Flash Fiction
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Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written 100 Word Flash Fiction you have penned for the contest. You used great descriptive words and great dialogue and perfect art work. Best wishes in the contest my friend. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2022
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This is a very well written 100 Word Flash Fiction you have penned for the contest. You used great descriptive words and great dialogue and perfect art work. Best wishes in the contest my friend. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 24-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2022
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Hello, Teri
Thank you so much for stopping by to read my flash entry and I am glad you enjoyed it. And thank you for the kind thoughts.
Smiles, Carol
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you are so welcome Carol!
Comment from lancellot
Very interesting flash. It looks like he did hold a grudge, and got even.
Last week. Unjust accusations. His arrest. Mistaken identity. Too proud to apologize.
- if this part are her thoughts. You may want to personalize it. Perhaps I was too proud.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2022
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Very interesting flash. It looks like he did hold a grudge, and got even.
Last week. Unjust accusations. His arrest. Mistaken identity. Too proud to apologize.
- if this part are her thoughts. You may want to personalize it. Perhaps I was too proud.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2022
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I see where you are coming from with your suggestions and I thank you. In my thoughts, I imagine her remembering the moments and what happened and not really having remorse until it was too late. Appreciate the review and suggestions as always.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was brilliant, Carole, it was a true Carole teaser!! It's so nice to have you posting again, I've missed your stories. This will do well in the contest, it can't fail, it's incredible! I'm sure there are many men who have been a victim of mistaken identity, but more that haven't. It's hard for anyone to be wrongly covicted. This highlights that fact, too. Well done and good luck in the contest. Love and hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2022
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That was brilliant, Carole, it was a true Carole teaser!! It's so nice to have you posting again, I've missed your stories. This will do well in the contest, it can't fail, it's incredible! I'm sure there are many men who have been a victim of mistaken identity, but more that haven't. It's hard for anyone to be wrongly covicted. This highlights that fact, too. Well done and good luck in the contest. Love and hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 24-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2022
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Thanks, my friend. I was told I am walking the dark side too much of late, and I suppose they are right. But...at least I am writing so I guess it's baby steps for now till I find myself again. Better to put my dark side on paper than to live it.
Thank you for the kind thoughts and best wishes.
Smiles, Carol
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I totally disagree with that. I think the more you can put down in writing, the more you are purging yourself of the nightmare you've been living. Keep it up, the fun, happy stories will come. xxxx
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Thank you from the bottom of my heart. Smiles and hugs....
Comment from Shirley McLain
I wish I had a six to give you. I love this story. You sucked me right in, and I didn't expect that ending. You did a great job. Have a wonderful day. Shirley
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2022
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I wish I had a six to give you. I love this story. You sucked me right in, and I didn't expect that ending. You did a great job. Have a wonderful day. Shirley
Comment Written 24-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2022
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Thank you so much, shirley. It's been so difficult for me to write the last few weeks so I am thrilled with a virtual six even if it is a flash fiction post. Thank you!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Well done, Carol. Her false accusations scared him with no apology so he decided payback was due. He gave her a big scare. He evened the score... in his mind. Glad he walked away. She said he did it so he did it. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2022
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Well done, Carol. Her false accusations scared him with no apology so he decided payback was due. He gave her a big scare. He evened the score... in his mind. Glad he walked away. She said he did it so he did it. Nancy:)
Comment Written 24-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2022
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Hurrah for you, Mamcy! I wasn't sure that everyone would understand that he only did it because she was to arrogant to apologize for her mistake. I appreciate the thoughts and the review.
smiles, Carol
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
Whoa! This is a terrific flash fiction contest entry. It should do very well. You snatched my attention from the first few words and did not let go until the very end. You were successful at building tension well done.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2022
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Whoa! This is a terrific flash fiction contest entry. It should do very well. You snatched my attention from the first few words and did not let go until the very end. You were successful at building tension well done.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2022
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Thank you so much for reading, reviewing and for leaving such kind thoughts to lighten my day. I appreciate it very much.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Susan Newell
My goodness, Carol, you seem to be stepping into the dark side. I'm pleased that this had a moral and a happy ending. Very good piece of 100-word flash. You were able to tell the whole story. This should do well.
Sue
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2022
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My goodness, Carol, you seem to be stepping into the dark side. I'm pleased that this had a moral and a happy ending. Very good piece of 100-word flash. You were able to tell the whole story. This should do well.
Sue
Comment Written 24-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2022
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You hit the nail on the head with that one, Sue. I can't seem to get the dark clouds to move away so I can write again so I guess I decided the best thing to do was join them. LOL Appreciate the review and your thoughts.
Smiles, Carol
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You are welcome. Maybe try writing about happy or comical men, rather than abused women. Shrug.
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Can I abuse the men? Just kidding, of course.
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Enough abuse already! :-D
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I'm working on it!
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Perhaps because the world is so dark now I long for more lighthearted stories to read. I learned something from one of Kit Nongklaw's (sp?) stories. His father told him, "Focus on the solution, not the problem." I think we all know what the problems are and I keep trying to focus on solutions. Ultimately, the solution is to have people choose to turn their hearts to God. We must endeavor to find reasons for them to do so.
Comment from Sally Law
Sorry I don't have a six for this. Chilling and just enough to stimulate my overactive imagination.
Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming flash,
Sal xoxo's
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2022
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Sorry I don't have a six for this. Chilling and just enough to stimulate my overactive imagination.
Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming flash,
Sal xoxo's
Comment Written 24-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2022
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Thank you so much for stopping by to read this little flash fiction entry and I appreciate the virtual six as well. I am glad you enjoyed it.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Jasmine Girl
What a scary story and experience for the lady. Sometimes it doesn't pay to report something like that. It can be a nightmare. It doesn't mean we shouldn't report crime.
Well done.
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reply by the author on 24-Mar-2022
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What a scary story and experience for the lady. Sometimes it doesn't pay to report something like that. It can be a nightmare. It doesn't mean we shouldn't report crime.
Well done.
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Comment Written 24-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2022
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She made a mistake and misjudged him, but was to proud to say so. I guess he decided payback was better than the actual possibilities. A strange world we live in!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I was afraid this was going to end very badly for her. I am glad it didn't. Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. You told an entire story using only a few words. Good job and good luck.
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reply by the author on 24-Mar-2022
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I was afraid this was going to end very badly for her. I am glad it didn't. Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. You told an entire story using only a few words. Good job and good luck.
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Comment Written 24-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2022
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Thanks, Barbara. It appears that's all I can manage at present but I keep plugging away. I appreciate the review and thoughts.
Smiles, Carol
