Can You See now
personification attempt12 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Can You See Now?, is very funny and makes the readers see clearly that someone has ditched his cheaters for contacts. The situation "lens" itself to humor.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2022
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This poem, Can You See Now?, is very funny and makes the readers see clearly that someone has ditched his cheaters for contacts. The situation "lens" itself to humor.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2022
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Lens... very good Bill
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
To write about oneself is not an easy thing to do. But you hit the jackpot on your story. Never lose faith in yourself. I know it is easy to do when things go wrong but remember who you are and where you came from. Your mom and dad loved you.
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To write about oneself is not an easy thing to do. But you hit the jackpot on your story. Never lose faith in yourself. I know it is easy to do when things go wrong but remember who you are and where you came from. Your mom and dad loved you.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2022
Comment from lyenochka
Well, this is certainly an offended pair of glasses. I hope the owner will make amends and be sure to use the "eye candy" to look more intelligent. Lol.
Comments:
"lifted me" (extra space follows here before the rest of the sentence)
"as well."
The following sentence was rather convoluted. I understand what you mean but it might be clearer as two: "They couldn't frame you as handsomely as I, personifying your false intelligence, which you'll prove, when they fall to the floor, leaving you unable to see clearly."
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Well, this is certainly an offended pair of glasses. I hope the owner will make amends and be sure to use the "eye candy" to look more intelligent. Lol.
Comments:
"lifted me" (extra space follows here before the rest of the sentence)
"as well."
The following sentence was rather convoluted. I understand what you mean but it might be clearer as two: "They couldn't frame you as handsomely as I, personifying your false intelligence, which you'll prove, when they fall to the floor, leaving you unable to see clearly."
Comment Written 23-Feb-2022
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the Personification contest. You followed the rules of the contest well.
I like the personification of the glasses ... Very clever.
The story flows nicely and it's easy to follow.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
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Excellent entry for the Personification contest. You followed the rules of the contest well.
I like the personification of the glasses ... Very clever.
The story flows nicely and it's easy to follow.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
Comment Written 23-Feb-2022
Comment from in777wr#
Very interesting story. The way this story is written clearly personifies the topic, without mentioning it directly. The story is strong, and captivates the reader. It flows well. It was very descriptive, and I can imagine that the person being written about would be able to see her! Nice job.
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Very interesting story. The way this story is written clearly personifies the topic, without mentioning it directly. The story is strong, and captivates the reader. It flows well. It was very descriptive, and I can imagine that the person being written about would be able to see her! Nice job.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2022
Comment from Ulla
I'm not quite sure what it is you want to personificate. Is it the review or is it referring to a muse. But someone feels let down. I would really like some clarification. It's well written, though. Good luck in the contest. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2022
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I'm not quite sure what it is you want to personificate. Is it the review or is it referring to a muse. But someone feels let down. I would really like some clarification. It's well written, though. Good luck in the contest. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 23-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2022
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I have the glasses speaking. They become jilted for another love to stroke the wearers ego.
Comment from BethShelby
Oh, I see. You personified the glasses. Nicely done. The eyeglasses made the wearer look studious but in the end the choice was made for contacts. Who wants to looks studious when you can look beautiful. Some people do see glasses as eye candy. I know of few who wear them with clear lenses. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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Oh, I see. You personified the glasses. Nicely done. The eyeglasses made the wearer look studious but in the end the choice was made for contacts. Who wants to looks studious when you can look beautiful. Some people do see glasses as eye candy. I know of few who wear them with clear lenses. Nicely done.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2022
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Appreciate your kind words.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This fiction speaks your liking someone at his personality at a certain time and later you noticed a change in his behaviour you could not understand the exact reason, rather you think maybe it because of your change in identification; well said, well done; post more. ALCREATOR LITT DEAR (D R)
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This fiction speaks your liking someone at his personality at a certain time and later you noticed a change in his behaviour you could not understand the exact reason, rather you think maybe it because of your change in identification; well said, well done; post more. ALCREATOR LITT DEAR (D R)
Comment Written 21-Feb-2022
Comment from jessizero
Awesome job with the personification! I loved the phrasing and the sentiment behind it. I never would have thought of this. Good luck with the contest!
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Awesome job with the personification! I loved the phrasing and the sentiment behind it. I never would have thought of this. Good luck with the contest!
Comment Written 21-Feb-2022
Comment from lancellot
Well, it speaks, that is true. I like the choice of objects to personify. Glasses are common to many people and therefore you may get many voters who can relate. That is always a good thing in a contest.
Good luck in the booths
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Well, it speaks, that is true. I like the choice of objects to personify. Glasses are common to many people and therefore you may get many voters who can relate. That is always a good thing in a contest.
Good luck in the booths
Comment Written 21-Feb-2022
