Quiet Lawyer
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22 total reviews
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Well written.
The story progresses and the flames dance.
Good, naturally flowing dialogue.
Has she made an outcry?"t for this line - Has she made an outcry?" - I can't say I hear this as the way the meaning would be said.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2022
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Well written.
The story progresses and the flames dance.
Good, naturally flowing dialogue.
Has she made an outcry?"t for this line - Has she made an outcry?" - I can't say I hear this as the way the meaning would be said.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2022
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It's the only way I've ever heard it said. I will revisit that area. Thank you.
Comment from Sanku
So you have mastered the advance editor. It makes reading easy .I loved the chapter and the details of Alexandra and Cordero's childhood.The dialogues were very natural,,,
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2022
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So you have mastered the advance editor. It makes reading easy .I loved the chapter and the details of Alexandra and Cordero's childhood.The dialogues were very natural,,,
Comment Written 28-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2022
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It took a few attempts but I think I have it down. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Very well-written chapter and an interesting way to tame a wild horse. Ali and Cord are the perfect lovers to be, except their lives are so very different. I've been enjoying reading their story.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2022
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Very well-written chapter and an interesting way to tame a wild horse. Ali and Cord are the perfect lovers to be, except their lives are so very different. I've been enjoying reading their story.
Comment Written 27-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2022
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Thank you for the support.
Comment from Judy Lawless
This was a good read, Barbara. Ali is beginning to relax more with Cord, and she does seem to be a natural with the horses. Everyone seems to like having Ali around.
A couple of little typos: "Sure did. I(t) was the most efficient way to handle two the same age."
"I'm glad you're able to spent(spend) time there."
"He went in(to) the barn."
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
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This was a good read, Barbara. Ali is beginning to relax more with Cord, and she does seem to be a natural with the horses. Everyone seems to like having Ali around.
A couple of little typos: "Sure did. I(t) was the most efficient way to handle two the same age."
"I'm glad you're able to spent(spend) time there."
"He went in(to) the barn."
Comment Written 27-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
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I had already changed to spend. I guess I forgot to save. Thank you for the catches. I've made the corrections. I appreciate the help
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You're welcome, Barbara.
Comment from Ethan Vandervelden
Good chapter. I am continuing to enjoy this stories progression, and feel like it is moving along at a nice pace. I particularly enjoy the way Cord and Ali talk to each other an the dialogue they share. They seem very respectful of each other and I am enjoying the boundaries you are creating for them.
Really well done! Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
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Good chapter. I am continuing to enjoy this stories progression, and feel like it is moving along at a nice pace. I particularly enjoy the way Cord and Ali talk to each other an the dialogue they share. They seem very respectful of each other and I am enjoying the boundaries you are creating for them.
Really well done! Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 27-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
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Thank you for the kind review and understanding. I get some hits about the boundaries I set. Some think it's too old fashioned.
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Old fashioned perhaps. But boundaries are a lifestyle choice that your characters have chose. I like that you are making them savor their relationship growth.
Also, in my opinion it can give you an opportunity to also show the opposite side of the coin more effectively with a character like Pat, who thus far has not shown the same inhibitions.
I'm
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Pat gets much worse, so we'll see,
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I love this story, Barbara, and from now on I'll share the six stars between the two stories. There is definitely something bad about her ex, and I can see trouble ahead if he finds out where she is. I love how Ali and Jewel are responding to each other, perhaps they have a sense of empathy between them. They are both learning to trust again. Well done, I look forward to the next part. :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
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I love this story, Barbara, and from now on I'll share the six stars between the two stories. There is definitely something bad about her ex, and I can see trouble ahead if he finds out where she is. I love how Ali and Jewel are responding to each other, perhaps they have a sense of empathy between them. They are both learning to trust again. Well done, I look forward to the next part. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 27-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
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I think you're correct. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ulla
So Cordero and Alexandra are getting more romantic with each other, although poor Samson appear to be a jealous about it.
Just on thing: I have question, said Cordero. An 'a' is missing before question.
I like the storyline. Well done. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
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So Cordero and Alexandra are getting more romantic with each other, although poor Samson appear to be a jealous about it.
Just on thing: I have question, said Cordero. An 'a' is missing before question.
I like the storyline. Well done. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 27-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
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Thank you for the catch. I have added the missing word.
Comment from Sankey
This was a great read. All the emotions and dramas are in thee, too. Just one thing to look at. Second one of these...[you two could be a handful.] can you re-word it a bit, the second time, to avoid repetition, only if you want?
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
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This was a great read. All the emotions and dramas are in thee, too. Just one thing to look at. Second one of these...[you two could be a handful.] can you re-word it a bit, the second time, to avoid repetition, only if you want?
Comment Written 27-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
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Thank you. I will check it out.
Comment from BLACKTITANIUM86
I'm starting to get confused with your versatility, where
writing multiple books at the same time. Are you sending
your transcript out to companies like Random House?
Cause like I said before, you are gifted at writing. So
Keep Writing.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
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I'm starting to get confused with your versatility, where
writing multiple books at the same time. Are you sending
your transcript out to companies like Random House?
Cause like I said before, you are gifted at writing. So
Keep Writing.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
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I am searching for a publisher right now. My publisher died of cancer a few years back and am now on the search. Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from BethShelby
Cord likes to teas Alexandra. I can tell these too seem to be falling for each other This is fun to read and it always helps to have a special horse in a western story.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
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Cord likes to teas Alexandra. I can tell these too seem to be falling for each other This is fun to read and it always helps to have a special horse in a western story.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
