Tanka Collection
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Her Red Hair Ablaze"Romantic Tanka Poems
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Comment from aryr
This was a great Haiku, Gypsy. The picture was one of beauty which no one but you could have described it this way. Your words flowed wonderfully, with grace and dignity. Very well done, greatly enjoyed. Blessed be n hugs!
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2022
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This was a great Haiku, Gypsy. The picture was one of beauty which no one but you could have described it this way. Your words flowed wonderfully, with grace and dignity. Very well done, greatly enjoyed. Blessed be n hugs!
Comment Written 28-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2022
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Thank you very much, Aryr. I hope you are well. Thank you very much for your time and review. Blessed be.
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You are so very welcome, Gypsy, blessed be n hugs!
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
This is a beautiful example of the hai kai. Is the spelling -Kai Kai deliberate? I found your notes really a big help, I particularly liked the blazing red hair in the picture, thanks so much, Gypsy.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
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This is a beautiful example of the hai kai. Is the spelling -Kai Kai deliberate? I found your notes really a big help, I particularly liked the blazing red hair in the picture, thanks so much, Gypsy.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
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Thank you very much, Giddy. I appreciate your exceptional review and six stars. The spelling is kaikai, one word.
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Comment from Mark Schardine
It ends with an enigmatic or even ominous note. Does she live a life of sorrow? Die she shed a tear a moment ago, and not let others see it?
You did an excellent job of presenting a poem that really causes the reader to find interpretations.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
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It ends with an enigmatic or even ominous note. Does she live a life of sorrow? Die she shed a tear a moment ago, and not let others see it?
You did an excellent job of presenting a poem that really causes the reader to find interpretations.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
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Thank you very much, Mark. I appreciate your kind exceptional review and six stars!!
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Comment from AP Apgar
I like this poem - The poem describes the subject in the pretty picture of the girl with the red hair - found it interesting how the first half of the poem went with the first half of the poem and the second half went with the second half of the poem - very clever - good use of words to describe you lower picture - good job
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
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I like this poem - The poem describes the subject in the pretty picture of the girl with the red hair - found it interesting how the first half of the poem went with the first half of the poem and the second half went with the second half of the poem - very clever - good use of words to describe you lower picture - good job
Comment Written 27-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
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Thank you very much, AP.
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Comment from Jasmine Girl
What a clever link of the color of red hair and the color of the sunset. It flows very well from the red hair to the end, a very smooth transition.
Well done.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
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What a clever link of the color of red hair and the color of the sunset. It flows very well from the red hair to the end, a very smooth transition.
Well done.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
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Thank you very much, Lisa, it's always good to hear from you.
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Comment from juliaSjames
Hello Gypsy
So haikai is a sort of comic tanka. I like the over the top explosion of red in your poem. A parody of sorts. Especially with the swans singing their swan song to the sunset.
Thanks for sharing and teaching.
Stay safe and blessed
Julia
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
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Hello Gypsy
So haikai is a sort of comic tanka. I like the over the top explosion of red in your poem. A parody of sorts. Especially with the swans singing their swan song to the sunset.
Thanks for sharing and teaching.
Stay safe and blessed
Julia
Comment Written 26-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
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It's very similar to Tanka but not the same. It started as humorous and even crude, but Matsuo Basho changed that to a more serious form. Haikai is the predecessor of haiku. It's supposed to be a collaborative poem but for the club event it's for one poet.
Thank you very much for your review and feedback. Blessings.
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Comment from lyenochka
You painted a lovely picture with your words here. Her red hair echoes in the red of the sunset. The swan song conjures up a sad tone because that usually refers to death. I guess it is the death of a day.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
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You painted a lovely picture with your words here. Her red hair echoes in the red of the sunset. The swan song conjures up a sad tone because that usually refers to death. I guess it is the death of a day.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
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I didn't know about swan songs... Very interesting. I guess I knew it instinctually.
Thank you very much, Helen.
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Comment from jessizero
You are truly a wonderful poet. I like how the colors change with the progression of the sunset. You always manage to amaze me. Thanks again for sharing your work.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
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You are truly a wonderful poet. I like how the colors change with the progression of the sunset. You always manage to amaze me. Thanks again for sharing your work.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
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Thank you very much, Jessi, it's always good to hear from kind reviewers.
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Comment from royowen
What a beautiful poem, particularly that last line, "where swans sing to the dusk" there singing voice is not the best. Beautifully written Gypsy, superbly done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2022
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What a beautiful poem, particularly that last line, "where swans sing to the dusk" there singing voice is not the best. Beautifully written Gypsy, superbly done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 26-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2022
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Thank you very much, Roy. I appreciate your excellent review and kind words.
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Most welcome