The Return
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Comment from l.raven
HI Sandra, yes late again...but I'll never miss a chapter...
I have a feeling Richard thinking Gwendolyn is a black swan...is going to kick him right in the butt...she has something up her petticoat...she won't let Richard get away with...the way he treats her...I got a feeling if she dumped Richard...he wouldn't be so rich...or popular...GURRRRRRR....I feel bad for Gwendolyn...beauty comes from the heart...
and I think him and Miles are going to go rounds...when he finds out Miles is still with Meg...
so Margot and Bessie need to get moving...you best talk to them...
when I was a kids...my mother said pretty much what your mother would say...except my mom would say...Just wait until your dad gets home...you'll be sorry...mark my words...and she was like an elephant...she didn't forget anything...
this is an awesome chapter my amazing friend...can't wait to go read the next one you...sending so much love from good ole sunny Florida beautiful you...Linda xxoo
we went to the library today...the woman was behind...but said she would have them all on the shelves within 10 days...I told her I would be leaving the 1st week of April...and she said they would be on by then...I want to send you a picture before I leave...
things here are slowing down...we're going to my brother Jim's Sunday...all Michael's family and friends will be there...it's like a reunion...we post pictures of times past...and have a cook out...and talk about family members passed...still hard to believe...sigh...
well I'm off to read the next chapter...love you girl...xxoo
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2022
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HI Sandra, yes late again...but I'll never miss a chapter...
I have a feeling Richard thinking Gwendolyn is a black swan...is going to kick him right in the butt...she has something up her petticoat...she won't let Richard get away with...the way he treats her...I got a feeling if she dumped Richard...he wouldn't be so rich...or popular...GURRRRRRR....I feel bad for Gwendolyn...beauty comes from the heart...
and I think him and Miles are going to go rounds...when he finds out Miles is still with Meg...
so Margot and Bessie need to get moving...you best talk to them...
when I was a kids...my mother said pretty much what your mother would say...except my mom would say...Just wait until your dad gets home...you'll be sorry...mark my words...and she was like an elephant...she didn't forget anything...
this is an awesome chapter my amazing friend...can't wait to go read the next one you...sending so much love from good ole sunny Florida beautiful you...Linda xxoo
we went to the library today...the woman was behind...but said she would have them all on the shelves within 10 days...I told her I would be leaving the 1st week of April...and she said they would be on by then...I want to send you a picture before I leave...
things here are slowing down...we're going to my brother Jim's Sunday...all Michael's family and friends will be there...it's like a reunion...we post pictures of times past...and have a cook out...and talk about family members passed...still hard to believe...sigh...
well I'm off to read the next chapter...love you girl...xxoo
Comment Written 21-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2022
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Dearest Linday, thank you for reading this chapter, I wasn't expecting you to, not with everything that has been happening. But I'm so glad you have.
I love that idea of all of you going to Jim's with photos and chatting about the memories you all hold. That is the nicest way to keep him with you. Michael will be sure to listen in and smile, with your mum and sister, too.
Okay, now for your amazing review. Lol, Gwendolyn kicking Richard in the butt! No, if she left Richard, she loses everything. Now she is married to him, he basically owns her and everything that was hers, belongs to him now. That's how it worked back in those days, and still does to a certain extent. Today, she'd get half of it back. I'm coming back as a man next time!!!!!
Aww, that you are still thinking of the library, you bring tears to my eyes, thank you. You have the loveliest heart ever.
Thank you, my incredible friend, for this lovely review. I'm so pleased to see you, you mean a lot to me. Love you loads, and loads more. xxxx Sandra xx
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Hi Sandra, ain't it the truth...
you get in a love relationship today...
and the guys try to own everything...
I'm all in for sharing...but that's not
what it's about today...looks like it came down though the generations...
and of course I'm going to read every chapter..I love this story...I just keep getting distracted...
I love getting together with friends and family sweet girl...but on a different occasion...but it will be good to see everyone...
well I'm going to bed my amazing friend...was a long day...and you are alwaysssss so welcome...love you more...and more...you mean the world to me...and so does Graham...the whiskey connoisseur...xxoo
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Brilliant depiction of a hateful marriage--the bit with the cloth is priceless--perfect example of showing vs telling of her contempt. Intriguing backstory!
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2022
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Brilliant depiction of a hateful marriage--the bit with the cloth is priceless--perfect example of showing vs telling of her contempt. Intriguing backstory!
Comment Written 16-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2022
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Thank you, Liz! What a lovely thing to say. I really appreciate your review. You've certainly put a smile on my face this morning. :)) Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from dmt1967
This is the best chapter, so far. I liked the way you let us explore the characters. I don't like Richard either and if I was his wife, I would put rat poison in his wine lol. Christ, good job I wasn't born back then. I would have been hung lol. Thank you for sharing and take care.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2022
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This is the best chapter, so far. I liked the way you let us explore the characters. I don't like Richard either and if I was his wife, I would put rat poison in his wine lol. Christ, good job I wasn't born back then. I would have been hung lol. Thank you for sharing and take care.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2022
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Wow! Thank you! What a lovely review, and such an encouraging one, too. No one likes Richard, lol. Thank you so much, my friend. You've made my day! Love and hugs, Sandra xx
Comment from Cindy Warren
Richard is awful. I can't wait till he gets what he has coming. I have no doubt he will. Poor Gwendolyn! Plain as puddin' and seems about as smart, tho I wouldn't count on that. She may be more than she seems, she's just so sad and never had a chance. I'd love to see her be part of Richard's downfall.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2022
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Richard is awful. I can't wait till he gets what he has coming. I have no doubt he will. Poor Gwendolyn! Plain as puddin' and seems about as smart, tho I wouldn't count on that. She may be more than she seems, she's just so sad and never had a chance. I'd love to see her be part of Richard's downfall.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2022
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Yes, Richard is awful, I don't think he has anything nice about him. There is more to Gwendolyn than he realises! Thanks, Cindy, for this lovely review. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from rspoet
Hello Sandra,
The plot twists slowly, with lots of unlikable people,
any one of whom might be the reason for Meg's trouble.
So far, Gwendolyn appears to be the top choice, but then the
father will likely be just as bad.
This is an excellent chapter to keep readers turning the pages.
Somehow, I think the ghosts are going to create some mayhem,
like some others ghosts did with a certain admiral. :)
Well done.
Best wishes.
Robert
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2022
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Hello Sandra,
The plot twists slowly, with lots of unlikable people,
any one of whom might be the reason for Meg's trouble.
So far, Gwendolyn appears to be the top choice, but then the
father will likely be just as bad.
This is an excellent chapter to keep readers turning the pages.
Somehow, I think the ghosts are going to create some mayhem,
like some others ghosts did with a certain admiral. :)
Well done.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment Written 15-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2022
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Lol! I still like that book, I had fun writing that one. Have you noticed I do like ghosts? I know that will surprise you, as it's not really that obvious!! The thing with being invisible, you can have so much more fun!
Thank you so much, Robert, for this lovely review and the golden star. I really appreciate them both. Warm hugs, dear friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from in777wr#
This is a well written story. "Richard " is some character. LOL. The story is very captivating. The characters are well developed. The story reads well. I have enjoyed reading this story. Nice job.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2022
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This is a well written story. "Richard " is some character. LOL. The story is very captivating. The characters are well developed. The story reads well. I have enjoyed reading this story. Nice job.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2022
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Thank you so much for reading this chapter, I'm delighted you enjoyed it. Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
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You're welcome.
Comment from Malcolm Rothery
It's always good that as a reader I can identify and at the same time, sympathise with various characters. There are people here you know you would hate and others you just want to give a hug to. Very well written and has me wanting to find out more....
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2022
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It's always good that as a reader I can identify and at the same time, sympathise with various characters. There are people here you know you would hate and others you just want to give a hug to. Very well written and has me wanting to find out more....
Comment Written 15-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2022
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Thank you so much, Marcolm, for reading this chapter, and you lovely comments. You've really made my day with you kind words. Thank you. And welcome to Fanstory! :)) Sandra xx
Comment from Ethan Vandervelden
Really good chapter! As always I enjoyed the read and loved the progression. I am looking forward to continuing the story and finding out the details!
This is also a really cool approach to the circumstance that Margot is in. It has a little bit of a "who done it" vibe in this chapter and that did a great job of bringing the reader into a lighter place this chapter. I enjoyed it very much! Thank you for sharing!
-Ethan
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2022
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Really good chapter! As always I enjoyed the read and loved the progression. I am looking forward to continuing the story and finding out the details!
This is also a really cool approach to the circumstance that Margot is in. It has a little bit of a "who done it" vibe in this chapter and that did a great job of bringing the reader into a lighter place this chapter. I enjoyed it very much! Thank you for sharing!
-Ethan
Comment Written 15-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2022
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Thank you so much, Ethan, for another of your lovely reviews. It's so nice to read how much you enjoyed this chapter. I really appreciate it. Thank you! :)) Sandra xx
Comment from estory
I thought it was a real strong chapter, it started off really well with your description of Bessie and Margot entering the house like two unseen spirits blowing open the door. The servants get a bit of a scare there. And then they go through the house unseen and eavesdrop on the conversations where they find the bitter Gwendolyn and another motive for killing of Meg. You are widening the net here, creating lots of suspense and I liked the details you put in placing the scene. estory
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2022
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I thought it was a real strong chapter, it started off really well with your description of Bessie and Margot entering the house like two unseen spirits blowing open the door. The servants get a bit of a scare there. And then they go through the house unseen and eavesdrop on the conversations where they find the bitter Gwendolyn and another motive for killing of Meg. You are widening the net here, creating lots of suspense and I liked the details you put in placing the scene. estory
Comment Written 15-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2022
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I'm so glad you liked this part, estory, and I have to say how pleased I was to read you thought it a strong chapter. Thank really made my day. And thank you also for the golden star! That was the icing on the top. Thanks, my friend. Warm hugs, Sandra xxxx
Comment from alexisleech
You are so good at spinning a fascinating web, Sandra, and this chapter proves it yet again. Wouldn't it be wonderful to be invisible when you have to solve a problem? There again, one might hear things you don't like!
I look forward to reading on and finding out what you have in store for us next.
Alexis xxx
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2022
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You are so good at spinning a fascinating web, Sandra, and this chapter proves it yet again. Wouldn't it be wonderful to be invisible when you have to solve a problem? There again, one might hear things you don't like!
I look forward to reading on and finding out what you have in store for us next.
Alexis xxx
Comment Written 15-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2022
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Thank you, Alexis, for your amazing review, and all those stars. I'm glad you enjoyed this part, now we are playing 'who dunnit?' as one reviewer told me! lol. I hope things are going well in France? We'll catch up when you have a chance. Love and hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx