Pirates (Part one)
A two part story poem.33 total reviews
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Part I of your pirate narrative is excellent in every respect--skillfully composed, well-plotted with specific details, and conveying a strong message about the brutality of such scenes. Good use of the proper terminology
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2022
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Part I of your pirate narrative is excellent in every respect--skillfully composed, well-plotted with specific details, and conveying a strong message about the brutality of such scenes. Good use of the proper terminology
Comment Written 23-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2022
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Thank you Janice for your great review. X
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Dear Author,
The rhyme and meter of your poem sound like an old pirate's tale. I really like your poem because of the wording, the action, and the images you paint with your words.
If there are other poems to follow, I am interested in reading them too.
Exceptional poem! I'm sorry I don't have six stars left for this work.
Good luck in the contest and with all your writing.
Cindy
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2022
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Dear Author,
The rhyme and meter of your poem sound like an old pirate's tale. I really like your poem because of the wording, the action, and the images you paint with your words.
If there are other poems to follow, I am interested in reading them too.
Exceptional poem! I'm sorry I don't have six stars left for this work.
Good luck in the contest and with all your writing.
Cindy
Comment Written 23-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2022
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Thank you Cindy for reading and reviewing my poem. X
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You?re welcome, Linda.
Comment from Carlos' girl
Fabulous poem.weaving a colorful and captivating story. I loved it from the first stanza. An arresting metre with great rhymes that are never forced but telling the story with complete command. You nailed it here.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2022
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Fabulous poem.weaving a colorful and captivating story. I loved it from the first stanza. An arresting metre with great rhymes that are never forced but telling the story with complete command. You nailed it here.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2022
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Thank you for reading and reviewing my poem. The six stars are really appreciated. X
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Always welcome
Comment from Pearl Edwards
I don't think we are ever too old for a good old pirate story. I really enjoyed reading this story poem linda and look forward to reading part two. Cheers
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2022
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I don't think we are ever too old for a good old pirate story. I really enjoyed reading this story poem linda and look forward to reading part two. Cheers
Comment Written 23-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2022
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Thank you Pearl. X
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
Very intense. This was filled with terror. Heartless bandits reaping destruction. Like thieves in the night. The only thing they cared for was the liquor and the treasure. Thank you for such a great story in a poem.
Good Luck.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2022
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Very intense. This was filled with terror. Heartless bandits reaping destruction. Like thieves in the night. The only thing they cared for was the liquor and the treasure. Thank you for such a great story in a poem.
Good Luck.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2022
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Thank you Carolyn. X
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You are welcome.
Comment from jake cosmos aller
a pirate's life told in a poem. Wonderfully done. I like the old-fashioned formal verse format and word choices throughout. I like how you end with the pirate's vowing revenge against the King's men.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2022
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a pirate's life told in a poem. Wonderfully done. I like the old-fashioned formal verse format and word choices throughout. I like how you end with the pirate's vowing revenge against the King's men.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2022
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Thank you Jake. X
Comment from damommy
What a great story told in rhyme. I like the cadence and the fifth line very much. I eagerly await the next chapter. Great descriptions and good imagery throughout.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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What a great story told in rhyme. I like the cadence and the fifth line very much. I eagerly await the next chapter. Great descriptions and good imagery throughout.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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Thank you so much for your kind words. X
Comment from Richard Montfort Cary
What a dandy work of a storied description. I couldn't help but wonder, on this day and in this age, whether the name of the ship was The Ottawa! Looking forward to Part Two.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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What a dandy work of a storied description. I couldn't help but wonder, on this day and in this age, whether the name of the ship was The Ottawa! Looking forward to Part Two.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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Thanks Richard. I appreciate your feedback. X
Comment from pome lover
wow! what a poem. I love the five lines instead of four. I like to do that, too.
You packed a lot of description and thoughts and action into rhyme - plus a bang-up story. And, your readers are hooked and waiting for the next chapter.
I do have two questions: why did the Captain look perplexed? And I don't know why he was cussin at the beginning. He was the captain, why hadn't he gone ashore and left a look-out?
Your rhymes are good and tell a fascinating tale.
Katharine
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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wow! what a poem. I love the five lines instead of four. I like to do that, too.
You packed a lot of description and thoughts and action into rhyme - plus a bang-up story. And, your readers are hooked and waiting for the next chapter.
I do have two questions: why did the Captain look perplexed? And I don't know why he was cussin at the beginning. He was the captain, why hadn't he gone ashore and left a look-out?
Your rhymes are good and tell a fascinating tale.
Katharine
Comment Written 22-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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Katherine he was probably just a grumpy guy. Thanks for reading. X
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sometimes I get too detail-ly.
Comment from Laurie Holding
Wow, I'm so happy to have stumbled upon this fabulous story within a poem! You've got me on the edge of me seat, argh, for part two! Great rhymes, interesting stanza length, and a first-rate story. Good work, and I wish you so much luck!
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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Wow, I'm so happy to have stumbled upon this fabulous story within a poem! You've got me on the edge of me seat, argh, for part two! Great rhymes, interesting stanza length, and a first-rate story. Good work, and I wish you so much luck!
Comment Written 22-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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Thank you Laurie. I really appreciate your comments. X
