Comment from Sugarray77

Excellent

What a unique theme, June. Well done on this verse and I like the unique use of the word "pirouetting". Clever and a word that captures the setting of this piece. Good luck with the Lune!

Melissa

 Comment Written 23-Mar-2022

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reply by the author on 24-Mar-2022

Thank you, Melissa. I was daydreaming about the beach and thought of a jellyfish - no telling where my muse might lead me these days! Glad you enljoyed this short one. We do have shark sightings during the summer here on Cape Cod - where the movie Jaws was based on!

Comment from Cindy Decker 2

Excellent

June,
I think this poem is awesome.
It's sad, but you give it "life"(and the octopus) when you write of 'grace under pressure.'
I like this work very much.
Blessings,
Cindy

 Comment Written 22-Mar-2022

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reply by the author on 23-Mar-2022

Thank you for taking the time to read and share your insights. Your feedback is always appreciated.

reply by Cindy Decker 2 on 23-Mar-2022

You?re welcome, June.

Comment from Carol Hillebrenner

Excellent

Very good poem that I might not have understood without the beautiful diving jellyfish. You said an entire story in your few well-chosen words. Best of luck in the lune contest.

 Comment Written 22-Mar-2022

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reply by the author on 22-Mar-2022

I'm glad you enjoyed this short lune - it was a challenge, but a fun one. Thank you for sharing your insights.

Comment from karenina

Excellent

Wow. This is beautiful! In words, in the image, in the presentation... Everything a Lune should be and so much more! Who knew thirteen syllables could prove to be so powerful? You did apparently! Can't imagine this isn't a contender for the top prize in this contest! Super job!

Karenina

 Comment Written 22-Mar-2022

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reply by the author on 22-Mar-2022

I'm glad you enjoyed this short lune - it was a challenge, but a fun one. Thank you for sharing your insight

reply by karenina on 22-Mar-2022

Super good!


Number one worthy!