Who, Me?
A Flash Fiction12 total reviews
Comment from Theodore McDowell
Great story for the contest. I love the way you started and ended the story with the same sentence. Nice dialogue throughout the story. Well done and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2022
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Great story for the contest. I love the way you started and ended the story with the same sentence. Nice dialogue throughout the story. Well done and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2022
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Thanks for reading and your kind review. I appreciate both!
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
You will get attention on this one. And at the end, you need to calm down, is to the point. I enjoyed reading your poem. It shows you have a great imagination. I wish you the best. Take care, good luck.
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2022
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You will get attention on this one. And at the end, you need to calm down, is to the point. I enjoyed reading your poem. It shows you have a great imagination. I wish you the best. Take care, good luck.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2022
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Thanks for reading and your kind review. I appreciate both!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I enjoyed reading and the ending was cute.
"You need to calm down, "hissed Paula. (ending quotation marks need to be moved closer to the comma after down)
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2022
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Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I enjoyed reading and the ending was cute.
"You need to calm down, "hissed Paula. (ending quotation marks need to be moved closer to the comma after down)
Comment Written 22-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2022
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Thanks for reading and your kind review. I appreciate both!
Comment from LisaMay
Hahahaha.... yes indeed - a classic case of 'the pot calling the kettle black'. Each situation had its flashpoint for anger to erupt. The dialogue between them is handled very well. I like how the line "You need to calm down" opens and closes the story.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2022
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Hahahaha.... yes indeed - a classic case of 'the pot calling the kettle black'. Each situation had its flashpoint for anger to erupt. The dialogue between them is handled very well. I like how the line "You need to calm down" opens and closes the story.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2022
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Thanks for reading and your kind review. I appreciate both!
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
I really enjoyed reading your flash fiction story. You did a great job with the prompt, very creative. You created very good imagery. The image you chose works perfectly.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2022
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I really enjoyed reading your flash fiction story. You did a great job with the prompt, very creative. You created very good imagery. The image you chose works perfectly.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2022
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Thanks for reading and your kind review. I appreciate both!
Comment from RGstar
If you had a book out I would read it. Sometimes when reading there is a state of mind that hits a reader when the writing is good. It is as if one can trust there will be no mistakes and simply just relax into the writing in a comfy armchair. To laugh or cry, matters not. I sense your writing, and this is a good piece of writing. I smiled through.
My best wishes.
Have a pleasant Sunday.
RGstar
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2022
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If you had a book out I would read it. Sometimes when reading there is a state of mind that hits a reader when the writing is good. It is as if one can trust there will be no mistakes and simply just relax into the writing in a comfy armchair. To laugh or cry, matters not. I sense your writing, and this is a good piece of writing. I smiled through.
My best wishes.
Have a pleasant Sunday.
RGstar
Comment Written 20-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2022
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Thanks for reading and your kind review. I appreciate both! I do have a book out, it is called, Rabbit--A Southern Summer. It is available on Amazon. It currently has top ratings (5) in three categories, overall novel, Southern humor and Coming of Age. I would love your feedback on the book. Regards, Bill
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Well written. Good story.
You made me feel emotions - means good writing.
You gave me a visual of why I so dislike type A's.
You wanna be a cop - no!
You wanna be boss - no!
You wanna pitch a fit over trivia - please do it during the dating process so potential mates can dump you straight-away (as the Brits would say).
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2022
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Well written. Good story.
You made me feel emotions - means good writing.
You gave me a visual of why I so dislike type A's.
You wanna be a cop - no!
You wanna be boss - no!
You wanna pitch a fit over trivia - please do it during the dating process so potential mates can dump you straight-away (as the Brits would say).
Best wishes.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2022
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Thanks for reading Wayne and for a review that made me smile!
Comment from humpwhistle
Funny how fast the tables can turn, eh? A typical and believable slice of life. I like that you used dialogue to keep the story moving. I'm not sure I care for either of the characters, but that fits well with your theme of manufactured calamities.
Best of luck with the Committee, Bill.
Peace, Lee
"You need to calm down, "hissed Paula. --spacing issue just before 'Paula'.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2022
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Funny how fast the tables can turn, eh? A typical and believable slice of life. I like that you used dialogue to keep the story moving. I'm not sure I care for either of the characters, but that fits well with your theme of manufactured calamities.
Best of luck with the Committee, Bill.
Peace, Lee
"You need to calm down, "hissed Paula. --spacing issue just before 'Paula'.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2022
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Hi Lee--always glad when you stop by. Congratulations for your win on best western story. I've told you before that I've always enjoyed your western posts! Are you warm up North yet? 72 degrees here today. Time to break out the shorts and T-shirts.
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Rub it in, why don't you, Bill. It was 7 degrees when I got up this morning. I'd move south, but I'm afraid my accent and my Red Sox cap would give me away.
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Gotta tell you, lot's of snowbirds here. The accent would be fine. The hat....we could get you a Braves cap,
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Uh, what about my ponytail? I know, I know, tuck it under my Braves cap. I suppose you know they used to be the Boston Braves, right?
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Indeed. Just walked my dog wearing shorts. Another day of 70 +
Comment from Giftedone.Eric Wallace .
Love the great white voice in your opinion great job keep up the good work very unique Words and picture go together overall great job keep up to the word
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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Love the great white voice in your opinion great job keep up the good work very unique Words and picture go together overall great job keep up to the word
Comment Written 19-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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Thanks for reading and your kind review. I appreciate both!
Comment from royowen
Boy, what a shock at the end, never judge a book by its cover, we'll never really know a person till they encounter others on the road will we? Just loved your flash fiction, the ending clinched it as all flash fictions should, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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Boy, what a shock at the end, never judge a book by its cover, we'll never really know a person till they encounter others on the road will we? Just loved your flash fiction, the ending clinched it as all flash fictions should, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 19-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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Thanks for reading and your kind review. I appreciate both!
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Most welcome
