Light is Out There Somewhere
Life of Darkness8 total reviews
Comment from cupa tea
Good description:
Everywhere I turn I am surrounded, smothered and squashed by blackness
I am not sure what is happening. Is he simply going to bed to sleep?
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Good description:
Everywhere I turn I am surrounded, smothered and squashed by blackness
I am not sure what is happening. Is he simply going to bed to sleep?
Comment Written 28-Feb-2022
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
I enjoyed reading your story. You did a great job with the prompt. Your descriptive words create vivid imagery. I felt like I was in the dark as well. I would suggests shortening some of the sentences. They read like run on's. Unless that was your intention.
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I enjoyed reading your story. You did a great job with the prompt. Your descriptive words create vivid imagery. I felt like I was in the dark as well. I would suggests shortening some of the sentences. They read like run on's. Unless that was your intention.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2022
Comment from Wendy G
Interesting story and well written, with the darkness portrayed in a terrifying way. It seems like part of a bigger story, and the reader is left wanting to know if the character finds the light. best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
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Interesting story and well written, with the darkness portrayed in a terrifying way. It seems like part of a bigger story, and the reader is left wanting to know if the character finds the light. best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 27-Feb-2022
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
the hole of darkness is just that...dark. How frightening it is when you cannot see the end of the tunnel. If we walk in darkness, walk in faith not in fear. Walk by faith not by sight which means not by appearance; not by anything actually seen.
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the hole of darkness is just that...dark. How frightening it is when you cannot see the end of the tunnel. If we walk in darkness, walk in faith not in fear. Walk by faith not by sight which means not by appearance; not by anything actually seen.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2022
Comment from Tom Horonzy
I truly wonder in a REM sleep if there is light or are you in complete darkness? Do we dream in color or black and white? Both need light so can we say sleep is darkness? In this story where is your DARK coming from? The heart? Mind?
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I truly wonder in a REM sleep if there is light or are you in complete darkness? Do we dream in color or black and white? Both need light so can we say sleep is darkness? In this story where is your DARK coming from? The heart? Mind?
Comment Written 27-Feb-2022
Comment from kahpot
This type of darkness would have to be the worst, I truly feel for the character in this very absorbing story, an excellent read, very well written and presented, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
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This type of darkness would have to be the worst, I truly feel for the character in this very absorbing story, an excellent read, very well written and presented, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 26-Feb-2022
Comment from Bridge
A very powerful story . Very well written. I could feel the sense of frustration and the pain. The emotion has been very well captured
With regards and best wishes
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A very powerful story . Very well written. I could feel the sense of frustration and the pain. The emotion has been very well captured
With regards and best wishes
Comment Written 26-Feb-2022
Comment from jessizero
There are things we live out in dreams that we have lost on our waking lives. This reminded me of that fact. I hope your character finds the light again. Best of luck.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2022
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There are things we live out in dreams that we have lost on our waking lives. This reminded me of that fact. I hope your character finds the light again. Best of luck.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2022
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Thanks very much for your review.
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Thanks very much for your review.
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Thanks very much for your review.
