Alone
Sometimes ,that's the best way to be...10 total reviews
Comment from writer723
I enjoyed reading this suspenseful tale. Things go south when one lover turns into a basket case. You did a really great job highlighting the situation and the tense, hair-raising moments when one deals with an obsessed stalker. Nice job!
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2022
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I enjoyed reading this suspenseful tale. Things go south when one lover turns into a basket case. You did a really great job highlighting the situation and the tense, hair-raising moments when one deals with an obsessed stalker. Nice job!
Comment Written 29-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2022
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Thank you so much! My apologies for the tardiness of this rep[ly - I've been off FS for a bit over a month. But I'm back and do appreciate your time in reading and commenting on the story.
Deb
Comment from Mary Shifman
This is a very good story. Intense and more than a little creepy. It's one of those things that makes the idea of taking up with strangers scary. Like the main character says in the beginning of the story ... being alone is not so bad.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2022
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This is a very good story. Intense and more than a little creepy. It's one of those things that makes the idea of taking up with strangers scary. Like the main character says in the beginning of the story ... being alone is not so bad.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2022
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I agree, although I do really love being with my hubby. We were married in 1985, so I'm not sure how I"d get on without him. lol
Thanks for reading, Mary. I'm glad you enjoyed it, although it creeped you out totally. lol
Blessings,
Deb
Comment from MissMerri
This was certainly a gripping tale. The ending, however, seemed more like the end of a chapter. Are you planning to add more to this? If not, you leave your readers hanging on the edge of a cliff of suspense, never to know what happens to the poor writer. I do like your writing style and the clear images your words create in the reader's mind. Excellent work. Good luck in the contest. MM
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2022
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This was certainly a gripping tale. The ending, however, seemed more like the end of a chapter. Are you planning to add more to this? If not, you leave your readers hanging on the edge of a cliff of suspense, never to know what happens to the poor writer. I do like your writing style and the clear images your words create in the reader's mind. Excellent work. Good luck in the contest. MM
Comment Written 23-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2022
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Thank you MM. I'm not planning on 'ending' the story, but do plan on expanding it slightly. I lost my first draft, realized it with just an hour left in the contest and left a few things out of this that I'd intended to include. I'll look for a publicaiton doing 'love gone wrong' or horror stories and see what they think. :)
Thanks so much for the kind words and reading,
Blessings,
Deb
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the Fatal Attraction writing prompt contest. Your story was easy to follow and had great flow. The story is pretty scary and the end is unknown. Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2022
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Excellent entry for the Fatal Attraction writing prompt contest. Your story was easy to follow and had great flow. The story is pretty scary and the end is unknown. Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
Comment Written 23-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2022
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Thanks so much, Gypsy. I really do appreciate you reading and commenting. :)
Blessings,
Deb
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
A well written story. Are some bits of it true? The bottom part had me going and I was seeing a woman who needed to call for help. He does sound like a disturbed fellow.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2022
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A well written story. Are some bits of it true? The bottom part had me going and I was seeing a woman who needed to call for help. He does sound like a disturbed fellow.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2022
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Parts of it are true but not from my own experience. Sadly, some of my friends have been in terrible relationships. I didn't include some of their details just because they're too horrid. One of my best friends' ex-husband laser targeted her and her guests as she had a b-b-q after the divorce was final. I think that was in my first draft but the computer didn't save it and I forgot to put it in this one. duh... But I've always felt safe and sheltered in my marriage, and very, very blessed.
Thank you for reading!
Comment from Wendy G
You had me holding my breath with this dramatic writing - right through to the end of your story. (Thank goodness it's fiction!) You certainly achieved the requirements of the contest! Very well done. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2022
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You had me holding my breath with this dramatic writing - right through to the end of your story. (Thank goodness it's fiction!) You certainly achieved the requirements of the contest! Very well done. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 23-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2022
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Thank you so much, Wendy! I'm glad it had you hooked and managed to hang on to you throughout. :)
Comment from LisaMay
Excellent story! It was gripping and scary as you await your fate. You set the scene well with your experiences of dating and your 'accidental' entanglement with Jacob. Extreme jealousy turns people into nutjobs
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2022
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Excellent story! It was gripping and scary as you await your fate. You set the scene well with your experiences of dating and your 'accidental' entanglement with Jacob. Extreme jealousy turns people into nutjobs
Comment Written 22-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2022
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Thank you! Sadly, I cobined several people's experiences that I know to come up with this. I'm fortunate enough that this is pure fiction for me. But there are a lot of people out there who experience t. You're right - jealousy sucks. :)
thans for reading and for those pretty stars. :)
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Thank goodness it isn't autobiographical!
Comment from humpwhistle
We do live in dangerous times, don't we? We have access to so many people, and they have access to us. Choosing a partner is a perilous pot luck. I enjoyed your story, but I think it gets off to a slow start. I realize you want to set up the situation, but I think you could have done so much quicker, thereby getting to the heart of the story sooner. Just one man's opinion.
Best of luck at the polls.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2022
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We do live in dangerous times, don't we? We have access to so many people, and they have access to us. Choosing a partner is a perilous pot luck. I enjoyed your story, but I think it gets off to a slow start. I realize you want to set up the situation, but I think you could have done so much quicker, thereby getting to the heart of the story sooner. Just one man's opinion.
Best of luck at the polls.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 22-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2022
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Hi, Lee! I appreciate your input and, if I choose to rewrite this for another site or for publicaiton, will trim it some. And I forgot to put in a bit that I'd dreamed up last night, so that will make room for it. lol
Thanks for reading and for your thoughtful review. :)
Comment from in777wr#
This was a horrific story. Your story was very captivating from beginning to end. In my opinion, this story easily meets the requirements for this writing prompt. Nice job.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2022
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This was a horrific story. Your story was very captivating from beginning to end. In my opinion, this story easily meets the requirements for this writing prompt. Nice job.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2022
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Thanks so much! It gives me great pleasure that it gotcha. :)
Thanks for reading and for the kind comment.
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You're very welcome.
Comment from jessizero
You did a great job with the prompt. The story built and evolved beautifully, and I definitely didn't expect that ending. Thanks for sharing, and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2022
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You did a great job with the prompt. The story built and evolved beautifully, and I definitely didn't expect that ending. Thanks for sharing, and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2022
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I'm glad the eding was unpredictable for you! Thank you for reading and for your kind comments.