Deal of Life
2-4-2 poem10 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the 2-4-2 writing prompt contest.. good syllables count and connection between lines. Excellent message about kindness.
The font is hard to read. You need a lighter color.
Good luck in the contest!
Gypsy
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Excellent entry for the 2-4-2 writing prompt contest.. good syllables count and connection between lines. Excellent message about kindness.
The font is hard to read. You need a lighter color.
Good luck in the contest!
Gypsy
Comment Written 09-Mar-2022
Comment from Bill Schott
This 2-4-2, The Deal of Life, has the right setup and reminds the readers that you get the world you work at and build to. If it is not what you want, work for change.
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This 2-4-2, The Deal of Life, has the right setup and reminds the readers that you get the world you work at and build to. If it is not what you want, work for change.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2022
Comment from jessizero
How true! You sent a good message using only eight syllables, which isn't easy to do. Congratulations on that! Thanks for sharing. Keep up the good work.
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How true! You sent a good message using only eight syllables, which isn't easy to do. Congratulations on that! Thanks for sharing. Keep up the good work.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2022
Comment from Mia Twysted
There is so much truth to your piece. The mess that is created when people do not take the time to be kind is bringing the world to its knees. This is a wonderful poem.
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There is so much truth to your piece. The mess that is created when people do not take the time to be kind is bringing the world to its knees. This is a wonderful poem.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2022
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Kindness improves the mood of a person: Kindness provides a boost to hormones in your brain that give you feelings of satisfaction and well-being. This phenomenon is called a "helpers high". Love the image.
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Kindness improves the mood of a person: Kindness provides a boost to hormones in your brain that give you feelings of satisfaction and well-being. This phenomenon is called a "helpers high". Love the image.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2022
Comment from T B Botts
Boy isn't that the truth? What a difference it would make in this world if we all lived by the golden rule, caring for others the way we would like to be treated. It's the old law of sowing and reaping. Thanks so much for sharing this thoughtful poem.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
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Boy isn't that the truth? What a difference it would make in this world if we all lived by the golden rule, caring for others the way we would like to be treated. It's the old law of sowing and reaping. Thanks so much for sharing this thoughtful poem.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 08-Mar-2022
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Yes, simple kindness is especially powerful in the lives of those who are going through hard times. As you say, life really can be a mess. You've made good use of these few syllables.
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Yes, simple kindness is especially powerful in the lives of those who are going through hard times. As you say, life really can be a mess. You've made good use of these few syllables.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2022
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is very good and has a great picture for illustration. These 8 syllable poems seem like they would be difficult, but I have read quite a few really good ones. Best of luck in the contest.
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This is very good and has a great picture for illustration. These 8 syllable poems seem like they would be difficult, but I have read quite a few really good ones. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2022
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello author, a timely poem. Kindness, something that the world certainly needs more of. Of special note:
Life's mess
(Life's mess, indeed)
Well-chosen artwork. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck.
LateBloomer
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Hello author, a timely poem. Kindness, something that the world certainly needs more of. Of special note:
Life's mess
(Life's mess, indeed)
Well-chosen artwork. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck.
LateBloomer
Comment Written 07-Mar-2022
Comment from kahpot
Excellent, when kindness is forgotten there is nothing left but a mess, a big mess for all, love your words, a powerful message, and your chosen artwork is very fitting, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
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Excellent, when kindness is forgotten there is nothing left but a mess, a big mess for all, love your words, a powerful message, and your chosen artwork is very fitting, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 07-Mar-2022