My Elixir
Collecting memories of childhood in a bottle5 total reviews
Comment from moongirlwriter
So very nice. . .such wonderful memories for you. I may have to try the bottle exercise and find those wonderful memories of my own. Well written and a fun read. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-May-2022
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So very nice. . .such wonderful memories for you. I may have to try the bottle exercise and find those wonderful memories of my own. Well written and a fun read. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-May-2022
reply by the author on 21-May-2022
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Thank you so much for your kind review and good wishes in the contest.
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Comment from Carolyn Dooley
I was lost from my own thoughts and taken into your space long enough to feel the joy of happiness in your post. I
really enjoyed reading your poem. I love the picture.
reply by the author on 21-May-2022
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I was lost from my own thoughts and taken into your space long enough to feel the joy of happiness in your post. I
really enjoyed reading your poem. I love the picture.
Comment Written 21-May-2022
reply by the author on 21-May-2022
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I'm so very glad you felt the joy and enjoyed reading my poem.
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Yes I did. Thank you ❤️❤️☺️.
Comment from Marienkiefer
Hello
-This is a wonderful, reflective piece. Very nostalgic. (like themes in works of, Marcel Proust, In Search of Lost Time)
-Recalls memory through the senses. Favours sensory, interspersed with scenery in certain places. Excellent!
-A strong interior voice.
-With the bottle now open, stanzas 3, 4, 5 could work very well in the first person, present tense. This is where the memories you describe are so vivid and you have released the energy into the open air, brought them back to life again in your poem, purely in my opinion.
-This poem has the most beautiful passages, inspired by memory.
-Very well executed.
Excellent work! Good luck on your entry.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2022
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Hello
-This is a wonderful, reflective piece. Very nostalgic. (like themes in works of, Marcel Proust, In Search of Lost Time)
-Recalls memory through the senses. Favours sensory, interspersed with scenery in certain places. Excellent!
-A strong interior voice.
-With the bottle now open, stanzas 3, 4, 5 could work very well in the first person, present tense. This is where the memories you describe are so vivid and you have released the energy into the open air, brought them back to life again in your poem, purely in my opinion.
-This poem has the most beautiful passages, inspired by memory.
-Very well executed.
Excellent work! Good luck on your entry.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2022
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Thank you very much for a delightful review. Thanks for taking the time to review this thoughtfully.
Comment from RodG
Yes, this reader shares the Speaker's desire to have bottled his past so he, too, could pull out the stopper anytime to enjoy the elixir of memories. I like how you recount school days and sledding and the holidays in a manner we can easily visualize.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2022
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Yes, this reader shares the Speaker's desire to have bottled his past so he, too, could pull out the stopper anytime to enjoy the elixir of memories. I like how you recount school days and sledding and the holidays in a manner we can easily visualize.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2022
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Thank you so much for your review--Nice to have readers who know where I'm coming from!
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Author, I'm sending you my last six for a job well done. I thoroughly enjoyed what you wrote. Like you, I wish I could bottle those wonderful days gone by, the special times when joy was commonplace and worries were unknown. I wish everyone throughout the world would be able to have such memories. Thanks so much for sharing this wonderful piece.
Have a blessed day.
Tom
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2022
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Hello Author, I'm sending you my last six for a job well done. I thoroughly enjoyed what you wrote. Like you, I wish I could bottle those wonderful days gone by, the special times when joy was commonplace and worries were unknown. I wish everyone throughout the world would be able to have such memories. Thanks so much for sharing this wonderful piece.
Have a blessed day.
Tom
Comment Written 19-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2022
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Thank you for your kind words and woohoo for the six! Those are hard to come by and treasured!
