Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

You have a magical skill when telling a story in a poem and this poem is well rhymed and a joy to read. Congratulations on your worthy win, a talented write from a skilful pen, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 28-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2023

Thank you, that means a lot, coming from such a talented poet like you. :)

Comment from pome lover

Excellent

Oh! That is terrible! Awww, did you have to kill her off?
And burn to death, I can't think of anything worse. And surely there were windows and a back door where she couldn't gotten out.
Anyway, Congrats on your win!
Katharine

 Comment Written 28-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2023

Thanks. I'm feeling particularly Halloweeny, so I had to repost this! Lol.

Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick

Excellent

Wow! This one really gave me goosebumps. It has a great flow and rhyme scheme. Well put together. This is a well written and a freaky story keeps you wondering what's coming next. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2022

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reply by the author on 08-Mar-2022

Thank you for reading my poem, so glad to hear from you. :)

reply by Joanne Gill-Maddick on 08-Mar-2022

Your welcome 🙂

Comment from Rosemary Everson1

Excellent

The poem is written so very spooky and rent free, (if you want to live in that kind of house). They always say that many of the spirits or ghosts sometimes will appear if they have been murdered in the house. Ouch!

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2022

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reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022

Thanks for reviewing my poem, I'm always glad to hear from you. :)

Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)

Excellent

This is an excellent story that drew me in, and then held me gripped... until the last two stanzas that I found slightly forced to suit the dictates of your rhymes, rather than those of the tale.

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2022

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reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022

Thanks for the great review, I'll look over the last two stanzas. I appreciate you reading my poem. :)

Comment from Tom Horonzy

Excellent

Excellent. This story has a chance to win. ................................................................................................................................

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2022

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reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022

A man of few words..hahaha! Just kidding...thank you for this nice review. :)

Comment from WriterHeather

Exceptional

That poor girl! She doesn't know what she did in her past lives! Those ghosts sound like a bunch of bitches. This is incredibly imaginative and creative! Well done!

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2022

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2022

Thank you for this starry review, it's so appreciated. :)

Comment from Rachel Jamerson1

Excellent

Wow! This is a compelling tale. It has mystery, as well as ghosts. The ending is a surprise and leaves the reader with something to think about. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2022

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2022

Thank you for reading my poem..I'm glad you liked it. :)

Comment from Mickamus J

Excellent

What a deal indeed! For fear and death, all free with occupants that presided before. Very interesting build-up and strength of the words used to portray that.

 Comment Written 06-Mar-2022

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2022

Thanks so much for this great review, it's very appreciated. :)

Comment from Regina Elliott

Excellent

Hi!
As one who lives in a haunted
house, this is quite a story
of creepy goings on. The last
stanza that contains,
"Heat is paid and comes with
free fear," is a clever use of
words. All the best. ~

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 Comment Written 06-Mar-2022

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reply by the author on 06-Mar-2022

Thank you! Wow! You live in a haunted house? That would be very interesting. Thanks for reading my poem. :)