Comment from cupa tea

Excellent

Too bad he didn't sit down on something, silly, in the chair that would have given him a bigger fright. I do not have night vision so I totally understand the fear of the dark. Good Story...Good luck...

 Comment Written 28-Feb-2022

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Comment from giraffmang

Good

Hi there,

I think you have a solid enough start here but it doesn't really go anywhere unfortunately. There's no real story to hang the questions and tension on. Basically the lights go off and then there's no resolution.

The first sentence is a little off. It says they're looking at the penguins but then in the next lines, they haven't yet been.

I went inside and as I plugged the phone charger into the socket everything went pitch black with a loud ' blink'- need end punctuation here.

you don't need to put in spaces before end punctuation such as the ?

All the best
GMG

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2022

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Comment from Mickamus J

Excellent

It was a relaxing read. Though there was a sense of fear, abandonment and sense of memory where you are reminded each time you are in darkness. I think that came through and I found myself drawn into that world. Thank you for sharing!

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2022

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