Feckless Men
War and Hate47 total reviews
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Well written poem about the generational, sometimes even centuries old hatred that still culminates in war today. Loved all the descriptive alliteration Roy. A good write. Cheers
Valda
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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Well written poem about the generational, sometimes even centuries old hatred that still culminates in war today. Loved all the descriptive alliteration Roy. A good write. Cheers
Valda
Comment Written 20-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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Thanks Valda, for these excellent comments and a great review, blessings Roy
Comment from jessizero
Hatred does carry over generations. Some people don't even know why they hate. Only Christ can save us. Thank you for sharing this poem. Best wishes, and I'm sorry if I misunderstood.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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Hatred does carry over generations. Some people don't even know why they hate. Only Christ can save us. Thank you for sharing this poem. Best wishes, and I'm sorry if I misunderstood.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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Thanks Jessi, for these excellent comments and a great review, blessings Roy
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a well told warning of how hate brings horror and how gossip is one of the spreaders of hate. It also shows the faith can fight against this evil.
I think harkens should be harken
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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This is a well told warning of how hate brings horror and how gossip is one of the spreaders of hate. It also shows the faith can fight against this evil.
I think harkens should be harken
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 20-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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Thanks Joan, for these excellent comments and a great review, blessings Roy
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You're welcome on both accounts, Roy.
Joan
Comment from MissMerri
An excellent poem, rhythmic and melodic. The topic is timely and your author notes an essay I wish you had posted separately. I saw one possible typo only, which you will see too if you look closely. Line 16, did you mean to have an apostrophe in rewards? Perhaps that was on purpose. Anyway I liked this poem and the notes too. Thanks for a good read.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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An excellent poem, rhythmic and melodic. The topic is timely and your author notes an essay I wish you had posted separately. I saw one possible typo only, which you will see too if you look closely. Line 16, did you mean to have an apostrophe in rewards? Perhaps that was on purpose. Anyway I liked this poem and the notes too. Thanks for a good read.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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Thanks Adonna, for these fantastic comments and lovely review, blessings Roy
Comment from BLACKTITANIUM86
Yeah, you are right about not being able to do this type of trip again. For, the world as we use to know it, no longer exist. And you painted a very vivid picture of that. Keep Writng
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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Yeah, you are right about not being able to do this type of trip again. For, the world as we use to know it, no longer exist. And you painted a very vivid picture of that. Keep Writng
Comment Written 20-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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Thanks for these excellent comments and a great review, blessings Roy
Comment from JLR
Roy this is a wonderful submission. I was particularly impacted by your stanza: Men's hearts become infection's host,
a writhing wraith, a ghoulish ghost,
A solid example of unforced end rhymes and near rhyme and quite representative of our current world experience.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2022
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Roy this is a wonderful submission. I was particularly impacted by your stanza: Men's hearts become infection's host,
a writhing wraith, a ghoulish ghost,
A solid example of unforced end rhymes and near rhyme and quite representative of our current world experience.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2022
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Thanks Jim, for these terrific comments and super review, blessings Roy
Comment from Peter Mac
A stunning piece of writing. Says a lot and covers a lot of ground. Great concluding verse compliments the story.
I love the alliteration at the end of the 3rd verse. Also in the 3rd verse (not a criticism - I just want to learn), why the ' instead of the o in history ?
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2022
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A stunning piece of writing. Says a lot and covers a lot of ground. Great concluding verse compliments the story.
I love the alliteration at the end of the 3rd verse. Also in the 3rd verse (not a criticism - I just want to learn), why the ' instead of the o in history ?
Comment Written 20-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2022
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Thanks so much Peter, for these marvellous comments and a terrific review, comments blessings Roy
Comment from Ulla
Hi Roy, again you've written a beautiful poem. What is going on in Ukraine is absolutely unbelievable. My heart cries out for them. Three houses from mine is a wonderful bar/restaurant run by Maria. She's well loved in my village and in the whole valley. She's also Ukrainian. Her Mother fled the Soviet and brought up her daughter here. And now this! They still have family over there and they don't know their fate. I meet Maria almost every morning when I'm walking my dog, and we both burst into tears.
I'm glad you have your faith, but I certainly don't and never will, not until someone puts a bullet between Putin's rat eyes. I never knew I could hate as much as I do now.
I'm sorry but this is my response.Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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Hi Roy, again you've written a beautiful poem. What is going on in Ukraine is absolutely unbelievable. My heart cries out for them. Three houses from mine is a wonderful bar/restaurant run by Maria. She's well loved in my village and in the whole valley. She's also Ukrainian. Her Mother fled the Soviet and brought up her daughter here. And now this! They still have family over there and they don't know their fate. I meet Maria almost every morning when I'm walking my dog, and we both burst into tears.
I'm glad you have your faith, but I certainly don't and never will, not until someone puts a bullet between Putin's rat eyes. I never knew I could hate as much as I do now.
I'm sorry but this is my response.Ulla:)))
Comment Written 19-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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Anybody who gives His Son out of love for us you can?t possibly comprehend, He?d rather forgive than condemn, look at your reaction, you think like.Putin Ulla, thank you, blessings Roy
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No, I beg to differ. There are really some evil people walking this earth. I could never think like Putin, or be like him. That's a preposterous thought and suggestion. I know I'm not alone in thinking like I do. All best, Ulla:)))
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I didn?t mean to to say you?re like him, or think like him, but you?re not like me, nor think like me either. You don?t believe in God, but you have no trouble in accusing Him, you can?t have it both ways. We are all tainted Ulla, including you.
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No that is right. I'm not like you and you're not like me. Thank goodness for the difference. What we're all so tainted with is beyond me. I know what Putin is tainted with, though.
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Tainted just means our ways are polluted, there?s no degrees, sin is sin. Perfection is perfection, imperfection is imperfection. Forgiving others should be normal, if we don?t, then we are no better than they. My faith is simple, not complex, but my faith?s not in me Ulla, childlikeness is a choice.
Comment from Laurie Holding
Oh, man, you make it look so easy! I'm going with all six stars on this one, mostly because when this is read aloud your voice is so true and your words are so carefully chosen and yet they sound natural to the ear. As if you were just talking, rapping, if you will. This is spot on and timely, as are most of your poems, and I really hope you submit your work to publications and contests that might get you some well-deserved acclaim.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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Oh, man, you make it look so easy! I'm going with all six stars on this one, mostly because when this is read aloud your voice is so true and your words are so carefully chosen and yet they sound natural to the ear. As if you were just talking, rapping, if you will. This is spot on and timely, as are most of your poems, and I really hope you submit your work to publications and contests that might get you some well-deserved acclaim.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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Thanks Laurie, for these marvellous comments and a great review, blessings Roy
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
This is wonderfully written and truly moved me. There is so, so much hate in this world; and although I believe people would try to work it out amongst themselves, governments and media help to perpetuate the beliefs and resentments that are then passed down to the next generation. It makes me so sad.
You're a very gifted writer. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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This is wonderfully written and truly moved me. There is so, so much hate in this world; and although I believe people would try to work it out amongst themselves, governments and media help to perpetuate the beliefs and resentments that are then passed down to the next generation. It makes me so sad.
You're a very gifted writer. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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Thanks Pam, for these marvellous comments and a great review, blessings Roy
