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God And War

6 Sentence 120 Word Spiritual Fiction Contest Entry

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Comment from Terry Broxson
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I don't know how you managed to do it with all these restrictions for the contest, but it looks like you did. It probably felt like a mouse running through a maze. Good luck in the contest. Terry.

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2022

Comment from lyenochka
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I think you covered all the contest rules well and avoided all the forbidden words while still implying the current world situation. God certainly can do all things and save those He chooses. Best wishes in the contest!

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2022

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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Excellent entry for the 6 Sentence Spiritual Fiction writing prompt contest. You did a good job following the rules.

You kept the story relevant to our times. You got my vote. I like that you colored needed words red.

Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2022

Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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A plea for war to end here although I didn't understand all your words here, I did understand the message as good is constantly fighting evil in this world, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2022

Comment from MissMerri
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I found nothing in this story to dislike or change. It is a God-glorifying account and therefore, I'm in total support. Even though it is fiction, it tells a good story, has a beginning, middle and a victorious ending, so I see nothing to change. Good luck to you in this contest. I'd say you have an excellent entry here. MM

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2022

Comment from Janetsue
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You have included the required words in an excellent way. God truly is great and He loves answering prayers falling within His divine will. We are to bring all concerns to Him. Some time our prayers are answered quickly, and at other times it might take years. Praying unceasingly is a positive encouragement that relieves stress and expresses love for our Creator God. Best wishes in the contest.

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2022


reply by the author on 13-Mar-2022
    Thank you for these controversial incomplete words beyond the theme of the work; obviously I do not understand your point or points or point of view and the logic of writing such controversial words; you read your own words:

    You have included the required words in an excellent way. God truly is great and He loves answering prayers falling within His divine will. We are to bring all concerns to Him. Some time our prayers are answered quickly, and at other times it might take years. Praying unceasingly is a positive encouragement that relieves stress and expresses love for our Creator God. Best wishes in the
    1) You have included the required words in an excellent way.- you have controversially acted in a different way, not following your own words
    2) Praying unceasingly is a positive encouragement that relieves stress and expresses love for our Creator ? this line is not understood, would you please explain and clarify your points?
    3) Praying unceasingly is a positive encouragement that relieves stress and expresses love for our Creator God. ? why this line? What is the relevance to my work? A statement beyond the scope of my work; please explain and clarify the point how you have related this to my work
    4) Praying unceasingly is a positive encouragement that relieves stress and expresses love for our Creator God. ? what is the relevance of your writing praying unceasingly and how this relates to my work and where, please explain and clarify, I wish to know your clarification and explanation relevant to my work
    5) positive encouragement that relieves stress ? I do not understand how you relate this to my work; so please explain and clarify your points with reference to my work
    6) love for our Creator God.?why these words and how you relate them to my work? Please explain and clarify your point with reference to my work; because I could not find anything in my work so that you could write such words; please please and please let me know your volume of wisdom and help me to learn so that I can write wisely

    You know this is a blind contest and I am not allowed to share my name or my identity
    just you explain and clarify your words and send automatically it will reach me, be sure, you are wise, hope you know, anyway, wish you every success in your chosen goal, be wise to explain and clarify your own words to help a poor author
reply by Janetsue on 13-Mar-2022
    First off, I have had several eye surgeries and I simply put my cursor on the wrong rating. I apologize for this unintentional mistake. I have gone back and changed the rating to the 5 stars I honestly had intended for my review.

    The required words used in your posting are: dream, God, benediction, Countries, World News, television, war, God, mankind. -- Please remember that what is read is absorbed by people with a multitude of different experiences. One's interpretation of something is often a reflection of their own life experiences.

    With world-happenings today, Countries, World News, television, war all are stressor words; especially when so many pictures being seen by children. How can any person not feel stress when a country is fighting for its freedom in a nuclear age? (I ran out of allowed space....)
reply by Janetsue on 13-Mar-2022
    I am a spiritual person and worked for five years in full-time prison ministry, was a hospice volunteer, and a radio reader for the blind. I also ran a federal-backed program assisting the homeless. My perspective is frequently one of concern for others and how to help them emotionally from having experienced situations often very dark?.such as the current death and destruction in the Ukraine.

    Your mention the word PRAYED. Praying unceasingly means not literally every second of the day?it refers to bringing things observed and felt before God at any time to seek his assistance and confidence ? but especially to praise Him when something is uplifting.

    Your posting is about a dream concerning God Almighty who is the Creator of the World. You show that a child?s prayer has been answered in a miraculous way.

    The whole poem is spiritual and it affected me that way?in large part, because of my background.
    Your reply to me ends with this: ??and please let me know your volume of wisdom and help me to learn so that I can write wisely -- Just by writing this statement indicates that you are a seeker of truth and are not afraid to address what you wonder about. Skillful writing develops by observing, questioning, reading all kinds of writing, and continuing to write what you feel in response to your own experiences. Good writing also means being creative in how you say what you want to say.

    Please stay safe and well?and keep posting. FanStory is a wonderful place to learn and increase our writing skills. ? Janet :-)







reply by Janetsue on 13-Mar-2022
    Please excuse my typos...I have not yet learned to conquer them! Also, the site is changing my dashes to question marks which can be confusing when it is being read. I am forgiving the computer program for doing this.) lol
Comment from Pangalactic
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Great job on this spiritually devout writing prompt. I like the popping red key words and the theme speaking to the greatness of the all seeing God.
Well written

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2022

Comment from humpwhistle
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Wow! Those are a lot of requirements and restrictions. Near as I can tell, you've fulfilled them all. I know I couldn't. You have my awe and admiration.
Best of luck at the polls.

Peace, Lee

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2022

Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
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You made some nice long sentences to get all the words in and make sense of the necessary words. Good job. You might want to change first sentence-- whisper(ed to) him . . .

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2022

Comment from flylikeaneagle
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Great witness to the world in your story about God.
May he rescue and protect the Ukraines as they leave
and fight for their country. Everyone is important.
flylikeaneagle

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2022