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"The Gift of Life 2003"

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Comment from barbara.wilkey
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I am not sure why this didn't come into my PM box. I am not at all happy about that. I am glad I found it. I think I read parts of it earlier.

(Silly Goose don't you know?) (comma need after 'Goose')

 Comment Written 21-Jan-2023


reply by the author on 21-Jan-2023
    Written so man of these for Jason.
    This is only the latest.
    The original was sent back for editing, while another's been printed.
    Thanks,
    Doctor Ricky1024
Comment from prettybluebirds
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This is the kind of story I am used to seeing you write. Is that a picture of your son Jason when he was small? He sure was a nice-looking little guy. I can always feel the pain behind and between the words you write.

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2023


reply by the author on 18-Jan-2023
    Yes,
    Jason
    ..
    July (Corinne Alexis
    April (,Kyly Erin Harbach)
    September (Dana Alyse Smrkovsky)
    October (Me)
    November (Jason Richard Smrkovsky)
    And, Nikki Megan Harbach
    My Family.
    Thanks,
    Doctor Ricky 1024
    Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko
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The objective correlative of your work reminisces the sudden overturning of a man's painful life experience into a blissful one by angels.

The work highlights an experiential metamorphosis of a life mired in such painful galore into its direct opposite, made possible only by angels.

The work earns its texture through its effective use of anecdotes synonymous with the transformation seasonings of angels.

Excellent work. Bravo.

 Comment Written 07-May-2022


reply by the author on 08-May-2022
    As written on the material of my skinned and broken heart.
    This book will show my God given ability.
    Thanks,
    And, happy Mother's day to your loved ones.
    Doctor Ricky 1024

reply by Lloyd T. Okoko on 08-May-2022
    Amen! Remain Blessed and keep on flourishing without any hindrance inJesus name
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
Comment from in777wr#
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This is a well written chapter. Thank God for His Angels. God's messengers. Your message is clear, and flows well. I also like the thought that man can recreate after they been through pain. Very nice.

 Comment Written 16-Mar-2022


reply by the author on 16-Mar-2022
    You'll notice as I move forward into this the dates will change back as far as 18 years.
    Thanks for taking the time to read the Prologue, as well as, the first chapter.
    Doctor Ricky
Comment from Patience Parks
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It may just be me, but I'm not closely following or understanding. It seems a bit vague. I can see it developing though. I think the punctuation needs to be corrected. I think removing some words that are not needed would be helpful as well.

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2022


reply by the author on 16-Mar-2022
    This is a wonderful piece. The format is very different from your Norm. It was refreshing to see you change it up a bit.
    The piece is well written as usual.
    I enjoyed this Ricky.
    Note: Five Stars by John Ciarmello.
    ...
    Note: Normally if I see somebody's writing with grammar issues.
    I will tell them and tell them the corrections needed.
    If you even read the prologue you'll understand that this is a masterpiece.
    And it will be shown here first to the fan story reviewers.
    There Are Young writers here and these Young writers need to be judged by their content not any supposed.
    But thanks for your time and review.
    Doctor Ricky 1024
    Still Preaching the Choir here at Fanstory"
Comment from John Ciarmello
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This is a wonderful piece. The format is very different from your norm. It was refreshing to see you change it up a bit. The piece is well written as usual. I enjoyed this, Ricky.

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2022


reply by the author on 16-Mar-2022
    Thank you very much John for stopping by and checking out my new book.
    A wonderful rest of your week.
    Doctor Ricky
Comment from pa Banardi
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i thought this was very heart warming. It was written well and it touched my heart. Good luck going forward with your writing. I look forward to reading more of your work....

 Comment Written 15-Mar-2022


reply by the author on 15-Mar-2022
    I thank you sir and be prepared to be amazed!
    Doctor Ricky 1024
    "Still Preaching the Choir here at Fanstory"