Brick is Better
100 words10 total reviews
Comment from Wendy G
Brick houses may not be better for your hand however! Maybe punch a pillow instead ... just a suggestion, lol. Your story is well written with a very appropriate image. Best wishes.
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Brick houses may not be better for your hand however! Maybe punch a pillow instead ... just a suggestion, lol. Your story is well written with a very appropriate image. Best wishes.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2022
Comment from Bill Schott
This one-hundred-word flash fiction story, Brick is Better, has the proper word count and gives some evidence that plaster walls are more prone to be damaged than brick.
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This one-hundred-word flash fiction story, Brick is Better, has the proper word count and gives some evidence that plaster walls are more prone to be damaged than brick.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2022
Comment from Patty Palmer
This is a good entry for the contest. It kept my interest and you bring a message for all to see. Punching holes in the walls is not an acceptable way to take out your anger. Anger Management with a therapist can teach you a better way to work out your anger before it does end up with the wife or the kids becoming the punching bags. Great job! Good luck with the contest.
Patty
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This is a good entry for the contest. It kept my interest and you bring a message for all to see. Punching holes in the walls is not an acceptable way to take out your anger. Anger Management with a therapist can teach you a better way to work out your anger before it does end up with the wife or the kids becoming the punching bags. Great job! Good luck with the contest.
Patty
Comment Written 19-Feb-2022
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This story is so funny. I think you could revise it to make the delivery more punchy (pun intended), but the concept is brilliant. Good luck in the contest.
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This story is so funny. I think you could revise it to make the delivery more punchy (pun intended), but the concept is brilliant. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2022
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Ouch! A temper's hand did lots of damage to the wall. I think I would perhaps purchase a punching bag instead a brick house. It cost much money to fix after you have done the damage.
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Ouch! A temper's hand did lots of damage to the wall. I think I would perhaps purchase a punching bag instead a brick house. It cost much money to fix after you have done the damage.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2022
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
Clever. This hit home. I have been in the situation. And it was not a great scene. However, we all learn by our mistakes. Or we should. I enjoyed reading your work and the picture goes hand and hand. Good Luck.
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Clever. This hit home. I have been in the situation. And it was not a great scene. However, we all learn by our mistakes. Or we should. I enjoyed reading your work and the picture goes hand and hand. Good Luck.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2022
Comment from irishauthorme
Wow, strong and forceful! A whole story in just 100 words. You showed what this guy is like, his marital status, and his uncontrollable temper.
Many temper holes around the house, hope they are buying, not renting!
Must be sheetrock walls.
This guy will only punch once if they ever live in a brick house.
Maybe therapy, too?
Good work,
irish
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Wow, strong and forceful! A whole story in just 100 words. You showed what this guy is like, his marital status, and his uncontrollable temper.
Many temper holes around the house, hope they are buying, not renting!
Must be sheetrock walls.
This guy will only punch once if they ever live in a brick house.
Maybe therapy, too?
Good work,
irish
Comment Written 16-Feb-2022
Comment from Pam (respa)
-I like the image and story to go with it.
-A very good opening paragraph.
-Effective use of detail in the second
paragraph that explains the situation.
-A very good conclusion with the
quote from the wife, concise and to the point!
-Good luck in the contest; a good entry.
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-I like the image and story to go with it.
-A very good opening paragraph.
-Effective use of detail in the second
paragraph that explains the situation.
-A very good conclusion with the
quote from the wife, concise and to the point!
-Good luck in the contest; a good entry.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2022
Comment from LisaMay
His problem has definitely been going on for too long - so glad he decided to seek help. The wife's sardonic humour brings a smile while making a good point.
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His problem has definitely been going on for too long - so glad he decided to seek help. The wife's sardonic humour brings a smile while making a good point.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2022
Comment from lancellot
True, punching bags are cheaper. This is a nice story and everything is fully understood. You explained the situation, made sure to add parts so readers would not fear an abusive story was coming there way.
Good job.
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True, punching bags are cheaper. This is a nice story and everything is fully understood. You explained the situation, made sure to add parts so readers would not fear an abusive story was coming there way.
Good job.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2022
