God On Doon
God reject him32 total reviews
Comment from Mickamus J
It is really a nice read and the ending was really nice and sweet. It clearly showed how we are always surrounded by angels and they don't even know that they are. Thank you for sharing.
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It is really a nice read and the ending was really nice and sweet. It clearly showed how we are always surrounded by angels and they don't even know that they are. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2022
Comment from Bill Schott
This ninety-word spiritual fiction, God on Doon, has a sad tone to it all the way up to the ending where we find that one's opinion of himself is far less than how his friends feel. Nice.
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This ninety-word spiritual fiction, God on Doon, has a sad tone to it all the way up to the ending where we find that one's opinion of himself is far less than how his friends feel. Nice.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2022
Comment from John Ciarmello
This is a beautiful piece. It is to no surprise well written. It flows well and is enlightening and enchanting. I wish you much success with the contest. Best wishes
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This is a beautiful piece. It is to no surprise well written. It flows well and is enlightening and enchanting. I wish you much success with the contest. Best wishes
Comment Written 08-Mar-2022
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
What a lot of rules you had to contend with! It really left you with nothing to say anything clearly. God reject ... I don't understand this, you're saying God rejected him, but He doesn't do that. Anyway, you have mastered the contest rules, and come up with this fine story. Well done and good luck! :)) Sandra xx
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What a lot of rules you had to contend with! It really left you with nothing to say anything clearly. God reject ... I don't understand this, you're saying God rejected him, but He doesn't do that. Anyway, you have mastered the contest rules, and come up with this fine story. Well done and good luck! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 08-Mar-2022
Comment from Mia Twysted
"You are an angel of ours." I love this sentence as it says that he is loved which is something we all want. Just to be loved and accepted.
Very nice piece.
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"You are an angel of ours." I love this sentence as it says that he is loved which is something we all want. Just to be loved and accepted.
Very nice piece.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2022
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
I feel this guardian angel is perhaps fictional because God is for everybody. He is with us no matter what, until the judgement day when we are judged. The guardian angel in this story is an angel for his own family.
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I feel this guardian angel is perhaps fictional because God is for everybody. He is with us no matter what, until the judgement day when we are judged. The guardian angel in this story is an angel for his own family.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2022
Comment from karenina
You did well within the many constraints of what seems to be overzealous restrictions. It's like tying your hands and asking you to steer the bicycle...
Nonetheless, you've stepped up to the challenge and proven it can be done. --
Karenina
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You did well within the many constraints of what seems to be overzealous restrictions. It's like tying your hands and asking you to steer the bicycle...
Nonetheless, you've stepped up to the challenge and proven it can be done. --
Karenina
Comment Written 07-Mar-2022
Comment from Shirley McLain
You did a good job, and I only found one thing to suggest to you. Good luck in the contest. Shirley
"God reject make me an angel." this doesn't read right to me. You might try God rejected making me an angel.
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You did a good job, and I only found one thing to suggest to you. Good luck in the contest. Shirley
"God reject make me an angel." this doesn't read right to me. You might try God rejected making me an angel.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2022
Comment from Wendy G
Sorry, it doesn't seem to flow well, and I can't get the gist or meaning of it. It seems that there are so many rules (an excessive number!) that you are just pegging the acceptable words together. What does "God reject me make me an angel actually mean"? Is he an angel or isn't he? Is the father God ? If so it should have a capital.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022
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Sorry, it doesn't seem to flow well, and I can't get the gist or meaning of it. It seems that there are so many rules (an excessive number!) that you are just pegging the acceptable words together. What does "God reject me make me an angel actually mean"? Is he an angel or isn't he? Is the father God ? If so it should have a capital.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2022
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Thanks.
Comment from Janet Foor
This is anything but simple! I read the notes over twice and I commend you for stepping up to the challenge. I think you met the requirements using the required words and not using any words not allowed. Bravo !
Well done you.
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This is anything but simple! I read the notes over twice and I commend you for stepping up to the challenge. I think you met the requirements using the required words and not using any words not allowed. Bravo !
Well done you.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2022
