"The Book of Death"
Viewing comments for Chapter 60 "The Killing of Virtue"Is the living really alive and living?
3 total reviews
Comment from Lulube
Damn, I just deleted all that I wrote, so shorter form will be had. Love your concept, that virtue is lack of copulation and we can make up our own minds to overcome this ruling virtue by "killing virtue". great penning
lulube
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2022
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Damn, I just deleted all that I wrote, so shorter form will be had. Love your concept, that virtue is lack of copulation and we can make up our own minds to overcome this ruling virtue by "killing virtue". great penning
lulube
Comment Written 01-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2022
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My work will intensify.
Yes, as this month goes forward until the very end.
(which will represent the death of my only son Jason) March 31st, 2003.
Thanks for your review and your six stars.
They're very beautiful!
Doctor Ricky
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well you already had the will to look around and found a solution. and I don't know how this message came to me again, but thxs,for your ideas.
lulube
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
Yes, it is happening all over. It is sad. People are too busy taking selfies. They are too busy looking in the mirror at their beauty, or what they think is beauty. Beauty is in the eyes of the beholder. Thank you for this poem. It means so much. Have a great day.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2022
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Yes, it is happening all over. It is sad. People are too busy taking selfies. They are too busy looking in the mirror at their beauty, or what they think is beauty. Beauty is in the eyes of the beholder. Thank you for this poem. It means so much. Have a great day.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2022
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About 2 years old.
(when the state came in)
To the Latter-Day Saint Church of Jesus Christ.
Marybelle Road in Manahawkin, New Jersey.
The subject came about with the problems.
( hat were presently happening)
And, it was blamed on Pride.
Thanks for your time and review Carolyn!
Doc
Comment from samantha0930
I feel as if I'm missing the meaning of this poem, and it's because it doesn't really have much context to it. It sounds like you're just repeating the same couple phrases over and over instead of elaborating on them at all or adding anything to it. It would probably be better without the picture too, since I don't see how it relates to the poem, and the whole picture is very dark and you can't recognize anything in it right away without having to stop and try to figure out what it's a picture of. Neither do you need that stanza of information at the beginning; all that information is already on the page outside of the body of your poem, and the 4th line of it is messed up anyways from you copy-and-pasting it. I have no idea why you put a violence warning on it either, since the poem has no mention of violence, other than the word "killing", I guess. You also have a * in the last line in front of the word "virtue". I think the idea of the poem could have been interesting, but to me, it doesn't make very much sense because it's just too repetitive and you don't give enough information to the reader. I don't intend to be mean or anything--I'm just attempting to be constructive so you can see things to improve on.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2022
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I feel as if I'm missing the meaning of this poem, and it's because it doesn't really have much context to it. It sounds like you're just repeating the same couple phrases over and over instead of elaborating on them at all or adding anything to it. It would probably be better without the picture too, since I don't see how it relates to the poem, and the whole picture is very dark and you can't recognize anything in it right away without having to stop and try to figure out what it's a picture of. Neither do you need that stanza of information at the beginning; all that information is already on the page outside of the body of your poem, and the 4th line of it is messed up anyways from you copy-and-pasting it. I have no idea why you put a violence warning on it either, since the poem has no mention of violence, other than the word "killing", I guess. You also have a * in the last line in front of the word "virtue". I think the idea of the poem could have been interesting, but to me, it doesn't make very much sense because it's just too repetitive and you don't give enough information to the reader. I don't intend to be mean or anything--I'm just attempting to be constructive so you can see things to improve on.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2022
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I'm sorry you didn't enjoy this but everybody else gave it six stars.
And, understood it.
Maybe that's because you are not used to an unusual style of writing from the Mind, Heart, and Soul.
Yes the color is the picture is dark but if you look at it closely you'll see a bunch of hands that's why I liked it.
It adds depth to the writing.
And, you didn't realize the star means to go and read the editor's notes?
Doctor Ricky 1024
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Well, one of them did.
I didn't realize that's what the asterisk was for because normally you only use it in non-fiction writing. If I noticed there was another one before the definition in the notes, maybe I wouldn't have mentioned it, because otherwise it just looks like a typo.
I don't mind other styles, and I've written things with abstract ideas and comparisons before to give it more of a hidden meaning. Maybe you were going for more of a vague idea, but the poem doesn't have much substance to give it a clear meaning because you just decide to repeat the same couple phrases over and over in slightly different ways. I looked up "copulation" and apparently it means "sexual intercourse", so the only interpretation I can muster up is that virtue means never having sex, but at some point everyone has to be unvirtuous in order to produce children, or that we all came about due to the lack of virtue by the people who gave us life. Idk if this is correct, but that line is the only hint as to what the meaning might be.
I'm sorry you didn't appreciate being given a chance to learn how to improve anything.
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When it comes to my writing whether I get a one-star poor or six stars exceptional.
And, that's not what's important to me it's my message.
Yes, and whether or not it is learned, absorbed, and works for that particular time period.
I'm not just a writer I'm also a Latter-Day Saint Priest.
Doctor Ricky