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Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Gypsy Rose,
This is an exceptional tanka poem, lamenting love lost.
I especially like your use of the word, penumbra, as being a shadow.
Exceptional work,
Best wishes in the contest,
and with your writing.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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Gypsy Rose,
This is an exceptional tanka poem, lamenting love lost.
I especially like your use of the word, penumbra, as being a shadow.
Exceptional work,
Best wishes in the contest,
and with your writing.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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Thank you very much for your exceptional review, six stars, and feedback.
Blessed be
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You?re welcome, Gypsy
Comment from Mark Schardine
It could have been a beautiful love story, but perhaps social conventions, egotism, or even a cowardly refusal to declare one's love mean that it never becomes reality, only painful reflections on what might have been.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2022
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It could have been a beautiful love story, but perhaps social conventions, egotism, or even a cowardly refusal to declare one's love mean that it never becomes reality, only painful reflections on what might have been.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2022
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words. I appreciate your feedback.
Blessed be
Comment from lyenochka
It's too bad she has a love that is either only in her dreams or perhaps she has an affair with a married man and so her love can never be exposed to the light of day. Great job with your tanka!
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2022
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It's too bad she has a love that is either only in her dreams or perhaps she has an affair with a married man and so her love can never be exposed to the light of day. Great job with your tanka!
Comment Written 19-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2022
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words. I appreciate your feedback, Helen..
Blessed be
Comment from aryr
Good luck wishes in the Tanka Poetry contest, Gypsy. This was a very well done Tanka, which told of their love that was unable to survive from dawn to dusk but also that it couldn't survive the dream like state, only to die. I liked the picture of the young maiden. Very much enjoyed. Blessed be n hugs!
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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Good luck wishes in the Tanka Poetry contest, Gypsy. This was a very well done Tanka, which told of their love that was unable to survive from dawn to dusk but also that it couldn't survive the dream like state, only to die. I liked the picture of the young maiden. Very much enjoyed. Blessed be n hugs!
Comment Written 18-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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Thank you very much, Aryr. I appreciate your review very much.
Blessed be
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Most welcome, Gypsy. Blessed be
Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine poem, Gypsy----and why is it that the girl I meet in my dreams shoots me down and laughs--you'd think I get enough of that in real life--err--nice poem
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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Another fine poem, Gypsy----and why is it that the girl I meet in my dreams shoots me down and laughs--you'd think I get enough of that in real life--err--nice poem
Comment Written 18-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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Thank you very much, Mike . I'm so happy to hear from you.
Blessed be
Comment from AP Apgar
I like this poem - It is a very nice picture of one of the characters in the story being told in the poem, proving a setting / cultural dynamic - and leaves the story to the imagination of the reader - to assume that the infatuation fantasy between the characters was shared. Good job.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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I like this poem - It is a very nice picture of one of the characters in the story being told in the poem, proving a setting / cultural dynamic - and leaves the story to the imagination of the reader - to assume that the infatuation fantasy between the characters was shared. Good job.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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Thank you very much, AP I appreciate your review.
Blessed be
Comment from royowen
Just the word penumbra, what a highly desirable word for clandestine arrangements between two lovers , meeting almost furtively, beautifully wrotten Gypsy, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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Just the word penumbra, what a highly desirable word for clandestine arrangements between two lovers , meeting almost furtively, beautifully wrotten Gypsy, blessings Roy
Comment Written 18-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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Thank you very much, Roy . I'm so happy to hear from you.
Blessed be
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Bless you
Comment from in777wr#
This is a very nice poem. The message of this poem is clear. "hide in our own private dreamland," is a great line. Your picture accentuates this poem well. Nice poem.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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This is a very nice poem. The message of this poem is clear. "hide in our own private dreamland," is a great line. Your picture accentuates this poem well. Nice poem.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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Thank you very much for the review. .
Blessed be
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You're welcome.