Sheet Curtains
When hope has gone, you just have to go and find it.19 total reviews
Comment from Juliette Chamberlain
A very touching read which tugs at the heartstrings from beginning to end.
The writing flows freely and smoothly down the page as the reader follows the fortunes of Anika and Damek, a very courageous couple.
Reading the story makes me thankful for the freedoms which we have at the moment.
Warmly,
Juliette
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2022
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A very touching read which tugs at the heartstrings from beginning to end.
The writing flows freely and smoothly down the page as the reader follows the fortunes of Anika and Damek, a very courageous couple.
Reading the story makes me thankful for the freedoms which we have at the moment.
Warmly,
Juliette
Comment Written 28-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2022
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Juliette,
Thanks for taking the time to review my story. Glad you enjoyed it and yes you are so right when stating that you are thankful for the freedoms we have at the moment.
Unfortunately, we must be on guard at all times.
Take care and have a great day .
Barry Penfold
Comment from oliver818
This is a great story, very well told. You create a powerful image of a past time that so many people lived through but which most of us can't even imagine any more. Thanks for sharing this
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This is a great story, very well told. You create a powerful image of a past time that so many people lived through but which most of us can't even imagine any more. Thanks for sharing this
Comment Written 28-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2022
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Thanks for taking the time to review my story. I am glad you enjoyed it. Yes it was a period of great disruption . The world is again experiencing the same sort of thing.
Take Care and have a good day.
Barry Penfold
Comment from Jay Squires
Fascinating story, Barry. You did well developing it and you were delightfully slow in building to its climax.
A few things I noticed as I read:
First of all, take about 5 minutes in the edit and space between paragraphs. It's distracting, at it literally takes only a few minutes. Especially space between the change of speakers in the dialogue. It will make for a much more pleasant read.
"Hi Eddie, I am the "Wicked Witch."" [It's best not to use double-double quotes. For the 'Wicked Witch' use single quotes, or better yet, Italics.]
"Czechoslovakia"
" Wow, I think that is a long way away"
[In both these sentences you need closing punctuation before the close-quote. Also, space between dialogue.]
This is an excellent and thought-provoking read, Barry.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2022
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Fascinating story, Barry. You did well developing it and you were delightfully slow in building to its climax.
A few things I noticed as I read:
First of all, take about 5 minutes in the edit and space between paragraphs. It's distracting, at it literally takes only a few minutes. Especially space between the change of speakers in the dialogue. It will make for a much more pleasant read.
"Hi Eddie, I am the "Wicked Witch."" [It's best not to use double-double quotes. For the 'Wicked Witch' use single quotes, or better yet, Italics.]
"Czechoslovakia"
" Wow, I think that is a long way away"
[In both these sentences you need closing punctuation before the close-quote. Also, space between dialogue.]
This is an excellent and thought-provoking read, Barry.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2022
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Jay,
Thanks for taking the time to review my story. Also many thanks for the advice on improving the read. I will action that advice. One of the things I love about this site.
Have a great day and take care.
Barry Penfold.
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Glad to help, Barry.
Comment from royowen
Ignorance is a terrible disease, migrated from Liverpool, England Whalen I was a young boy, Aussies were a.little naive in those days, suspicious of migrants, but friendly enough, even if they called Poms, they Italians, dagos, and others, wops and wogs, but it was never serious, they were still kind, even though they were a bit suspicious. Beautifully written Barry, excellent post, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2022
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Ignorance is a terrible disease, migrated from Liverpool, England Whalen I was a young boy, Aussies were a.little naive in those days, suspicious of migrants, but friendly enough, even if they called Poms, they Italians, dagos, and others, wops and wogs, but it was never serious, they were still kind, even though they were a bit suspicious. Beautifully written Barry, excellent post, blessings Roy
Comment Written 25-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2022
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Roy,
Thanks for taking the time to review my story. I am glad you enjoyed the story. Yes I remember the days when it was the usual to call other nationalities some identifier names such as Poms, dagos(big at my school ) . Anyway glad you survived those days. Take Care and have a great day.
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Well done
Comment from Mary Shifman
This is a great story, made even better by the fact that it's truth based. I enjoyed reading it. It is proof that as the old adage says, 'you catch more flies with honey than vinegar!'
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2022
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This is a great story, made even better by the fact that it's truth based. I enjoyed reading it. It is proof that as the old adage says, 'you catch more flies with honey than vinegar!'
Comment Written 25-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2022
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Mary,
So true that you catch more flies with honey than vinegar. Thanks for taking the time to review my story and I am glad you enjoyed it. Take care and have a great day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Susan Newell
Barry,
I love this well-told story, capturing the essence of communism, willingness to do almost anything for freedom, and learning to bridge cultural gaps through being the first to initiate friendship. Very nice story. I've noted a couple of language/typo things below.
Sue
Within 6 months an offer -- digits 1-9 are usually spelled out
Calmly, Anika greeted him, "Hi Eddie, I am the "Wicked Witch."" -- Quotes within quotes use single rather than double quotation marks. ==> 'Wicked Witch'
"Czechoslovakia"
" Wow, I think that is a long way away" -- missing two periods
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2022
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Barry,
I love this well-told story, capturing the essence of communism, willingness to do almost anything for freedom, and learning to bridge cultural gaps through being the first to initiate friendship. Very nice story. I've noted a couple of language/typo things below.
Sue
Within 6 months an offer -- digits 1-9 are usually spelled out
Calmly, Anika greeted him, "Hi Eddie, I am the "Wicked Witch."" -- Quotes within quotes use single rather than double quotation marks. ==> 'Wicked Witch'
"Czechoslovakia"
" Wow, I think that is a long way away" -- missing two periods
Comment Written 25-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2022
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Susan,
Thanks for taking the time to review my story and I am glad you enjoyed it. Also thanks for your helpful hints.
Have a great day and take care.
Barry Penfold
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Wendy G
An excellent story, Barry - and I am glad it had a happy ending. As an Australian I was starting to feel embarrassed and ashamed by the naughty boys, but Anika was wise and astute. Good for her. You wrote it very well; it was an enjoyable read.
Wendy
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2022
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An excellent story, Barry - and I am glad it had a happy ending. As an Australian I was starting to feel embarrassed and ashamed by the naughty boys, but Anika was wise and astute. Good for her. You wrote it very well; it was an enjoyable read.
Wendy
Comment Written 25-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2022
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Wendy,
Thanks for taking time to review my story. Glad you enjoyed it. Oh and congratulations on your recent placing in the True Story contest.
Take Care and have a great day.
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Thank you so much Barry. Appreciated!
Wendy
Comment from F. William Lester
Great story! Anika's compassion, understanding, and her "secret weapon" won the day, as it should. I really enjoyed this story. It is very timely when you look at what is going on in the world. Her choice to win them over as opposed to making them enemies could be an example, we all could follow. Nice work. Be well.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2022
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Great story! Anika's compassion, understanding, and her "secret weapon" won the day, as it should. I really enjoyed this story. It is very timely when you look at what is going on in the world. Her choice to win them over as opposed to making them enemies could be an example, we all could follow. Nice work. Be well.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2022
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Thanks for taking the time to review my story. I am glad you enjoyed it . Yes, Anika did have a good way of resolving the issue.
Take care and have a good day.
Barry Penfold
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You're welcome.
Comment from joann r romei
This was wonderfully told, I could sense the sadness and despair, i enjoyed the fact that there was an outlet and opportunity. No errors noted in the work.
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This was wonderfully told, I could sense the sadness and despair, i enjoyed the fact that there was an outlet and opportunity. No errors noted in the work.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2022
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Joann,
Thanks for taking the time to review my story and I am glad you enjoyed the read. Take care and have a great day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Anne Johnston
Your story is very well written, easy to read, and tells a great story. So glad that Anika found a way to counteract what these boys were doing, showed them kindness, and changed their attitude towards her.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2022
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Your story is very well written, easy to read, and tells a great story. So glad that Anika found a way to counteract what these boys were doing, showed them kindness, and changed their attitude towards her.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2022
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Anne,
Thanks for taking the time to review my story. It really is a heartwarming story. Please have a great day and take care.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
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You are very welcome, Barry.
