a great way to soak out the pygmies that get squished between elephants' toes.)
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2022
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Your skilfull use of alliteration set the scene well for the elephants' activities, then added the fun element with the idea of a summer spa mud soak.
(Those African summer spas are a great way to soak out the pygmies that get squished between elephants' toes.)
Comment Written 15-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2022
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Thanks Lisa for your compliments on the post and the alliterations used in the same.
Mark
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Mark,
I enjoyed your poem and the picture that you chose to go with it. What could be better if you're an elephant than to cool down in a mud bath? I saw somewhere that they need the mud or dust to protect their skin from the harsh sun. Well done.
Have a blessed day.
Tom
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2022
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Hello Mark,
I enjoyed your poem and the picture that you chose to go with it. What could be better if you're an elephant than to cool down in a mud bath? I saw somewhere that they need the mud or dust to protect their skin from the harsh sun. Well done.
Have a blessed day.
Tom
Comment Written 15-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2022
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Tom,
You research is correct. There is bird that feasts on them to rid them of bugs. Sometimes they create dangerous or infected sores.
Pleased with your comments about verse and artwork.
Mark
Comment from dellsworthpoet
The misty picture and the slightly whimsical definition of a natural action fit well together. The final line does tie the poem together.
Thanks for a good read.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2022
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The misty picture and the slightly whimsical definition of a natural action fit well together. The final line does tie the poem together.
Thanks for a good read.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2022
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Pleased with your compliments for the poem, artwork, and my last line!
Mark
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You are welcome.
Comment from Bill Schott
This three-line poem, Elephant Enjoying Spa, presented with a 5-7-5 formatting, creates the scene of the mud-bathing trunk-toters enjoying a good soak. Nice.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2022
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This three-line poem, Elephant Enjoying Spa, presented with a 5-7-5 formatting, creates the scene of the mud-bathing trunk-toters enjoying a good soak. Nice.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2022
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Bill,
Apparently these big tuskers have a problem with the cucumbers placed on their eyes. They have digital issues that can?t be overcome, but they do get a great soak for their toe nails. LOL.
Thanks for your review.
Mark
Comment from l.raven
HI Mark, I love elephants...and I love
watching them playing in water and mud...
mostly throwing it on each other...they truly
enjoy playing in it...
I love your poem my sweet friend...and soooo
love this picture...very nicely written...
love Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2022
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HI Mark, I love elephants...and I love
watching them playing in water and mud...
mostly throwing it on each other...they truly
enjoy playing in it...
I love your poem my sweet friend...and soooo
love this picture...very nicely written...
love Linda xxoo
Comment Written 14-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2022
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Linda,
THANK YOU for your compliments on this post. At least half of the credit goes to the FS poet who worked with me on the final product. The watercolor is outstanding and the artist can also share in the glory.
Mark
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you did a great job on the poem...
and your so welcome...love xxoo
Comment from Neonewman
Enjoying the water hole! Elephant heaven. This is a great little piece you have penned for this particular writing prompt. Best of luck.
God bless
Steve
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2022
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Enjoying the water hole! Elephant heaven. This is a great little piece you have penned for this particular writing prompt. Best of luck.
God bless
Steve
Comment Written 13-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2022
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Steve,
Thank you for your complimentary review.
I like your idea of the water hole as elephant heaven.
Mark
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My pleasure!
Comment from Boogienights
That sounds heavenly. I envy the lucky elephant that gets to partake in this lovely mud bath. This is a great contest entry, thanks for sharing. :) best of luck to you.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2022
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That sounds heavenly. I envy the lucky elephant that gets to partake in this lovely mud bath. This is a great contest entry, thanks for sharing. :) best of luck to you.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2022
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You may use the cucumber eye treatment, but I doubt the elephants will LOL
THANKS for your compliments ande good wishes.
Mark
Comment from Teri7
This is a very cute and very well written 3 Line poem you have penned for the contest. You used very good descriptive words and very cute imagery from the art work you chose. best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2022
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This is a very cute and very well written 3 Line poem you have penned for the contest. You used very good descriptive words and very cute imagery from the art work you chose. best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 13-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2022
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Teri,
Thank you for your nice compliments on this post. So pleased with the reception given to the selected artwork.
Mark
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You are so welcome Mark. I enjoyed it very much!
