God And War
6 Sentence 120 Word Spiritual Fiction Contest Entry45 total reviews
Comment from Jay Squires
It's good to put a face with the words. And I guess congratulatons are in order with the attainment of ATB and being in the number thirty-one position for the month of March. I wonder if this moves you closer to your goal of holding the world record in published books.
I am only giving you a four-star rating this time. You might look at it as a cumulative deduction because I've been thinking about it for a long time. Your body of work here on FanStory is really rather limited. It all involves God and the attributes you assign to God of Omniscience, Omnipotence, and Omnipresence does not engage the brain any more than a Sunday-school teacher can engage the brain of his or her students. As a writer with such profound aspirations of having none higher, you should strive, I would think, toward filling your reader's minds with the mysteries behind God's Omniscience, Omnipotence, and Omnipresence. What does it mean to me? What does it mean to the fighters in the streets of Ukraine? What does it mean to you? I mean truly. Not just as labels on pickle jars, that you fill up with occasional praise and then put them on the shelf for another day.
Give us something to stretch our minds. You must know huge truths from your study of the Bible. Startle us with them. Stretch our minds to the bursting point, then add to it.
I'm not trying to be mean-spirited, ALCREATOR LITT DEAR, but please don't keep feeding us pap. Inspire us with the spiritual fire that burns in you. Light us on fire, too.
Then your world record, when it is achieved, will be something you'll look at with humility because your faith-based inspiration will leave joyful ashes and love.
Jay
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2022
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It's good to put a face with the words. And I guess congratulatons are in order with the attainment of ATB and being in the number thirty-one position for the month of March. I wonder if this moves you closer to your goal of holding the world record in published books.
I am only giving you a four-star rating this time. You might look at it as a cumulative deduction because I've been thinking about it for a long time. Your body of work here on FanStory is really rather limited. It all involves God and the attributes you assign to God of Omniscience, Omnipotence, and Omnipresence does not engage the brain any more than a Sunday-school teacher can engage the brain of his or her students. As a writer with such profound aspirations of having none higher, you should strive, I would think, toward filling your reader's minds with the mysteries behind God's Omniscience, Omnipotence, and Omnipresence. What does it mean to me? What does it mean to the fighters in the streets of Ukraine? What does it mean to you? I mean truly. Not just as labels on pickle jars, that you fill up with occasional praise and then put them on the shelf for another day.
Give us something to stretch our minds. You must know huge truths from your study of the Bible. Startle us with them. Stretch our minds to the bursting point, then add to it.
I'm not trying to be mean-spirited, ALCREATOR LITT DEAR, but please don't keep feeding us pap. Inspire us with the spiritual fire that burns in you. Light us on fire, too.
Then your world record, when it is achieved, will be something you'll look at with humility because your faith-based inspiration will leave joyful ashes and love.
Jay
Comment Written 15-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2022
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Comment from pa Banardi
This was very nicely written and true to facts. I enjoyed it but lost a little in all the different ways it was written but all and all it was very good.
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This was very nicely written and true to facts. I enjoyed it but lost a little in all the different ways it was written but all and all it was very good.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2022
Comment from pome lover
Al, you did great.
You incorporated the needed words and left out those that weren't allowed. And look at you - you got All Time Best and also you were recognized.
Congratulations, Sir! Well done.
Katharine
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Al, you did great.
You incorporated the needed words and left out those that weren't allowed. And look at you - you got All Time Best and also you were recognized.
Congratulations, Sir! Well done.
Katharine
Comment Written 15-Mar-2022
Comment from Mickamus J
Thank you for sharing. It is the hope for people when we look at how we are and what conflict may lead us to be lost in our understanding of life and love. We should believe that we can overcome. It is a good belief that we should share that things can be better if we look for them.
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Thank you for sharing. It is the hope for people when we look at how we are and what conflict may lead us to be lost in our understanding of life and love. We should believe that we can overcome. It is a good belief that we should share that things can be better if we look for them.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2022
Comment from Shirley McLain
You did a great job with your work, and I enjoyed the read. I did not see any mistakes. As far as I could tell, you met all the required elements. Have a great evening. Shirley
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You did a great job with your work, and I enjoyed the read. I did not see any mistakes. As far as I could tell, you met all the required elements. Have a great evening. Shirley
Comment Written 14-Mar-2022
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This fiction prose piece reinforces the Scriptures about having full faith and trust in God. The child in the story really BELIEVED in the power and love of God. His prayer (wish) was answered!
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This fiction prose piece reinforces the Scriptures about having full faith and trust in God. The child in the story really BELIEVED in the power and love of God. His prayer (wish) was answered!
Comment Written 14-Mar-2022
Comment from karenina
Congratulations on your win! I've arrived after the party! Nonetheless, I do think working within the enormous constraints of the many rules of this contest you've managed to eke out a most creative and impactful write.
These notes from the contest creator are rather chafing:
"I write this for some reviewers assume much, or neglect reading, or do not remember what they read, or wish to prove their wisdom ignorantly, and based on their knowledge write review unfairly, incorrectly, wrongly; I write this note so that my wise reviewers can avoid writing review unfairly, or incorrectly, or wrongly."
Less I am labeled ignorant I will simply offer my congratulations and move on!
Karenina
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Congratulations on your win! I've arrived after the party! Nonetheless, I do think working within the enormous constraints of the many rules of this contest you've managed to eke out a most creative and impactful write.
These notes from the contest creator are rather chafing:
"I write this for some reviewers assume much, or neglect reading, or do not remember what they read, or wish to prove their wisdom ignorantly, and based on their knowledge write review unfairly, incorrectly, wrongly; I write this note so that my wise reviewers can avoid writing review unfairly, or incorrectly, or wrongly."
Less I am labeled ignorant I will simply offer my congratulations and move on!
Karenina
Comment Written 14-Mar-2022
Comment from Mary Vigasin
I wanted to circle back after reading your spiritual fiction for the first time. Congratulations on winning. It was certainly thought-provoking and in doing so, you managed to incorporate all the required words, brilliantly.
Best wishes
Mary
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I wanted to circle back after reading your spiritual fiction for the first time. Congratulations on winning. It was certainly thought-provoking and in doing so, you managed to incorporate all the required words, brilliantly.
Best wishes
Mary
Comment Written 14-Mar-2022
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this writing prompt entry with us. I can see met the writing prompt rules. This is very well written. Yes, God knows all and is everywhere. I enjoyed reading.
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Thank you for sharing this writing prompt entry with us. I can see met the writing prompt rules. This is very well written. Yes, God knows all and is everywhere. I enjoyed reading.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2022
Comment from Leann DS
I like the story that this told. It was interesting and thought-provoking. Congratulations to you on winning the contest. It was well deserved. Have a wonderful week.
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I like the story that this told. It was interesting and thought-provoking. Congratulations to you on winning the contest. It was well deserved. Have a wonderful week.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2022
