A Thunderstorm
Thunderstorms are often violent and frightening.2 total reviews
Comment from Paul McFarland
Nicely done, but the last line is puzzling. "Mellifuousness". I think you need to get rid of the "ness". You might even try for another word there.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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Nicely done, but the last line is puzzling. "Mellifuousness". I think you need to get rid of the "ness". You might even try for another word there.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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Thanks for the read and the suggestion I will edit.
Comment from dellsworthpoet
A nice poem that fits the form requirements. The subject fits the sharp toned words. The flow is good. The images are crisp. The presentation with picture is compelling.
Suggestions:
In the second line I would suggest an emdash after drenching and perhaps rewording second part to "e'en birds won't chance to fly"
Thanks for a good read.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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A nice poem that fits the form requirements. The subject fits the sharp toned words. The flow is good. The images are crisp. The presentation with picture is compelling.
Suggestions:
In the second line I would suggest an emdash after drenching and perhaps rewording second part to "e'en birds won't chance to fly"
Thanks for a good read.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022
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Thanks for the read and sound suggestions. I will edit.
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You are welcome.
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You are welcome.
