Quiet Lawyer
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22 total reviews
Comment from Jay Squires
The entire sequence with Ali making friends with Jewel was so well-written, so accurate (sounding, anyway, to one not used to horses). Good job!
Cordero petted him. [I know this is correct, but I can't get used to the past tense not being "pet".]
Looks like Ali will get her first kiss from Cord before Katherine got hers from coach. You have a real knack for timing in your romances.
I'm glad you're able to spent time there. [I know this was just an oversight and probably already fixed]
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
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The entire sequence with Ali making friends with Jewel was so well-written, so accurate (sounding, anyway, to one not used to horses). Good job!
Cordero petted him. [I know this is correct, but I can't get used to the past tense not being "pet".]
Looks like Ali will get her first kiss from Cord before Katherine got hers from coach. You have a real knack for timing in your romances.
I'm glad you're able to spent time there. [I know this was just an oversight and probably already fixed]
Comment Written 26-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
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I had not corrected it. Thank you for pointing it out. It's now fixed.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
The story about Alexandria and Cord is getting a little more romantic. I wonder if she will return to New York and study law again. I guess we will find out in the following chapters.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
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The story about Alexandria and Cord is getting a little more romantic. I wonder if she will return to New York and study law again. I guess we will find out in the following chapters.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
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Ali will have a problem when it comes time to go back to NYC. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from nomi338
One of the things I like about this story there are levels that are not yet too obvious. I am willing to wade my way through the opening levels because I am confident that the end will reveal a mine field of emotional discoveries that will no doubt blow my mind. Great job.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
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One of the things I like about this story there are levels that are not yet too obvious. I am willing to wade my way through the opening levels because I am confident that the end will reveal a mine field of emotional discoveries that will no doubt blow my mind. Great job.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
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Thank you for understanding. I feel all of this needs to be done before the we jump in, so to speak.
Comment from Anne Johnston
Interesting chapter, enjoyed it very much. Looks like the relationship between Ali and Cord is progressing well. Also a great relationship developing between Ali and Jewel.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2022
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Interesting chapter, enjoyed it very much. Looks like the relationship between Ali and Cord is progressing well. Also a great relationship developing between Ali and Jewel.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You are welcome
Comment from judiverse
Interesting phone call from Alexandra's mother. It seems Alex and Cord knew one another when they were both tiny tots. I enjoyed the effort to tame the wild Jewel. Some progress is being. It shows how much patience it takes to train a horse. Sonia and Rosa have had quite a long-term friendship. It's hard to keep that up when they live so far apart. I do wonder what Alex will do about her job. She can't remain in Texas forever. Great story. judi
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2022
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Interesting phone call from Alexandra's mother. It seems Alex and Cord knew one another when they were both tiny tots. I enjoyed the effort to tame the wild Jewel. Some progress is being. It shows how much patience it takes to train a horse. Sonia and Rosa have had quite a long-term friendship. It's hard to keep that up when they live so far apart. I do wonder what Alex will do about her job. She can't remain in Texas forever. Great story. judi
Comment Written 26-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2022
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No Ali can't remain in Texas forever. That's one of the big issues. Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome. I'm curious to see how it develops. judi
Comment from amahra
As I was reading, I saw a sentence that concerned me, but was caught up in the reading and didn't make a note of it. When I finished reading and tried to find it, I couldn't. But I'm sure other readers will point it out. Anyway, it was a well-written and interesting chapter, Barbara.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2022
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As I was reading, I saw a sentence that concerned me, but was caught up in the reading and didn't make a note of it. When I finished reading and tried to find it, I couldn't. But I'm sure other readers will point it out. Anyway, it was a well-written and interesting chapter, Barbara.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2022
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I'm sure somebody will point it out, or after I finish the story on FS, I send it off to two different editors. Somebody will certainly find it. LOL
Comment from royowen
There's a lot more coming out than first thought, so there is history between Ali and her, and now, of course they nearly made physical contact, but I can understand Cordero feeling restraint, but it seems like it's really developing, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2022
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There's a lot more coming out than first thought, so there is history between Ali and her, and now, of course they nearly made physical contact, but I can understand Cordero feeling restraint, but it seems like it's really developing, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 26-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2022
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Thank you for the kind review and support.
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Most welcome
Comment from papa55mike
Wow! I love the family part and then you add the wonderful horse training phase. Please check this one line near the end; Individual bowels (bowls) or one big one? I personally like bowels. What a wonderfully written chapter. I wish I had a six for you. Best of luck with your book!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2022
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Wow! I love the family part and then you add the wonderful horse training phase. Please check this one line near the end; Individual bowels (bowls) or one big one? I personally like bowels. What a wonderfully written chapter. I wish I had a six for you. Best of luck with your book!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 26-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2022
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LOL I will happily fix that. When I saw I had reviews, I immediately opened up another tab for edits. LOL
Comment from Aubree Lorraine
Seems like a good story. The characters feel relatable. I had to read it twice because the first time it read as though Cordero and Alexandra were related, but I misunderstood. (would probably help if I read the chapters leading up to this one, I'm sure) Side note, I LOVE the name Alexandra. That's my daughter's name.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2022
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Seems like a good story. The characters feel relatable. I had to read it twice because the first time it read as though Cordero and Alexandra were related, but I misunderstood. (would probably help if I read the chapters leading up to this one, I'm sure) Side note, I LOVE the name Alexandra. That's my daughter's name.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2022
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Thank you for the kind review and rereading. LOL
Comment from cat frenette
I look forward to each chapter of your story.
One small note - as accurate is it might be in the long run, you might want to look at the sentence about the apple tarte and maybe change it. :)
"Individual bowels or one huge one?"
I look forward to seeing the next chapter.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2022
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I look forward to each chapter of your story.
One small note - as accurate is it might be in the long run, you might want to look at the sentence about the apple tarte and maybe change it. :)
"Individual bowels or one huge one?"
I look forward to seeing the next chapter.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2022
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I have changed it. LOL Thank you for the catch.
