Comment from Jenifer Bellott

Excellent

I love that you wrote this poem from the candle's point of view. Your first stanza impressed me because in the first two lines, I felt empathy for man, yet the second two lines elicited empathy for the candle. You finished nicely with the candle's freedom gained by sacrifice. You captured what it would be like to live as a candle. Well done!
I think if you adjust the meter to flow a bit easier and edit a couple grammatical errors (queezed=squeezed, me and the others=I and the others), you'll be all set.

 Comment Written 25-Feb-2022

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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2022

Thank you, I do appreciate your comments.
John

Comment from billscott

Exceptional

What a truly terrific written piece. Your word craft and selection certainly paints a most meaningful picture and story! And what's more? My image here (you borrowed from my gallery) has found a perfect home inside your featured writing! Love it!

 Comment Written 23-Feb-2022

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reply by the author on 23-Feb-2022

Thanks, Bill, for your generous review.

Also your picture was perfect for this little piece, so thanks for creating that image. Top class.

Comment from Moon baby

Exceptional

I really liked this. As I began to read I had no idea where this was going and then it all became very clear. Very creative and very well written. I enjoyed reading your poem and you did a great job. I hope you win the contest!

 Comment Written 23-Feb-2022

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reply by the author on 23-Feb-2022

Thank you, Moon, your kind review is very much appreciated. Also your six stars brightened my day.

I am glad you enjoyed this offering .

Comment from lindafisher

Excellent

What an excellent idea to write this contest entry from the point of view of an inanimate object. You have brought feelings of both happiness and sadness into your story. Good luck in the contest

 Comment Written 23-Feb-2022

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reply by the author on 23-Feb-2022

Thank you so much, Linda, for your generous comments and a positive review.