Souls, what do you think?
Reflections of current situations10 total reviews
Comment from sunnilicious
Good luck in the contest. That was a uplifting poem. I found it to be spiritually enlightening. Well thought out. Clearly written. Good for new age thoughts. Nicely written. Exceptional work.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2022
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Good luck in the contest. That was a uplifting poem. I found it to be spiritually enlightening. Well thought out. Clearly written. Good for new age thoughts. Nicely written. Exceptional work.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2022
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Thank you for the review. I hope so too.
Comment from lyenochka
I appreciate your philosophical reflection in this poem. Religions and social mindsets are binding, but God did create us for freedom that enables us to choose hope, love of others and self.
I didn't understand this line:
Mangled as if strange paralysis, (as if "in" strange paralysis? otherwise, I would then read the "strange paralysis" to be the subject of the next line but it isn't)
humans us all, (makes "humans" feel like a verb. Maybe: humans, we all,) or "humans, all of us")
Forget that we are different, forget vanilla. (vanilla? That came out of the blue for me.)
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2022
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I appreciate your philosophical reflection in this poem. Religions and social mindsets are binding, but God did create us for freedom that enables us to choose hope, love of others and self.
I didn't understand this line:
Mangled as if strange paralysis, (as if "in" strange paralysis? otherwise, I would then read the "strange paralysis" to be the subject of the next line but it isn't)
humans us all, (makes "humans" feel like a verb. Maybe: humans, we all,) or "humans, all of us")
Forget that we are different, forget vanilla. (vanilla? That came out of the blue for me.)
Comment Written 15-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2022
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Yes. I would take into consideration what you have put across. May revisit the poem later. Thank you for your feedback! :)
Comment from Tom Horonzy
I get what you write. Let our spirit that filled our body upon our birth guide us for is we Choose the Right, life is good. When not, we Reap the Consequence. I don't understand when burnt we stick our hand in a fire again, but humans work that way as often as they don't.
As to a critique, on the line written:
Forget our rules, our societies' conundrum,..
would you consider "societal" an improvement to societies?
My favorite lines are:
Forget that we are different, forget vanilla.
Just be, true to the nature of our souls
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2022
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I get what you write. Let our spirit that filled our body upon our birth guide us for is we Choose the Right, life is good. When not, we Reap the Consequence. I don't understand when burnt we stick our hand in a fire again, but humans work that way as often as they don't.
As to a critique, on the line written:
Forget our rules, our societies' conundrum,..
would you consider "societal" an improvement to societies?
My favorite lines are:
Forget that we are different, forget vanilla.
Just be, true to the nature of our souls
Comment Written 13-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2022
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Yes, I think I will use that instead, thank you.
I know that we make mistakes but I was hoping that we could improve the statistics since we are supposed to be evolving. Just my thought.
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Where there is hope, there is light.
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That is true.
Comment from jessizero
Thank you for sharing your thoughts and opinions here. It was definitely food for thought. Keep writing, and keep up the good work. Best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2022
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Thank you for sharing your thoughts and opinions here. It was definitely food for thought. Keep writing, and keep up the good work. Best wishes to you.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2022
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Thank you for your feedback! :)
Comment from karenina
Stream of consciousness free verse that is boundless in possibilities...
Tapping in to the universal potential of the collective "we"...
You scatter seeds of affirmations here...
It's unique and glorious and original and
glowing!
"forget vanilla"
Yes! I want that framed!
Karenina
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2022
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Stream of consciousness free verse that is boundless in possibilities...
Tapping in to the universal potential of the collective "we"...
You scatter seeds of affirmations here...
It's unique and glorious and original and
glowing!
"forget vanilla"
Yes! I want that framed!
Karenina
Comment Written 12-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2022
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Thank you karenina! :)
I am glad you liked it and it reached out to you!
I am happy that you see it!
Have a good weekend!
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You as well!
Comment from Heather Burroughs
This is an incredibly relatable poem.
Wonderful work. It flowed nicely and read easily. Thank you for sharing. Many blessings to you and your loved ones
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2022
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This is an incredibly relatable poem.
Wonderful work. It flowed nicely and read easily. Thank you for sharing. Many blessings to you and your loved ones
Comment Written 12-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2022
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Thank you for your feedback! :)
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Thank you for your feedback! :)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
There are too many lies easily told these days with no consequences for telling them. There is also a lack of responsibility for one's actions too, we should be teaching our young to be responsible and always tell the truth, I fear the internet has encouraged our youth to say things they don't really mean and get away with it, a poignant write Mick, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2022
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There are too many lies easily told these days with no consequences for telling them. There is also a lack of responsibility for one's actions too, we should be teaching our young to be responsible and always tell the truth, I fear the internet has encouraged our youth to say things they don't really mean and get away with it, a poignant write Mick, love Dolly x
Comment Written 12-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2022
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Yes Dolly, we have a way to go. The tools are there for learning are ever-changing, but how and what we do with it, well, that is a different ball of yarn. Thank you for your feedback!
Comment from Kerry L Batchelder
The world is truly a sad and mangled place right now and thank goodness we have the chance to make choices. We are the ones responsible for our own choices no matter what others think. Great points!
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2022
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The world is truly a sad and mangled place right now and thank goodness we have the chance to make choices. We are the ones responsible for our own choices no matter what others think. Great points!
Comment Written 12-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2022
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Thank you for your kind feedback! :) have a good day!
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You as well.
Comment from Carlos' girl
I like what your are doing here, your overall theme. It is idealistic and beautiful.
I think in paragraph 2 travelers is spelled travelers.
I think if you could revise this to weave some rhymes in each paragraph you would have a great free verse poem
Nice work.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2022
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I like what your are doing here, your overall theme. It is idealistic and beautiful.
I think in paragraph 2 travelers is spelled travelers.
I think if you could revise this to weave some rhymes in each paragraph you would have a great free verse poem
Nice work.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2022
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Thank you for your feedback. I will revisit it soon.
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It's a good poem as is. No worries.
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
I enjoyed reading our poem. The topic is relatable to most with a strong message felt by all. Your writing is honest and flows naturally. Your tone is philosophical and your ideas are current. Do you often sit and think about these things? Or on this particular day something maybe triggered you. Whatever the case I;m glad you shared.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2022
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I enjoyed reading our poem. The topic is relatable to most with a strong message felt by all. Your writing is honest and flows naturally. Your tone is philosophical and your ideas are current. Do you often sit and think about these things? Or on this particular day something maybe triggered you. Whatever the case I;m glad you shared.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2022
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Thank you , K.L.Rockquemore, for your kind words and feedback!
