Who Will I Be?
Life is a continual process of learning and becoming.3 total reviews
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your poem is very thoughtful, moving, and realistic. If we live to please others, we will never be happy--always feeling we're not enough. God has a plan for EACH of us. As you say, we should strive to please Him.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2022
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Your poem is very thoughtful, moving, and realistic. If we live to please others, we will never be happy--always feeling we're not enough. God has a plan for EACH of us. As you say, we should strive to please Him.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2022
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Thank you for your read and encouraging comments. Much appreciated.
Comment from rspoet
This is an excellent poem for the contest
and includes the required questions.
Many ponder the question of who they will be.
I think your conclusion is very good.
"If I love myself
Care about others
Provide love and
Kindness whenever I can
I will continue becoming the
Who God wants of each man"
Best wishes.
Robert
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2022
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This is an excellent poem for the contest
and includes the required questions.
Many ponder the question of who they will be.
I think your conclusion is very good.
"If I love myself
Care about others
Provide love and
Kindness whenever I can
I will continue becoming the
Who God wants of each man"
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment Written 25-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2022
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Thank you for your read and encouraging comments. Much appreciated.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Good luck and thanks for being who you are.........................................................................................................................
I found some lines uncomfortable with too many words. Line for becoming "what other" instead of the Who. Line 5 Concluded, instead of "what did I Conclude?" Period after liked line eight. last sentence, since you were speaking of yourself throughout maybe 'this' man rather then "each man."
I need not say how ass-u-me is thought of, as may be my opinion. That's ok. You asked.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2022
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Good luck and thanks for being who you are.........................................................................................................................
I found some lines uncomfortable with too many words. Line for becoming "what other" instead of the Who. Line 5 Concluded, instead of "what did I Conclude?" Period after liked line eight. last sentence, since you were speaking of yourself throughout maybe 'this' man rather then "each man."
I need not say how ass-u-me is thought of, as may be my opinion. That's ok. You asked.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2022
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Four stars means adjustments needed. Could you please tell me what adjustments you would suggest?
