Hi-Yo, Away We Go!
A 100-word Wild West adventure.20 total reviews
Comment from BethShelby
This is neat 100 word flash. For kids these games can feel very real until something happens that hurts and then they need the rescue to get them back. The last sentence show how the wild west ride ended. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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This is neat 100 word flash. For kids these games can feel very real until something happens that hurts and then they need the rescue to get them back. The last sentence show how the wild west ride ended. Nicely done.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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Thanks for you comments - much appreciated! Life was so much simpler back then.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This is an excellent piece of flash fiction--skillfully put-together, descriptive of characters living an exciting life fighting for good and ending with a charming, amusing surprise.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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This is an excellent piece of flash fiction--skillfully put-together, descriptive of characters living an exciting life fighting for good and ending with a charming, amusing surprise.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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Thanks for you comments - much appreciated! Life was so much simpler back then.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a good job with your contest entry, Mystery Author. I enjoyed
reading it. I like the way you led readers on by not giving away the fun ending. That twist was great. I like the image and the informative notes, too.
Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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You did a good job with your contest entry, Mystery Author. I enjoyed
reading it. I like the way you led readers on by not giving away the fun ending. That twist was great. I like the image and the informative notes, too.
Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 17-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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Thanks for your supportive comments, Jan.
Comment from damommy
What a wonderful story told in so few words. I was reading along, wondering how he was going to get untangled from the stirrup. Then the ending! What a great twist.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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What a wonderful story told in so few words. I was reading along, wondering how he was going to get untangled from the stirrup. Then the ending! What a great twist.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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Reading your comments made me feel good. Thank you!
Comment from Ricky1024
"Hi Yo, Away We Go"
This is a 100 Words Flash Fiction Contest Writing Prompt.
Rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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When I was growing up during that period I remember watching Sky King.
The man flu is are playing around helping people.
I remember very little about it since it was in the 50s I was probably about 4.
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I so vividly remember when last she came out and last she became a hero also.
And many others from Zorro to Roy Rogers.
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This was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It's interesting that you wanted to you want to always play departed Tonto in lone ranger?
But at least you never fell off your horse!
Doctor Ricky 1024
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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"Hi Yo, Away We Go"
This is a 100 Words Flash Fiction Contest Writing Prompt.
Rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
...
When I was growing up during that period I remember watching Sky King.
The man flu is are playing around helping people.
I remember very little about it since it was in the 50s I was probably about 4.
...
I so vividly remember when last she came out and last she became a hero also.
And many others from Zorro to Roy Rogers.
...
This was well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It's interesting that you wanted to you want to always play departed Tonto in lone ranger?
But at least you never fell off your horse!
Doctor Ricky 1024
Comment Written 17-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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Thanks for your review and sharing childhood memories. My older brother always wanted to be the Lone Ranger, which is why I always had to be Tonto.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Moving and speedy corrective wild western adventure brings colour with joy and sense of achievement at the success, so the family now enjoys; well said, well done; post more. ALCREATOR LITT DEAR (D R)
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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Moving and speedy corrective wild western adventure brings colour with joy and sense of achievement at the success, so the family now enjoys; well said, well done; post more. ALCREATOR LITT DEAR (D R)
Comment Written 17-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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Thanks for your supportive comments!
Comment from Sally Law
This is a wild ride in a few paragraphs. I love how it ends and the mother running with the lemonade. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sally :))
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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This is a wild ride in a few paragraphs. I love how it ends and the mother running with the lemonade. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sally :))
Comment Written 17-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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Thanks for your supportive comments, Sally.
Comment from humpwhistle
Ah, do I remember those days! Even today, the strains of the 1812 Overture bring out the wanna-be Masked Man in me. Poor Lone Ranger, flubbing his dramatic jump-mount! So embarrassing!
Fun write.
I have one question though, in the first paragraph did you intend to write 'daring' or 'darling'?
Best of luck at the polls.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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Ah, do I remember those days! Even today, the strains of the 1812 Overture bring out the wanna-be Masked Man in me. Poor Lone Ranger, flubbing his dramatic jump-mount! So embarrassing!
Fun write.
I have one question though, in the first paragraph did you intend to write 'daring' or 'darling'?
Best of luck at the polls.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 17-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2022
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Those were the days!
I'm not sure what you refer to with your query about my intention regarding use of 'daring' or 'darling'? The word I used was 'daringly'.
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Sorry. My eyes have been playing tricks lately. Lee
Comment from tfawcus
The Lone Ranger was one of my favourite shows too! Your short piece shows the realism of children as they recreate the wonders that fill their imaginative play. Loved it.
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reply by the author on 20-Feb-2022
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The Lone Ranger was one of my favourite shows too! Your short piece shows the realism of children as they recreate the wonders that fill their imaginative play. Loved it.
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Comment Written 17-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2022
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Thanks for your nice review - I appreciate it.
Comment from lindafisher
I remember the lone ranger from my childhood. The good guys always wore white hats in those days. I like the twist in your story, the heroes being children playing is a stroke of genius.
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reply by the author on 21-Feb-2022
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I remember the lone ranger from my childhood. The good guys always wore white hats in those days. I like the twist in your story, the heroes being children playing is a stroke of genius.
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Comment Written 17-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2022
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Forgive my late response - I am very grateful for your review.
