Memories
my children are my happy.17 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This poem has many literary techniques. Where do I begin. The 1st paragraph has some nice examples of onomatopoeia. Your alliteration with the w's creates the sense of content. Your metaphors will draw the reader in. Nice work. A+ work.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2022
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This poem has many literary techniques. Where do I begin. The 1st paragraph has some nice examples of onomatopoeia. Your alliteration with the w's creates the sense of content. Your metaphors will draw the reader in. Nice work. A+ work.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2022
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Thank you so much, Liz, for this nice and complementary review. I appreciate it.
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***smile***
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Thank you so much, Liz, for this nice and complementary review. I appreciate it.
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Excellent , very enjoyable
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Thank you so much, Liz, for this nice and complementary review. I appreciate it.
Comment from in777wr#
This is a well written poem. I remember my childhood years as well. Your poem brought back fond memories of my youth. Beautiful picture to compliment this poem. Nice job.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2022
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This is a well written poem. I remember my childhood years as well. Your poem brought back fond memories of my youth. Beautiful picture to compliment this poem. Nice job.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2022
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Thank you so very much for your kind and encouraging words. Hugs.
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You are welcome.
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Thank you so very much for your kind and encouraging words. Hugs.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
a vivid recollection of many things my children did way back when. And then then grew up and left, thought thankfully they drop in sometimes with no notice. That's okay
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2022
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a vivid recollection of many things my children did way back when. And then then grew up and left, thought thankfully they drop in sometimes with no notice. That's okay
Comment Written 27-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2022
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Thank you, Tom, for your comments and review. Have a great week!
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Comments of what makes you happy is simple things. It sounds like you have a happy place no matter where you place your body. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2022
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Comments of what makes you happy is simple things. It sounds like you have a happy place no matter where you place your body. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2022
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Yes! Whenever I get sad, I just go into my memories. Thank you for reading and reviewing, and for your kind words.
Comment from mermaids
You have a delicious use of words in your free verse poem. I like the line "Furniture draped with blankets to make rocket ships". It adds to the imagination and takes the reader to another place. Excellent use of words.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2022
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You have a delicious use of words in your free verse poem. I like the line "Furniture draped with blankets to make rocket ships". It adds to the imagination and takes the reader to another place. Excellent use of words.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2022
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Thank you so much for your complementary words and encouraging review. It's much appreciated.
Comment from Anne Johnston
Very well done on this poem. Children make us happy from the time they are babies. No matter how old they get, it is always a pleasure to see them or even receive a call. Hope this does well in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2022
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Very well done on this poem. Children make us happy from the time they are babies. No matter how old they get, it is always a pleasure to see them or even receive a call. Hope this does well in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2022
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Thank you! I'm glad you liked my poem. Hugs.
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Thank you! I'm glad you liked my poem. Hugs.
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You are welcome, Leann
Comment from shelley kaye
this was a great happy free verse - i loved the flow - it felt easy and smooth....
The old, wooden screen door
Creaking open unexpectedly
And slamming.
In sweeps amity
And one small yellow jacket.
is probably my favourite lines
i do have one suggestion - maybe take out the periods? so there are no "full-stops" and just flow?
eh just a thought ;)
thank you for sharing what makes you happy and good luck in the contest!
shelley :)
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2022
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this was a great happy free verse - i loved the flow - it felt easy and smooth....
The old, wooden screen door
Creaking open unexpectedly
And slamming.
In sweeps amity
And one small yellow jacket.
is probably my favourite lines
i do have one suggestion - maybe take out the periods? so there are no "full-stops" and just flow?
eh just a thought ;)
thank you for sharing what makes you happy and good luck in the contest!
shelley :)
Comment Written 27-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2022
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Thank you for commenting and reviewing my poem. I'm very new at free verse, and I'm not really sure what is done in this style. I just wrote two pieces that don't have any punctuation, so I thought I'd try one that had end Marks. I'm not saying you're wrong or that I disagree with you, but for my own knowledge, could you please explain to me why using or not using punctuation is important in free verse? Thank you.
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i guess it's a personal thing
to just let the words flow as they are
if i need a comma
i make a line
if i need a period
i make a new stanza
could be just me LOL
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
I enjoyed this heartfelt poem. It is well written and clearly shows your love for your family. Your writing is descriptive and created very clear imagery, which I. enjoy. You did a nice job with the prompt.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2022
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I enjoyed this heartfelt poem. It is well written and clearly shows your love for your family. Your writing is descriptive and created very clear imagery, which I. enjoy. You did a nice job with the prompt.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2022
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Thank you so much. I'm glad you enjoyed my poem!
Comment from royowen
Probably the most precious treasures that we can ever have are moments spent with loved ones, And even the dear departed, because there aren't going to be anymore, or the memories one's children, and their childrens, beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2022
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Probably the most precious treasures that we can ever have are moments spent with loved ones, And even the dear departed, because there aren't going to be anymore, or the memories one's children, and their childrens, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 27-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2022
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yes, that is certainly the way I think of it. Thank you so much for your kind words and review.
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Well done
Comment from karenina
What's not to love about this free verse? Your quiet reflectiveness lends an air of magic to this happiness! Ah, and well and truly, our children bring a magic to our "happy" more priceless than gems!
Karenina
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2022
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What's not to love about this free verse? Your quiet reflectiveness lends an air of magic to this happiness! Ah, and well and truly, our children bring a magic to our "happy" more priceless than gems!
Karenina
Comment Written 27-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2022
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I am so glad to see you! I was cleaning my ice cream store to open it for the season and taking a break when I got your message. I literally cried. I hope you're here to stay. And thanks for the review! Hugs!
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Yes. Sorry... Some bad family news sent me spinning. I took a breath and solicited Tom's help scooping my portfolio out of the delete cache!
