Comment from John Ciarmello

Excellent

This is beautiful, Ricky. Thank you for sharing this heart wrenching story. I wish you all the best in dealing with this loss. This is a hard life you have sculpted out so wonderfully in all your writings. I only wish you the best.

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2022

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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022

Trying John.
A hard Month.
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1024

Comment from Shannon Ramos

Average

I enjoyed reading your poem. I understood, sort of, where you were going with it after reading the editors notes. It was hard to follow, but you have a great start to your new journey as a writer. Keep writing.

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2022

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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022

Exceptional piece my friend and such tragedy but the storyline kept my attention throughout the piece.
Thank you for sharing and many blessings to you and your family.
Melody Michelle
She gave this a six star review by the way. Two others gave it five star reviews.
I've been on this site in writing for over 15 years I'm not on a New Journey.
You keep writing on your new Journey.
And, have a blessed day.
Doctor Ricky 1024
"Still Preaching the Choir here at Fanstory"

Comment from Melodie Michelle

Exceptional

Exceptional piece my friend and such a tragedy but the storyline kept my attention throughout the piece!
Thank you for sharing and many blessings to you and your family;-)

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2022

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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022

I thank you very much Melody as always it's a pleasure to see people enjoying my writing and properly reviewing it!
Doctor Ricky 1024

Comment from Leann DS

Excellent

I am so deeply sorry for the loss of your son. I also believe in organ donation, and I and all my children are organ donors.

I have noticed that you're writing usually has creative thinking and interesting topics. I have pointed this out before but you did not receive it well, but I would not be doing you any favors by not pointing out again, the punctuation issues that you have consistently through all of your pieces.

Please let me know if you are here only for entertainment in writing, or if you wish to learn and improve your techniques. Personally, I want people to tell me when I do something wrong so I can learn from it and fix it. I do realize that everyone is not here for that reason, so let me know how you feel about this issue so that I can act accordingly in the future in regards to my reviews.

Again, my deepest sympathy to you. Hugs and blessings.

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2022

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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2022

When it comes to the writings that I review here on fan story.
The first thing I'm trying to do is understand the content.
One out of a thousand I will take away a star for grammar issues.
Country ranch writer if you've ever recently reviewed his work he has horrible vision and he just had an operation and he said it's just going to get worse because it's one eye is scarred.
Of course I did not chastise him for that and of course I do all my writings verbally on a cell phone after written down I do read review it but sometimes I don't catch all the issues.
Also I've been told my writing style is unique so you need to realize that that I will capitalize things there won't be running sentences as such as this.
Thanks,
Doctor Ricky 1024
"Still Preaching the Choir here at Fanstory"

reply by Leann DS on 18-Mar-2022

I can 100% relate to having typos and dictation errors throughout my writing, as I am also blind, totally blind. I usually don't take stars away for errors, but I try to point them out so they can be fixed. If a piece of writing is so bad that I cannot, in good conscience, give them five stars, I don't even review it.

Yes, I agree that your writing style is very unique and many times, very thought-provoking. I enjoy the content of your writing. What I wanted to point out is the use of the question mark when used incorrectly. You tend to use that punctuation mark when a period or even a comma would be much more appropriate. It is very distracting to me, and just incorrect punctuation. I think with many of your submissions, if that topic were addressed, you would be able to earn six stars rather than five stars from many reviewer's.

In addition, the excessive use of question marks will not fly by an editor or publisher if you plan to publish your work. They won't take your writing seriously, which is a shame. your writing has a lot to offer.

Please do not take my comments as a harsh criticism with no intent. I only wish to help you make your writing the best it can be.

Hugs and blessings to you.